• Published 20th Apr 2013
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Our Chaotic Tranquility - Edensola



Eve the draconequus embarks on a journey with a showmare to the Crystal Empire, unaware of the harsh truths that await her in the near future.

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Chapter 15: Tranquility

FINAL CHAPTER: TRANQUILITY

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"Keep all special thoughts and memories for lifetimes to come. Share these keepsakes with others to inspire hope and build from the past, which can bridge to the future." - Mattie Stepanek

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"I wish to speak with the lady."

Mr.Talon looked to Mr.Sham; the dragon's eyes scrolling the strange bug-like creature up and down before he sighed heavily; stating simply. "The lady is out; you know that she isn't present during the night Sham."

Mr.Sham's arm twitched for a moment; before he lowered his head.
"Ah; yes, forgive me, I tend to forget such things."

Mr.Talon shrugged, looking down; a little disheartened himself. "It's fine..."

Mr.Sham gazed outside the window of the hollow corridor they were standing in. The walls possessed a dull grayish color; leaving the mood of the place feeling dismal. "The blizzard has died down."

Mr.Talon nodded, his gaze drifting towards that very same window as he leant back against the wall. "Yes; it always does when she leaves, the weather shifts with the lady's presence."

Mr.Sham looked up; followed by a raspy groan, finding such news irritating. "Why does our lady despair so? Does she not realize that she now has us? Such things of the past do not matter."

This caused the dragon to glare slightly. "Why did you start serving the lady Sham?"

The chamelelon like creature's large circular eyes fastened on the dragon for a moment; unable to answer before he looked up towards the ceiling. "The lady cares for our wellbeing; she is my definition of purity."

Then back towards the dragon. "That is why I wish to protect the lady."

Mr.Talon snickered as his nostrils huffed hot air; he sneered.
"I see; would you like to know why I dedicated myself to the lady's service?"

Mr.Sham looked to the dragon; seething with curiosity once again.
"Oh yes, if you do not mind sharing of course."

Mr.Talon then raised one of his large claws; then pointing to his own eye with interest. "Her eyes."

Mr.Sham cocked his head to the left; puzzled. "Hm?"

The dragon continued. "I am no exile, I am not feared amongst my own; I have no obligation to be here. I am here of my own free will; my own choice." He paused with a smile; as if lost in his own remembrance of the encounter. "For when I'd first seen the lady, I saw the face of a monster. But the eyes of a lonely child."

He looked to Mr.Sham. "The lady carries a heavy burden, one she cannot rid herself of no matter how hard she tries; even after all this, she still sulks, she still spends her day, knelt before that blasted statue. And her nights feeling obligated to go find more to bring back; as if needing something to ease those burdens. Still; even after everything she has created, she still clings to the grievances of her past. Still to this day she waits-" The dragon curled in his claw angrily for a moment.

Mr.Sham couldn't help but interrupt. "Waits for what?"

Mr.Talon looked to the strange creature with a glare. "-To die."

There was a brief silence between the two.

Mr.Talon continued. "If that's the price the lady feels she must pay for whatever she may have done; if that's what she feels must happen, that she must perish at the hands of another, then she truly is a foolish child. And I will wait for any such individual who dares attempt to enter the lady's private sanctum with such motives; and I will tear them apart.....myself...." The dragon snarled beneath his breath. "I will help bring joy to her eyes; that is why; I serve the lady."

Mr.Sham nodded simply. "I see; that is quite the outlook. I to will protect the lady, although my personal motives I shall keep to myself. But if I may ask another question-" He paused.
"-Who has the lady gone to bring back this time?"

Mr.Talon cocked a brow to his comrade before shrugging. "She did not say."

Mr.Sham blinked a bit. "Does she not have an escort?"

Mr.Talon nodded in agreement. "I to would prefer the lady have an escort; but you know how she acts."

Mr.Sham sighed heavily. "I do not like the idea of the lady being in Equestria, the ponies are by far one of the most pickiest races I have ever encountered in my own ventures."

Mr.Talon looked to Mr.Sham; as if a little offended.
"This is the lady we're talking about; she will not be bested by ponies."

