> the oricle in ponyvile > by Durzo Blunt > -------------------------------------------------------------------------- > Neon Ophen > -------------------------------------------------------------------------- Our main character in this story is my own very special bread of character call a "Oricle" if you don't know what a oricle is please read the description and if you have questions please ask me. Now back to the story, our main is a man named NEON OPHEN. Who is the leader of the Oricles, once again if you don't know what a oricle is read the description. ITS VERY IMPORTANT TO KNOW WHAT A ORICLE IS TO GET THIS STORY! Neon is the son of the lord sheogorerath and a angle of love. How they fall in love...nobody knows. Tighter they had 2 kids, a boy and a girl. Both children where born with one retractable wing that could retract into they're backs at anytime. The daughter was born with a beautiful wing from her mothers side and she was kind to all that meet her. But the son was born with a gray wing from his fathers side and he was dark and deminted, you can probably guess that boy is Neon. What's worst is his fathers madness some how was descended on him. When he was 15 his mother begain to notice her son's madness but was little to late to do anything about it. One night Neon became inrage and went out of control as he murdered his mother. He held his dieng mother as tears fell from his eyes as his mother said she didn't blame him for his actions, he swore that he would never hurt a innocent or lose control again. He then set out to kill his father who he blamed for his insanity. Only to find his father killed himself, after all that had happened he then became the lord of madness in place of his father. Joining all the other lords, everything was fine, his land of madness prospered (somehow), his people loved him, and he even fell in love with a succubus named Lilly. But one day the matter of the "Oricles" was brought to the table. Most of the lord were discussed by the idea but only 3 lords agree with it, one was Neon, the other 2 were none other then the lordess of the sun and her sister the lordess of the moon (Celstia and Luna). They were banned from the Court and Neon was to be turned into a oricle for his treachery, neon could only watch as his land was destoryed right in front of him. After 1000 years had passed neon had done so much as a Oricle. He had become wise and strong, he had saved countless dimensions, stopped world war 3, and kicked death in the dick for his mom. He had also recruited many people into his army, Altir for the assassin creed, Alex mercer from prototype, theses were his best men and his inner voices of right and wrong. But his next assignment would send him to a land of pony's and magic. But he doesn't know that yet. So begins our little story with Neon waking up to a banging on his bed room door. > chapter 1: the arrival > -------------------------------------------------------------------------- Darkness...is it evil or is it good, Neon ask himself is everyday of his immortal life. 'Why do I have it inside of me', Neon thought to himself, questions like these hunted Neon's mind like his dark pass. Neon laid in his bed looking at the ceiling in deep thought, he often did these when he had nothing to do. "Master?" A voice called from the outside of Neon's large bedroom. "Yeah?" Neon called back, he got out off his bed and headed to the door, as he opened it a little grunt stood in front of him. Neon smiled down at the grunt who was very nervous and afraid that his master was upset at him, Neon keeled down to make the grunt feel less scared and it worked. "What is it grunt?" Neon said in a calming tone, one that would come down any child, trying not to frightened the alien anymore then he all ready was. "You got orders to got to a new dimension today." The little alien said in a more happy tone! Happy that his master wasn't mad at him. Neon had nearly forgot he had to do that, he smiles as he thanks the little alien and tells him he can have the rest of the day off. The little alien squels in enjoyment, as his master goes back into his room to get ready. Neon open his closet which is filled with both weapons and clothes. "Were is it, were is IT?" He mumbles to himself trying to find his favorite weapon. "There it is." he said as he grabs his huge sword form his close. He then puts on his trench coat full of weapons and heads to his portal room. He heads into the portal and is teleported to the his desired destination, in this case, Equestria. When he opens his eyes he finds himself on the edge of a forest. "Weird..." Neon says out loud, he looks around and see's a town to far away, Neon smiles at seeing the town, it meaning there were people in this dimension. But as he gets closer to the town he notices something strange. "Are those...pony's?" Neon says as he see's a very brightly colored mare walk into town. Neon not knowing what the fuck he just saw had two options, he could stroll into town like nothing was wrong or get to know the thing his was to protect. Neon decided to play it smart and went with stealth, he ducked his way into a dark alley and watched the ponies, to his surprise they acted like humans did, walking around, talking, living out they're life's. Neon could not help but think this was the weirdest thing ever but he still had a job to do. Just then he saw a mare with a cream colored coat and a red mane getting mugged right in front of him, he was glad the alley was dark or else the mugger would have seen him. *Rose pov* For Rose it was a normal day, wake up, go to work, leave work, wake home, go to sleep, but half way there her day she gets mugged, out of nowhere a stallion runs up to her and try's to take her Saddlebag, she tried to run but the stallion was a unicion and kept pulling her back, right before he could get away a metal chain flew out of the alley way and warped itself around the stallions neck and pulled him into the dark alley, Rose couldn't see what happened in the alley, but after a few seconds her saddlebag landed right in front of her. she looked down at the saddlebag and then back to the dark alley to see a pair of red and blue glowing eyes peer back at her, she froze with fear, but then she was drawn to the eyes, those eyes, something about them made her move closer to the alley. She could soon see the being that saved her life, it waked on two legs and was very tall and only had fur on its head and face. It also had a strange necklace on its neck. It wore what looked to be a trench coat and it had hands instead of hooves, it stood twice her size and was looking at her with those eyes....she just stood there wanting to know more about this creature. She walked up to it very slowly as to not scare it away, but it did not move but keeled down to her eye level. She just stared at it wanting to know more. "Rose!!!!" A voice yield at her, snapping her out of her trance, she looked behind her to see her friend Octavia walking up to her. "Rose what are you doing in the alley?" she said, Rose turned back around to tell the creature to run, only to find it wasn't there anymore. "No reason," she lies, but as she turns to leave she see's a necklace on the ground, its The same necklace the creature was wearing, Rose picked it up and placed it in her saddlebag. As she leaves the alley she hopes to see creature again only hoping to know more about it. End of chapter one. > Update > -------------------------------------------------------------------------- There will be a will be a up coming update for this story. You all should know that this was my first ever shot at trying this. So it turned out pretty bad, I am really good at coming up with the story just not so good at writing it down. So do to my story getting more dislikes then likes that I'm going to have someone else type the story while I tell them how I want the story to go, also I am in need of some oricle OC's so please pitch those at me and I will try to get them in the story if I can. I will see you guys......later, Wolfpile out. > OK restart... > -------------------------------------------------------------------------- OK since I made this story out of a complete crap thought I'm remaking the hole damn thing Since some people don't know how to be helpful and help me with mistakes I'm just ending it tell I can come up with a better way to restart this And sorry to any of you who liked this story but do to so much hate commits I have to redo this. Also I need help with remaking this so if anybody want to make this into a great story with me then please email me. Also to all you people who were wondering...........I'm made the word oricle with a "I" because i saw somebody else have it like oracle so I didn't want it to look like I copied.......?I'm doing this at 11:56 pm I need to get some sleep for school tomorrow so I can't work on this right away, give me...............I don't know, a few day? 3 tops before I start the remake. P.s And now you all have bloody noses Wolfpile out