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Mindac


College history study. Likes slice-of-life, some romance, OCs, and next generation stuff. Glimglams's best pone!

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To be honest, with the one follower I have I doubt spoilers will be much of a problem, but good idea on the spoiler text anyway.
For "One Bolt, Many Questions,"
None spoiler: I thought the finale was great.
MAJOR SPOILER: For the final conflict with Dimming Sparks: It made about as much sense as an adventure in the actual show would, which I think is perfect for the "Slice of Life" style that you seem to be going for. In other words, I found a few plot-holes, like how if Dimming Sparks can apprehend the Mane 6, she should easily be able to stop two pegasi. But it's not as if the show itself doesn't have major potholes so I never really care, and I definatly enjoyed it. If I were to change one thing, it would be the part about being arrested. It takes me out of the MLP universe when real-world-logic starts to apply. I mean it's not as if Starlight, Sunset, or Trixie had a problem of being arrested for what they did (Starlight kinda enslaved a town and then killed millions of ponies by going back in time). Personally, with the style of writing that you seem to be doing, making it very similar to the show, I don't think it's unreasonable to expect the reader to suspend-a-lot-of-disbelief, cause you kinda need to do that for the show anyway. Overall, I thought it was great.

For the very last chapter: I was honestly worried that it was just going to be the simple wedding and that's it. Twilight and Bolt would have generic freak out, get calmed down by friends, and that's all. But no, it actually had other conflicts. Both the conflict with the vows and Bolt's realization that he would be a prince surprised me, I thought you handled it really well, and I liked it a lot. The return to the balcony and replaying the scene from the first chapter was very nice and actually made me reminisce a bit. The wedding scene felt nicely paced; giving enough details to paint a picture but not dragging on to be annoying. How the vow conflict was resolved I thought was super creative, and made me remember that how far Bolt has grown, he's still a shy dork. Overall, you kept my interest the entire way. Great job on the finale, and wonderful work on the story overall!

Thanks for the fav on my sequel! How'd you like the first one's finale? (I suggest spoiler text just in case others come in and end up reading the stories.)

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Yo you definitely deserve it! I like fiction that resembles what could be an actual show, and granted I haven't been reading fan fiction that long, but yours has definitely been the closest to the show I've ever read. It's definitely my favorite fic so far. Great job!

Thanks for the favorite!

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