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Good I await more
I'll recommend this to my viewers (Over 700)
Clitoris is the scientific name, so you shouldn't feel dirty using the full word. Also, this story was really well written, and I laughed at Fluttershy's assertive attempts at filly control. Please continue.
2554182 The problem isn't that certain words feel "dirty". Dirtiness is the essence of this whole fic. It's that the only way I can tell that my writing is sexually intense enough is if it arouses me while I write it, but the word "pussy" and other words like that are so overused that they just don't have an effect on me anymore.
Also, the CMC are children and so this story is a child sex fic, and it just doesn't feel right to describe the sex with words that a child wouldn't know. The reader should really experience the youth and innocence of the characters involved, and using very adult words just doesn't get that feeling across.
I also don't want the characters to seem merely like sex objects, like emotionless sacks of meat who exist only for the reader to fantasize about manipulating. That's what they are, that's why people read this stuff, but writing them like that just seems lazy and pandering. Most clopfics don't care about the emotions that go hand in hand with sexual arousal, so it's hard to take them seriously. It just feels like I'm reading a bad porn video. Why do that when I could WATCH a bad porn video? They're everywhere, they're free. (ADULT, 18+, consensual, porn. Anything else is morally wrong / illegal / heartbreaking, don't even joke about it)
In my story, I want to strongly convey the fact that the characters are innocent little fillies who are embarrassed and not fully educated about certain parts of their bodies, so that when the story needs to invade their special areas it feels all the more naughty. Adults know most of what there is to know about human anatomy and sex, so there's a certain pleasure at the thought of a young person who doesn't know anything at all and is uncomfortable talking about it or doing sexual acts. It's perverse of course, but there's absolutely nothing wrong with being a pervert. It's all fantasy, just neurons firing and chemicals moving around in one's brain.
Sorry, this reply sorta turned into a rambling personal note-taking session, but this was good, it helped me clarify some things about my own story that I hadn't really thought of.
Also I'm definitely gonna continue this story, but I NEED to take a break from it for a short while. I don't like what it's doing to my thoughts. I need to get back into my regular state of mind for a bit.
2556843 I see what you're saying, and I think that could come across more if you removed the words "vagina" and "sexual." Using those words kind of breaks the illusion of their innocence, at least from my perspective. Of course, this can wait until you're done with your brain bleaching session.
2563450 "Privates" or "private parts" are the most childlike ways to refer to that area, but when I was growing up I heard children say "vagina" plenty of times too, because that's the word that doctors, teachers, or parents will teach kids to say. It all comes down to what each individual child is comfortable with.
Either way, there's just not many words available for me to use if I don't want to break the youthful impression. This is actually the hardest part about writing this story, but I wanted the challenge. XD
EDIT: Also, I think it kind of works too, because as Scootaloo starts to give in to her sexual desires and starts playing with herself (there's another good phrase oh god), its like she's becoming less innocent, which allows me to use some of the more adult terminology without seeming out of place. Then when Scooty gets caught by Sweetie, she snaps back into her childlike mindset, and I start using "privates" again.
If I was a good writer I would have done that on purpose, but unfortunately its just a lucky coincidence. I'm definitely gonna keep this in mind for the rest of the fic.
I'm a big fan of ScootaBelle. It's pretty damn adorable.
I look forward to seeing this continued.
The story was superb! Believable characters and it didn't feel cheap.
Not gonna lie. A little confused about your state of mind.
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Funny you should question my state of mind, as I was just doing the same thing.
I regret to announce that I will not be continuing this story, because I cannot deal with what it is turning me into. It exposed a part of me that I would rather not ever know existed. I never should have experimented with this kind of storytelling.
I will keep this chapter up for anybody who wants to read it, but I need to get some shit straight in my head so I am leaving now and will never return to this account or use this name ever again.
Goodbye.
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I hope you can accomplish what you are aiming for and wish you the best of luck in reclaiming your sanity.
3042929 I wish you luck. I wish that I had the decency to put down the pencil and drop foal clops but, alas, I'm too stubborn. You really are a good writer. You may not want to do foal clops or maybe even any clops at all any more but regular fictions might be your cup of tea (Taking a guess). I respect your decision, whatever that may be. And I also wish you all the luck in the world. Goodbye.
I don't think you really needed to put any of that down.
Okay, I've gotten some shit straight in my head. I have discovered and learned to accept something about myself that most people would hate to know, but I have learned that I can still live a wonderful, virtuous, and law-abiding life despite that. I am also getting the professional help I need in order to stay on the right path. Given the genre of this story, I think it should be quite obvious what I'm talking about.
The future is looking bright again.
I might continue this story, as long as it doesn't put me into a dark place like it did before. I'm not sure when, so I'll just say "maybe soon perhaps" and disappear.
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what are you talking about?
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are you attracted to children?
If youre attracted to foals, youre not attracted to children just because of that, trust me, i'm rather young, not gunna say how old, but, unless you look at a kid and want to fuck them youre good, foals are just small ponies. if thats all it is, youre 100% fine, if ypure still having trouble i highly incourage you to message me :)
If you're anything like me, you'll be back to check on this story's comments some day, even if you never sign in again as SpecialCuteHugs. If and when you do visit and read this comment, if you haven't figured it out yet, I hope you'll know you're not alone. Maybe writing was too much for you. Maybe reading instead will give you a way to safely explore your thoughts and figure out how you relate to other people. If you want that, I strongly recommend reading the story featured prominently on my profile called Fallen Angels. You might or might not not agree with its message, but I hope that you'll at least remember it when, if you're like me, you feel alone. Also know that you can contact me under any screen name to chat if you wish.
Well written. I hope to see more,
Why do good stories go unfinished?
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I'm asking that very same question myself.