1733425 No problem! There's room for improvement, as there always is, but what's important is that you are definitely talented. In particular, I love your dialogue, because you write all your characters very realistically and I like how it reflects in their voices. From what I can see, there's improvement from previous chapters as well.
If you want to discuss it more in-depth, I can pick out specifics for you over PM :) Either way, I will keep reading.
1539054 Oh, absolutely :) It's adorable. I especially like the build up to the conflict. The insecurities shown are very real, very raw and that's what matters in a story like yours. I think it adds a whole new dimension to the Cakes, and not many people even write about the older background ponies.
Thanks for the Watch!
1733425 No problem! There's room for improvement, as there always is, but what's important is that you are definitely talented. In particular, I love your dialogue, because you write all your characters very realistically and I like how it reflects in their voices. From what I can see, there's improvement from previous chapters as well.
If you want to discuss it more in-depth, I can pick out specifics for you over PM :) Either way, I will keep reading.
Thank you for the favorite! It means a lot to me!
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Agreed. I write about them because they are older, and it's a niche that certainly is worth exploring.
1539054 Oh, absolutely :) It's adorable. I especially like the build up to the conflict. The insecurities shown are very real, very raw and that's what matters in a story like yours. I think it adds a whole new dimension to the Cakes, and not many people even write about the older background ponies.