Mr.Sham paused; looking towards the ground. "Do not be so quick to judge; ponies have come to surprise many races throughout history on numerous occasions. And even our lady....has her, weaknesses...."

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Ponyville; a town she hadn't seen for quite some time.

It being the dead of night, as expected the streets were basically empty. Eve wasn't afraid as she wore her cowl; treading through the snow covered town square; running her claw along the sides of the houses and occasionally, against some of the snowmares that'd been built by the little fillies & colts. How long had it been since the beginning? It felt like such a long time ago, and the baby draconequus couldn't help but feel lost in that nostalgic remembrance as she made her way through the all too familiar town. It was funny; they seemed so defenseless; it was such a peaceful place. What a fortunate privilege they had. Eve took a moment to glance up at a beautifully decorated banner as she read over the words with a solemn expression. Hearths Warming Eve.... Hm; how interesting, her name was included in this holiday? It was fitting however, this cold winter chill. Either way she had other business she needed to attend to, and she didn't come here to sulk in past memories; she could do that back at home. She came here for one thing.

And as the baby draconequus made her over to a specified area, she'd spread her wings; rising to get a good look through the second story window of a specific house. She placed her claw on the window as she morphed through the solid material, and into the quiet home herself; where she soon stood over the bedside of her most precious memory. And as Cheerilee remained unaware of her presence in her peaceful sleep, the baby draconequus leaned over and ran her claw gently through the mare's mane affectionately. Her eyes fastened on Cheerilee's delicate features; she nuzzled against her gently, but not so much as to awake her. Eve opened her mouth; as if about to say something, but no words came out; there was only silence. She remained in that position for a moment, before pulling back reluctantly and just smiling at Cheerilee; looking down at her. She then turned back towards the window; leaving that room behind once again.

And off into the blanket of stars; off into the luminescent night sky.

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As Twilight sat nestled in her bed;
a wide smile creeped onto her face as her eyes scrolled over an equestrian map. "Hah..."

Spike rolled around in his smaller bed; as he'd groaned softly, soon looking up towards Twilight. "Twilight won't you just go to sleep already? I thought you were done with that whole thing."

Twilight looked back down towards her baby dragon with a smirk. "You're right Spike. Sorry about that." With that the alicorn folded the map; placing it on her bedside desk with a soft smile. She then laid back down, cuddling up against her pillow as she couldn't help but chuckle softly; smiling in her sleep.

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And Even Princess Celestia laid in her bed; wide awake as she recalled the baby draconequus's words to mind.

I am a monster, and I can't be anything else.

There is nothing I can do anymore, there is no point anymore.

Some meetings are only destined for heartbreak princess. Twilight Sparkle, she-

And as Twilight laid in her bed in Ponyville; sleeping peacefully still with that same smile.

Princess Celestia sighed in her own;
recalling one last thing before turning on her side and falling asleep herself.

-She will bring an end to my story. I will wait for her until then.

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Queen Chrysalis snickered as she trotted around her chamber. "It's a race my dear subject."

And sitting in her chamber was an anonymous changeling guard, remaining silent for his queen.

The queen looked back towards him before tossing down a picture of Eve. "The imagination is a double edged sword, it is only a matter of time before the child learns of this; if she hasn't already accepted it. The world will not let such actions fade with time, and where the mind can be the greatest ally; it can also be the greatest weakness. Her days are numbered, it is the inevitable circle of fate that comes with such a story. And there is no need to ponder on such a linear tale."

The changeling subject raised a brow at his queen curiously.

Queen Chrysalis looked towards the ceiling before raising a forehoof to the air; stating simply. "For the end had already been set in stone before the story even began." She continued. "Eve-"

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Eve made her way into the far reaches of the Everfree Forest; to yet again another memorable location.

