A reader. not a writer. I have probly read around 70-100 fics by now (lost count) maybe more. I try and also come with ideas and critic for writers and friends that ask for help.
The Train RideHerman always thought that ponies were an exceedingly friendly bunch, and he figured it was in their nature to be kind and open to all strangers—even to those of different races. But what if he was wrong? What if there was another explanation?by Snuffy
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AsylumWhen Twilight Sparkle went to bed, she had friends she loved and a life she enjoyed. But she awoke to hospital gowns and padded restraints. And the doctors, they keep telling her that she is sick and none of it was real. They’re lying, right?by Daemon of Decay
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The Train RideHerman always thought that ponies were an exceedingly friendly bunch, and he figured it was in their nature to be kind and open to all strangers—even to those of different races. But what if he was wrong? What if there was another explanation?by Snuffy
50,008 words
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FadingThe first, and likely last, human to visit Equestria is dying, and Celestia finds herself powerless to help him.by Rinnaul
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2590886 (soory for my spelling, but english is not my first language) I like the idea and how make it happen from the point of view of Myth. However i would love for you to add a bit more fluff in the form of smaller events, like him comming to term with the staff. (Is the food poisened? is a ambasor a predator and showing a bit too much teeth.) While fluff can be bad for some stories and peoples patients, i belive in a story like this is importen that we see how the world sees him besides the princess. What did the ponies think when they saw their ruler first time with him? What do the guard think of him? And many more qestions. And while is from his point of view, it can still be shown what they think by their action.
Anyways soory for the long rant, but as a reader i endet up with alot of qestions and felt the story moved too fast and skipped a few interesting points i would have loved to see him react in. Keep going with the stoy becuse is a interesting read.
2590886
(soory for my spelling, but english is not my first language)
I like the idea and how make it happen from the point of view of Myth.
However i would love for you to add a bit more fluff in the form of smaller events,
like him comming to term with the staff. (Is the food poisened? is a ambasor a predator and showing a bit too much teeth.)
While fluff can be bad for some stories and peoples patients, i belive in a story like this is importen that we see how the world sees him besides the princess.
What did the ponies think when they saw their ruler first time with him?
What do the guard think of him?
And many more qestions.
And while is from his point of view, it can still be shown what they think by their action.
Anyways soory for the long rant, but as a reader i endet up with alot of qestions and felt the story moved too fast and skipped a few interesting points i would have loved to see him react in.
Keep going with the stoy becuse is a interesting read.
Thanks for adding steel and ichor to your favorites
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Very good! I hope you have a great time here on the site.
1908376 No ploblem just keep going.
1908895 Thanks for that.
I will ask you if i find somthing that i need to understand.