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jeray2000


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Thank you for faving Breaking (Down The) News.
Your endorsement will certainly make headlines. :moustache:

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Really seemed like a suicide to me, but looking a second time I guess it is rather ambiguous.

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See, this is the point where I tell you I wrote the ending to be a Sonic Rainboom, only cutting it short because of pacing and also the exhilaration of a rainboom would have been a complete 180 on the tone. Rainbow Dash does not commit suicide. She is indeed in the perfect position to most likely not kill herself, which is why she doesn't.

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It was good. I didn't expect the ending, which was a sad surprise in a good literary way.
I don't find quite realistic Dash would commit suicide, while veterans do have very high rates of suicide and depression, she seemed to be in the perfect position to be not-depressed (e.g in a stable job doing something she enjoys with a similar camaraderie to warfare), although it wasn't deal breaking since she could still be an unusual edge case. That's more of a political opinion than a writing one I know.
Some more worldbuilding about what the war was like might have been nice(e.g briefly describing what happened in some battles, major events that occurred in the war). I for one enjoy world building a lot.

Glad to see that you enjoyed This Isn't War! Would love to hear what you thought!

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