The ruins of Everfree; where she'd found shelter through times of loneliness, danger, distress; a precious home, but just as much a place of bad memories. This was also the place where she'd assaulted Twilight Sparkle; how time seemed to fly when she thought back to such a troubling moment. She made her way towards the far end of the stone hall; and up onto the circular pedestal; and just sat. She hadn't noticed it at first; but as she buried her head into her knees, she found herself graced by the beauty of the pale moonlight, which had managed to find its way through a gaping hole which could've been perceived as a large window. And as she looked towards that makeshift window up towards the full moon, she smiled.

This peace; this silence, this feeling of clarity and understanding, she was grateful for it.

That before the end, she could spend some time; relishing in moments such as this.

Moments where everything seemed to just go fine.

Where the world seemed to simply hit pause, and she could sit here forever; undisturbed, in her own silence.

Draconequus have been shown to harbor really peculiar traits when raised according to past history. Traits that can rapidly spiral out of control, which is why in the past draconequus were actually hunted and killed in order to ensure the safety of all the races of Equestria. We all know Discord here is goofy and charismatic, now imagine if he wasn't, imagine if he was angry, filled with rage, and overall bloodthirsty.

L-Listen, we don't want any trouble. We'll just be leaving now, r-right Applebloom?

Just run Spike!

Don't you understand what you're doing? You're ruining the very cycle your race is meant to follow, do you think you're the only draconequus who wanted to rebel? To be a part of pony society?

I understand where you're coming from. But there's a saying that fits this situation, those who fail to learn from history are doomed to repeat it. History has shown us time and again, that draconequus are not meant to live amongst ponies in their youth. History has shown us that the risks are far too great to take chances when it comes to situations like this. I don't want to sound like the bad guy, I don't, but you have to understand the way things have to be. With your actions you're risking not only yourself, but the ponies of Ponyville, and I can't allow that.

You know full well,.....I can't let you come with us...

You're immature, brash, and constantly putting everypony in danger with your actions! You don't have the potential to be just as bad as Discord, you could be even worse!

In life, there are times when one must decide, whether it's all worth it. Even if it makes you feel horrible on the inside, even if it doesn't feel like the merciful solution, you have to ask yourself whether or not you're willing to accept it for the greater good of your family, your friends, and everypony as a whole. You've shown me that I am willing, that this is worth it. Princess Celestia asked me to take care of you, and, that's exactly what I'll do. You don't deserve mercy after all this. I've learned that painful lesson today, and in order to ensure that harmony is everlasting in Equestria, I will do my part. Me and my friends, the ponies of Equestria, we are the greater good, and as long as we're around we'll be there to defend it.

Although I guess you can't really blame them. Still wouldn't it be nice though; if we were all able to follow that example of peace, but things just don't work out that way, just life I guess.

ARE YOU STUPID!? THIS CHANGES EVERYTHING!

You're insane....

But draconequus are creatures born with power, and power corrupts those who cling onto it. Such is the case with you draconequus; who grew corrupt over time, greedy, selfish, menacing.

Is this what I taught you Eve!? Is this what you took out of our time together!? To attack fillies and colts?! To kill!? Is this what you learned!? That you had to resort to violence if things didn't go the way you wanted?! Is that what you took from all this sweetie!? I made a wish that someday you'd be able to find the happy life you deserved. That you could live without feeling neglected, that I could take care of you, or alongside and with whoever you wanted. I wanted you to be happy! Is this what I made that wish for!? To see you become...become this!? To see you attack innocent civilians!? Is that what you took from my example? From the short time we were together!?

I, lost anyway.

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"She died the moment she'd left Canterlot."

This was acceptance.

Tears trailed down the baby draconequus's face as she smiled; looking out towards the full moon.

This, was tranquility. And she could feel it, that for a fleeting moment, just like long ago; she was happy.

"THE END."

Author's Note:

The official end to the series guys. Thank you so much for reading. :pinkiesad2:

Comments ( 85 )

I knew profile stalking would lead to something! :trollestia:

Short and sweet, yet every bit contributes to the plot in unique ways. :P

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Lol. And here I thought I was the only one who did that sorta thing. :trollestia:

Wait is this the end? It's complete?
I demand a trilogy! Although that may be unnecessary, to many thing have been left without closure, like the whole deal with the changelings. Also I won't accept anything less than Cheerilee and Eve being reunited!

