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Akeion98


Just a guy that likes cooking,writing,talking politics,mysteries and of course ponies.

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What in Luna's name have I done!? · 8:29pm Dec 10th, 2017

I'm definitely rewriting the first chapter to this story. I have no idea what past me was doing and now that I've gotten more practice writing,I know I can do better!

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I like the dialogue, it's very raw and plausible. But the pacing throws me off a bit maybe you should slow it down a bit. Give it some deep interactions between Luna and Dusk to make a bit more natural.

Thanks for the favorite on the Anthro Luna story! What do you like so far about it?

Thanks kindly for the fave.

Hiyah! Thanks for the favorite on The Immortal's Game! I'm really glad that you enjoyed it :twilightsmile:

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It won't be too bad. If I'm wrong that means I will get to learn something new.

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