Dear diary,
The last few days have been the most wonderfully spectacularly amazing of my entire life. I originally thought the first time I saw Princess Celestia raise the sun was the best. Then I believed it was when Princess Cadence became my foal sitter. After that it was when Princess Celestia choose ME to be her personal student. Arguments could be made for the night I met Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy, AppleJack, Rarity, and then rescued Princess Luna; becoming the Element of Magic. Those arguments would fail as that the Sun never rose when this occurred, at least until after Princess Celestia came back.
Just thinking about how I owe it all the magic of friendship… Well, five years ago I never would have believed it. Back when the only thing I cared about were my studies. Learning a new spell was the highlight of my week. Case in point, several of the previous entries depicting the very hour and minute I perfected each new spell. Never, did I ever think that making friends could be so important to the practice of magic. And it was due to my six best friends that today I was crowned the Princess of Friendship. If that wasn’t enough, I’ve become an alicorn as well! How amazing is that!
Anyway, before I entered my old chambers in Canterlot Castle, Princess Luna (formerly Nightmare Moon) gave me my first official royal duty.
I must return to the ruins at the heart of Everfree Forest. The original home of both Princess Celestia and Princess Luna, a place that fell into ruins long ago when the Elements of Harmony were used to imprison Nightmare Moon.
So, tomorrow I will start out on my favorite part of any adventure! I’m going to use every last book and scroll in the palace library in my research! I’m going to have more fun tomorrow than I did today! After all, it will take me hours to find what I need! Hours spent reading and learning! What more can a pony ask for?
Good Night Diary
My Little Pony is owned by Hasbro not Mattel; Flutter Ponies included
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This.
My little pony has always been owned by Hasbro.
Ponies are way too articulated to be a product from Mattel after all.
I will break up my posting into three parts, one for each chapter posted so far.
For starters, there is really no need for the part that is not in italics. That sort of thing is better off being put in an author's note or simply not being posted at all.
Secondly, I'm not quite sure you have Twilight's unique voice down quite right. This Twilight seems just the slightest bit...off. Why is she explaining every minutia of her life to her diary? She wouldn't mention "several previous entries" like she was a third-person narrator.
Also, you use terms such as "coroneted" and "In point of fact" when the correct usage would be "crowned" or "in fact" respectively.
And at the end, the whole "May the magic of friendship always guide every and protect every pony everywhere" doesn't really seem like Twilight Sparkle's way of signing off from her diary. I would imagine that she'd keep a diary or journal in a very scientific manner -- all the better to study from later.
I think it's awesome Twilight's restoring the palace of the two sisters. Does the old castle have any connections to ancient Ponyland, I wonder?
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