• Member Since 27th Mar, 2013
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It's been three years since the crash that shook Canterlot, and most of the ponyfolk have forgotten about it. After some petty theft at the Apple family farm, an alarm goes out throughout Ponyville.

Fluttershy only thought she was safe from it.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 8 )

i'm going to fave this for now and judge wether or not to like or dislike it when the next chapter is released

Two things:

1) Always make the capters a 1,000 words or longer.
2) Post a finished chapter or post nothing.

Not much to add.

Never.
Ever.
EVER.
Post incomplete chapters.
Makes you look needy and hurts the story.
Also, unless doing one-shots, try and have chapters longer.
At least 1-2k words minimum.

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Noted. :twilightblush:

In anycase, the full things is up now.

I like where this is going. No glaring issues that I can really give you feedback on; it reads well and retains interest. The descriptions are good and I can follow the flow of events easily.

to quote the medic,: well that looks good. i'd like to see more of this

I like the suspense, that much is certain. Aside from what has already been pointed out (Post at least 1,000 words etc) this is turning out to be a good story.

Please continue :pinkiehappy:

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