This doesnt feel finished i hope theres a third one. Cause this ending feels off.

Eden, I thank you dearly for such a wonderful ending, But personally I do not believe this is over, Sequel time again?

Comment posted by Autism Man deleted May 25th, 2013

Excuse me for one moment... Da'wwwwwwwwwwwwww :rainbowkiss:Eve still cute to me... Her island is made of candy and quite frankly I find that adorable. ALSO I agree that there must be a trilogy or if not some kind of side story in which none of any of this happened and like Eve never disobeyed Cherrilee in the first place and her life turned out all happy and stuff and that would be awesome.:pinkiehappy: stupid trollestia :trollestia: making Eve go all insane and stuff:derpyderp2: Roar!:flutterrage:..... I like emoticons....:derpytongue2:

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Wait is this the end? It's complete?

This doesnt feel finished i hope theres a third one.

Yea I didn't want to leave you all on something like a cliffhanger. (Sorry if that's what it feels like.)
But I also like to leave lots of things to interpretation and the imagination. I like the idea of their still being mystery left; unanswered questions, etc. Although I do try to give hints with the characters final actions how events will play out for the future, and let people connect the pieces from there. For all my stories I pretty much leave some space for a possible sequel if enough people want it; kind of like a safety measure while also giving an interesting ending, if a little different from the average one. But yes I did purposely leave a lot of unanswered questions; and if "another" story is what enough people want then I'll likely do it, cause I already know how everything ends for everypony in general anyway. You've gotta think though, this is coming from a guy who LOVED how the first FMA ended. Which felt totally incomplete rofl.

:pinkiesad2::pinkiehappy::twilightblush::yay:

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I'm really happy you liked Eve December, if she got a chance to talk to you I'm sure she'd love you to (but she's pretty creepy/dangerous). I'm really happy I got readers such as yourself who enjoy what I write and how I write it; I wish I could give you all the perfect quality writing. And heh; I love emoticons myself, they are totally awesome.

:pinkiesad2::pinkiehappy::derpytongue2::pinkiecrazy:

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Lol perhaps Sire! Only time shall tell. It depends on everyone's opinion of the ending lol. If there is a sequel it will most certainly be the last part. But I have a feeling people would "REALLY" hate that story rofl; seeing as how it'd likely play out. That's why I kind of prefer to allow everyone to interpret what they will of the ending, or perhaps branch off from it.

And yes; your gifs brighten up my day in so many ways rofl.
Although my taste in music and your awesome sense of humor might not mix so well!

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowdetermined2::raritywink:

This is my favorite fic of all time. I'm serious.

A trilogy. I demand it.

I do really hope you continue it, but I do understand leaving a bit to be imagined by others.
"Our Chaotic Perceptions" would be my title :twilightsmile: Everyone has their own grasp of the situation at hoof; always assuming things and expecting things to happen that way but it never truly does end that way, does it? As everything comes to a close secrets are revealed but Twilight will make the call in the end, for better or for worse, she'll get a second chance to make things right. But to whom is it right to? To Eve? To the ponies? For herself? Anyways that's just my little thing for the future.

Now, this story is so great! So many emotions as bonds shift, take form, or fall apart altogether. So many holes to be filled in on all sides as each only understands a part of the larger plot. Leaving Twilight and Cheerliee with the most to assume as to what happened. Can't help but feel Twilight might never learn of Eve's side of the story but I guess it is a bit late to fix anything but it might help if the story comes to light instead of being left as it is. Dat dragon though, he'll be a great and deadly ally for Eve if Twilight ever does show up to the island or Chrysalis and her army. Really hatin' on those that want to use Eve but conflict is conflict and, well, it's not like Eve is just going to get away from all of her problems; they're just gonna follow her, wherever she goes.

