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Oooh! Twilight's jealous! All her friends have found their love but Twilight. But no thanks, she'll stick to reading spells.

On a day trip to meeting Princess Celestia, she spies a handsome boy so called "Moon Swift" walking by in a royal tuxedo. Finding out he's Trixie's older brother (Not True!) , she insists she has no chance to capture his love.

I'm going to give it a try.

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Some pacing problems here and there, and feels rushed a lil
Still with a lil more pacing is a good start.

Yeah I did rush a bit, thanx Mard. I'll work on that. I did this way over my sleepy time lol

"Yay. Oops. Too loud?" :yay:

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Yeah. This definitely needs work in the pacing department.

Looking back at these as memories, I was 10 years old at the time of writing. Definitely cringe and terrible pacing, but I've improved. Thanks for the commentary haha

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