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I like watching all kinds of show from anime to anything else. Don't have much to talk about myself yet maybe later.

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Comment posted by Lilith911 deleted Apr 27th, 2014

Wow. This is like my first real review someone has given me. Thanks.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiesmile::pinkiesmile::twilightsmile::raritywink:

I enjoyed coming up with all the funny moments, the cute moments, and even the sad moments were fun to come up with. The struggles that the foals were causing for the family I spent a long time on. Like Mr. Cake is struggling at the shop, Mrs. Cake wanting her children to get a long with each other, and one that took me some time to notice was how Pinkie Pie was being affected. :pinkiegasp: All she wanted to do was just play with them together, but can't because they always fight. The top things I liked best was that I add things from episodes. Like you said, Pinkie Pie hiding balls all over town. I wanted to give a reason for that. Another thing was add the delivery order that would be the main plot point for the episode "Baby Cakes."

I know I have spelling errors every where and like you said "this happens and then this happens." But all I do is just wright to the best of my abilities and change things when people say stuff.

Thanks for the review.

So hey, here's my comment about your story:
First of all the d'awwwwww moments were strong, and I like the humor you put in at times such as the food fight, and learning why Pinkie had stashed balls all over the town.
While there is a few spelling mistakes, I love your writing style, even if is a bit "this happened, then this happened" at times. Although at times your segues into parts of the story are clever, like showing how the goals have taken a toll on the family, when Carrot Cake calls a Stallion Ma'am and gives him the wrong order because he's simply too tired.
4/5 :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::

"Hi! Fruit Cake here! Wanted to thank you for faving my story, and so did Batman. Now what do ya say?"

"He says thanks too!"

181915 Actually, it wasn't me who added the story to the group, I think it was other member, Vhett. :twilightblush:

Anyway, you and your story are very welcome :twilightsmile:

And thanks for your offer :pinkiesmile: I'll come here if I need any help.

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