Quite the sad tale if I do say so myself but it is a nice one and it does shine a different kind of light over the MLP world but this is a different shade that seems possible enough to truly exist as a darker turn for the canon series. Everyone plays their roles as they should, more or less, and goes to show that even Celestia can fail if the circumstances are right; even if it was for the betterment of pony society and she has learned from her mistakes. Unfortunately her protege made some mistakes too but she isn't confronting the important ones that could lead to a happy ending. There's only one way to end this tale, and it ain't too bright, unless something out of the blue stops it from coming to pass.
It's been a fun ride and my vote is that it ain't over just yet. :rainbowwild: That's up to you, though, but know you got my support and anything else that I can offer is on the table as well. :pinkiehappy:

i agree this feel perfect for a trilogy also
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But yes you need a sequel, At the very least you can leave it with a happy ending.[though unlikely] Maybe you could figure out a way for eve to get a slightly better life?

Oh gosh... Does the 'Favorites' section ever reach a limit...

Another one to favorite soon, knowing your stories.

70+ favorites of great stories :facehoof: and I can't lose any one of them; they are all too good! :raritydespair::raritydespair:

So... After the trilogy... You getting this published?

I want a hard back copy of these stories of Eve... They are so well-written!

Is this the Last we will see of eve? Or will there be a sequel ?

That was an amazing story that deserves a sequel. :twilightsmile: It better get one anyway. :twilightangry2:

It ends? :fluttercry: but...... but....... :raritycry: ......What happens next!!

Stories like this make me wish there was a step above the favorites list, every story on that list I enjoy, some I love, and then there are ones like this, that deserve a place of honor all to themselves. Really hope you make a sequel even though it will probably make me cry and probably end with Eve dying, I just hope that SOMEONE at least sees this from Eve's side and kills Twilight, I hate smug people who don't stop to think whether or not they are wrong. and like Mr 0 said before the escape from torture the only crime she did was attacking Spike and Applebloom, and even then she had a pretty good excuse. 2617829

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In my point of view, Eve should have destroyd all of all of Equestria and eavryone in it. And i would still call it justice... They made a monster, now they most take consequence`s of their horrible action`s.

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No. That would be Eve trying to make everyone feel her pain. That isn't justice, thats pure evil.

BUT WHERE IS THE SEQUEL?! ... Oh yeah I was gonna steal Eve for myself :rainbowwild:

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No, sorry. :rainbowderp:

I love this story, I love your style, I love characters, plot, etc... and also I love a open and free end, but my heart need a end to Eve's story (will she be fine? Will she create a island for the outsider?) a end to Twilight (will she rember that Friendship is Magic, or become like Celestia?) a end to Cherliee, a end to Trixie, to Celestia, ect... :fluttershysad:

My heart need a happy ending, where Twilight became a Eve's friend ,:pinkiesad2: or a bad ending :raritydespair:. or a normal ending, but this no.

however this is a my fault, don't worry :twilightsmile:

Ciao.

Eden.

P.s. I think that I didn't understand a lots of thing because I don't speak english very well, so my reviews could not are so good :unsuresweetie:

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We don't hate this story :twilightblush:

It's like... "a Song of Ice and Fire"... and you are Martin (do we love a character? the character will have a bad day)

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:rainbowlaugh:

yes I definitely think this should be a trilogy, and if you make it I hope at lest SOMEONE from equestrian sympathizes with her, and I also think someone should make a alternate universe fic where eve doesn't disobey cheerilee and then gets to live a happy life and Is actually accepted

I really enjoyed this story it had a sad tone of bigotry and ignorance. Who would have thought that the land of love & tolerance wouldn't practice those beliefs. I hope that you continue Eve's tale of woe in a trilogy. Thank you for taking the time to write this story and make my emotions go through a whirlwind. This really touched my heart. :heart: :fluttercry:

2628711 O-oh, man...I'm actually cryin too hard to see my screen clearly...Eve was an innocent, happy little girl, she deserves so much better.....

Please, let there be a sequel...otherwise, I'll be depressed for weeks every time I think about this story, and how a sweet, innocent little girl got her innocence ripped from her. Not to mention, now the poor child is just waiting for Twilight to Kill her!

Great, my nose is running so much that it dripped on my trackpad. If I could, I would pay you to make a final/third story. Please? I'm already crying, don't make me beg...

