• Member Since 17th Feb, 2012
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derpyvio


Name's Jake Not much to say just a brony that likes reading awesome fan fics

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Bit of a late response. But, what are you mmmming and winking about, bro? I'm guessing you like the fact that I put 'Xenophobia' to my favorites.

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Damn that was fast but hey no problem.

I'm actually writing my own 40k fic. I just have a prolouge so far but I'll do more in the future.

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Hey no problem bro It's a great story and I enjoy it very much though my favorite kinda fics are crossovers with Warhammer 40k but not ponified 40k but Space Marines and another race from 40k in Equestria but im getting of track here.

So as to why I enjoy your story? Pretty simple I find the awkward situations hilarious, you portray emotion quite well and I enjoy it mostly for the hot steamy sex.

Though the only thing that kinda bothers me is that you made the human protagonist kinda weak compared to ponies. By that I mean he doesn't have any advantages over ponies, he cant do anything against Unicorn magic, Pegasi are fast and agile, and Earth ponies give a strong enough buck to shatter his legs.
But all this isn't relevant to your story cause the human realy isn't an enemy of the ponies and thus has no need to defend himself still would be nice if he could at least do something against unicorn magic so he wouldn't be thrown around like a ragdoll by a pissed off unicorn.

And what is this about great things on the way? Might these great things include Celestia having sex with the human? You did 5 of the mane 6 so I'd guess that, yes she will.

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