I'll give this a shot. Just be sure to keep any potential Twilight or Celestia chapters taged so I can skip them, ok? Those ships squick me out as much as AppleMac does, and for exactly the same reason. x = x = x = ...and needless to say... x =
Luna gets a pass, however, seeing as she is mearly the SISTER to Spike's foster mother and Twi's godmother, not the foster mother or godmother HERSELF.
Overall it's a good clopfic, however, some grammatical errors and spelling errors are there. The letter 'i' is capitalised regardless of its position in the sentence.
Not bad, not bad. The mistakes sometimes made it hard to figure out what you were saying, but I won't dwell on that, because I figure you've heard it already. In any case, I like the idea, Spike is my favorite character and seeing him get around is quite the treat.
And if you need someone to do corrections on your story before you publish it, I'd be willing. Just an offer, take it or leave it, it doesn't make the story in less fascinating.
There was once named a dragon named spike, he had just woke up and tried to figure out how to get his bang on with these sexy and delicious ponies. this week on EQUESTRIAN PIMP!
I'll give this a shot. Just be sure to keep any potential Twilight or Celestia chapters taged so I can skip them, ok? Those ships squick me out as much as AppleMac does, and for exactly the same reason.
x =
x =
x =
...and needless to say...
x =
Luna gets a pass, however, seeing as she is mearly the SISTER to Spike's foster mother and Twi's godmother, not the foster mother or godmother HERSELF.
Okay, I like this story and want to see you write more, but you really, really need to get a prereader to catch all those mistakes.
Overall it's a good clopfic, however, some grammatical errors and spelling errors are there.
The letter 'i' is capitalised regardless of its position in the sentence.
>>EndGamer
I completely agree, my english not is veery good still. If i had ANYONE to read before, i would indoubtably
>>Starcat5
I understand, my chapters going to be labled by character spike with
Thumbs up
Not bad, not bad. The mistakes sometimes made it hard to figure out what you were saying, but I won't dwell on that, because I figure you've heard it already. In any case, I like the idea, Spike is my favorite character and seeing him get around is quite the treat.
And if you need someone to do corrections on your story before you publish it, I'd be willing. Just an offer, take it or leave it, it doesn't make the story in less fascinating.
ya did well on this except as many people have already said the grammar and such. good job altogether though thumbs up for ya
well im not gonna lie, the spelling is horrific, just get someone to check it, but beyond that, its actually quite good.
There was once named a dragon named spike, he had just woke up and tried to figure out how to get his bang on with these sexy and delicious ponies. this week on EQUESTRIAN PIMP!
The grammar and spelling were atrocious. I just want you to know that this was the reason I didn't read on.