Nightmares and Tea

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Octavia felt silly, but waking Vinyl Scratch from her sleep was really the only option. A nightmare had scared her from her bed, and now she just needed somepony to talk to for reassurance. Her friend figures a little tea and a chat might just do the trick.

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Adjutant Stormy

Adjutant Stormy #1 · Apr 25th, 2013 · 1 · ·

I liked it!

I like your characterizations of these two a lot, and this was a nicely done slice of life. Now my only complaint is that I have to root through and find anything else you've written instead of going to bed!

That, and one typo "now that you are down her with me,"

Divine Path

Divine Path #2 · Apr 25th, 2013 · · ·

An interesting concept!
I enjoyed this.
Excellent work, dear Author!

Shadow_Wolf

Shadow_Wolf #3 · Apr 25th, 2013 · · ·

Very well done! Five stars

distortedtruth92

distortedtruth92 #4 · Apr 25th, 2013 · · ·

Hey Sweetie, Imma put this on my read later list so because I have to go to class. I'll see you in 3.5 hours

reader238

reader238 #5 · Apr 25th, 2013 · · ·

welp i give this story 5 and a

Metool Bard

Metool Bard #6 · Apr 25th, 2013 · · 2 ·

Honestly, I've seen this kind of story done better. The concept is alright and all, but I feel that this would've been a lot stronger if we actually saw the nightmares talked about in this piece. This is just Vinyl and Octavia standing around and talking. It's, kinda hard to be invested in that.

Also, you kinda leave me wanting more, and not in a good way. You bring up some interesting ideas and questions, but you fail to address them. Why did Octavia have this nightmare? What was Vinyl's relationship with her folks? I'm sorry, these questions can't really be answered in a one-shot.

If you plan on expanding on this, great. If not, well, what's stopping you?

Watchpaw

Watchpaw #7 · Apr 26th, 2013 · 1 · ·

2480067 Oh, geez. Sorry about the typo. I try to reread hard and catch those, but a few are bound to slip by. Ugh...why that one? Hope I didn't keep you up too late, but I am glad you enjoyed it.

2480161 Again, thanks! I look forward to next time, dear reader.

2480447 Woo! Thanks! Can they be blue stars? I like blue...

2481376 *gasp* You must have really enjoyed it! My most humble thanks, good reader.

2481421 Eh, I wanted to put the focus on their relationship. The nightmare was just kinda a way to do that, so I didn't feel it was that important, really. It was more a means to an end than the actual focus, but I do see your point. I do get invested in the dynamics between two characters, so 'filler' usually makes up my favorites of anything, but that's just me. As for your questions; sometimes you just have a nightmare. There wasn't anything really that deep about it. I know I can have a great day, but my dreams aren't always easy that night. Now, your second question is interesting. I will put more thought into that, because, you are right, it may have some potential for the future. I won't likely expand on this particular idea (Nightmares and Tea), because I, personally, feel done with it. What stops me from writing multi-chapter stories is that I get really busy or don't feel like writing and I don't want to update slow and disappoint my readers. I am kicking around an idea that would likely span multiple chapters, but I don't know if I will pursue it. Thank you heartily for the feedback, though. I really do enjoy communicating with the folks who read my stuff. I am glad you asked questions, because that does make me explain myself and gives me insight into what I can do better. Admittedly, I know this is not my strongest work, but I still had fun with it and I wanted to share it. But, thank you again for the constructive criticism. If you read something from me again, I will hope it sits better with you.

Metool Bard

Metool Bard #8 · Apr 26th, 2013 · · 1 ·

2483103 Hmm, I see. I guess I'm just used to stories where dreams are windows into the psyche.

Taking what you said into consideration, well, I still would've preferred seeing the nightmare to having Octavia just tell us about it. Other than that, it's alright.

Divine Path