I think I found back what was missing? · 10:58am November 30th
Since its inception, I've been very disturbed by my own writing in Four's A Crowd, and not in a good way. It lacked something, and I couldn't put my hoof on it nor really fix it.
And then, after reading other works - as I sometimes do, though not often enough - I think I found it. It's simply character emotion that's deeper than their surface reaction. Especially with Maëva. And also the descriptions are really mechanical, the narration has no passion for what it's describing.