Can't wait to read the next...

I mean you HAVE to continue this!
especially after the whole evil Chrysalis plot scene.
I can kinda predict what's gonna happen, but I need to read it. So please continue writing this.

It would be greatly appreciated

well the people have spoken.....BRING FORTH THE TRILOGY!!!!:flutterrage: our thirst for more must be sated!! :pinkiecrazy:

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Your comment saddens me Timelord. :fluttershysad:

All in all I'm happy you want me to continue. :pinkiesad2:

I'm sorry you're depressed. I doubt the music helped. :fluttershbad:

But the atmosphere had to be created! :raritydespair:

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I loved how you put that all into words; and I'm happy you get a feel of the world I was attempting to portray. Although I do love MLP in every way possible, sometimes I just like to wonder; what if there's another side to this seemingly perfect world? Either way I don't want to force a long huge giant philosophical comment on your shoulders; but I really loved reading that. Thank you for reading up till this point.

As with all readers here, I'm so happy you guys found this story enjoyable. :pinkiesad2::heart:

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......Lord Staark.....:fluttercry::raritydespair::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry:

I know everyone wants a sequel to end this but I thinkthere should be one to explain more about before melancholy. She said twilight wasn't the first to throws her out and cheerilee is the only reason she didn't move on so what happened after her parents left when did Eris start watching her who else is to blame for eve's feelings out abandonment. Who? Who! Who!?

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I know everyone wants a sequel to end this but I thinkthere should be one to explain more about before melancholy. She said twilight wasn't the first to throws her out and cheerilee is the only reason she didn't move on so what happened after her parents left when did Eris start watching her who else is to blame for eve's feelings out abandonment. Who? Who! Who!?

I found this very interesting. :rainbowderp:

There certainly is a whole separate tale starting from Eve's venture to Dodge City, all the way up to the point she ends up in the ruins of Everfree. I feel that story would fit more into the Sad/Slice of Life category however, not too many dark things happen in there. But yea I'm a little surprised someone was interested in that portion of her life.

2637020 I didn't really see the point of the story until chapter 13... it just kept getting worse for Eve and seemed like she would kill everyone.

Dat ending brah, dis is sum good stuff. Epic movie in my head.

is there anyplace that has some picture of eve like on deviantart? or somewhere along those lines?

2636883 you know they should make up for what they did they were the ones who helped create her in to this being everything they said she would become only happened because of their actions even fluttershy is at fault maybe if she got cheerilee when she found eve it could of turned out a bit smoother and maybe if Celestia owend up then everyone would see that the true monsters are none of this should happen to a little girl like eve.

for she is Eve the insane she is the Eve of despair she is and shall all ways be the Eve of what is to come,but know inside her is a small child who has faced every positive and negative outcome of the world

Oh My, I just found this song and I think it fits so perfectly that i had to come share it. SO SAD!!!!:raritycry:

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Sorry guys. :facehoof:

I was actually just taking the final chapter of Melancholy (which is now the prologue of Tranquility)
and putting it up here. It counted it as an actual update...lol. I felt this would be more fitting as a prologue rather than the final chapter of Melancholy lol. I'm kind of going back and editing some things.

So...whats the order here for these stories..I am lost, it looks so interesting but I don't know which one to reaaad :raritydespair:

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Seems like you should read Our Chaotic Melancholy first, then Tranquility, then Serenity. :pinkiehappy:

>slice of life...
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Explain your reasoning of why this is an slice of life author.

*Afraid to find out ending*

Reads comments below story to make sure good ending...
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"Hehe...no...no of course not. Aha I'm a good pony, there's a good ending to this after all.
yeah...I-I'll make a trip to Candyland...Eve and I will finally find closure for our differences and mistakes. We will find a way to work this out with no more tears. oh I probably should bring Cherilee along just in case!
yes..yes..."

Bravo Eve, you are the next generation of equality.

... I feel so bucking bad for Eve :fluttercry: And as for Celestia, I now have a slight level of pity for, now that Eve has shown her how she views the world. As for the rest of em...
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