i'm a reader and a thinker. But I'm not a great writer.
Luigi got a call from E-Gadd. The Boos escaped again (with help from Discord) and they went to Equestria. Good thing E-Gadd made a Teleport to get them there.
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Note: everything from Luigi's Manson 1&2 are owned by Nintendo.
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Pacing and commas would be the only thing I would point out.
i haven't read this yet but i know this is awesome because it has Luigi in it
We have done YET AGAIN another Dramatic Reading of one of your stories:
when i first read this line "Celestia tolled Luigi and E-Gadd"
I thought it said Celestia trolled Luigi and E-Gadd
Frankly I don't think this fic does either Luigi's Mansion or MLP justice. I find it's too short to really get into, doesn't have much of a plot, has more than a few spelling errors, and it doesn't properly capture the personalities of any of the characters.
I love this story!
I would be most honored if this story were in this group: The MLP Fan Club: source for all good fics
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even the description of the story suffers from learn to spoken