• Member Since 28th Apr, 2013
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Thank you for your feedback! :pinkiehappy:
Yeah, I already heared that a a few people were "disappointed" with the latest chapter, because there was so much exposition in it. But I just like to to add, well, "story" into the fic. Not only action, but feeding the AU universe of the fic, in which this all plays in, with history, background, character depth and such.

I think I understand what you mean, I try. Thanks. ^^

You're very welcome! The story has a lot of promise, and it is going in a direction that I love wholly.

One small suggestion I'd like to make, if I may, is to find a way to make the large blocks of exposition a bit smoother. It's not something that is easy to do, and it takes some trial and error to do (as I found in my days as dungeon master), but it should be able to make the story a bit easier to swallow for those not used to going through a lot of exposition. I myself am quite used to such things, so it doesn't deter me too much, but perhaps improving this facet of your story might make it even more popular!

Here's to hoping more people find your story as I did. Onwards to more awesome stories!

Thanks for reading "Dawn". I'm proud to get your approval. :raritywink:

Thanks for the fave!

2105223 Thank you for writing it!

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