It had been the perfect life for Twilight.
100 years of living happy, living in a paradise from the moment she was crowned a Princess. Over the course of her life, she'd never regretted anything she'd done, because she had been with friends the entire time. And today was her 100th birthday, 80 years since she had became a Princess.
So on the day of her birthday, she begins to remember some of the happy points in her life; the ponies that she once knew that are no longer of the world. And even though she is saddened by their passing, she knows that she will soon be with them.
Because it's the final hours of her life.
Chapters (2)
2451683 Sweet lord, haven't heard that in a long time!
Well...that's depressing
2451953 That it is.
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I'm just gonna pretend that I never read this chapter
That was so bittersweet. Haven't been this close to crying in a while now. Well done, my friend.
2452123 Add some sad music (which I did) and sit in a pitch black room with a storm outside, and it will be much more powerful. I cried a number of times while writing it.
Man, I wish I never read the epilogue. I'm just gonna pretend it's just a what if scenario. Otherwise, major copout.
The feels
This fic is one of the more "positive" outlooks on the Twilicorn aspect of the show. Unlike many other fics, Twilight doesn't live forever, but just long enough to see her friends pass away. I shed quite a bit of liquid pride and I don't regret doing so. Excellent work.
Wow...well that sucks.
I'm going to try and forget that this epilogue even exists....
A brilliantly told story with an elegant and bittersweet twist...more of a twirl, really.
I congratulate you.
I was just hit with a bucket of feels ;w;
You continue to amaze me with your sad fics
this one kind of reminds me of my favorite fic that has a similar plot.
I can see this as the very last episode of the show, it would be so amazing to see this in a canon episode some day in the future, when most of the young bronies are old enough, and see this animated. Oh Celestia... I would die eternally happy if that wish could come true...
Oh wow... I forgot this story had an epilogue, kind of a mega twist to the whole plot but still beautiful
Holy shit, dat twist.
but i really like it your very good in this
"As they neared the ground, the wind began to ASS extreme pressure to them, threatening to push them off course."
I belevie you mean ADD.
"Her skin had wrinkles, but they were still less noticeably than her other friends’, BAR Rarity"
Just wondering, does bar mean except?
Now that i'm done being a annoying grammer nazi,
THE FEELS!!! OH SWEET CELESTIA THE FEELS!!!
Very nicely done Ghostwriter95
I myself would put this on the level of MLD.
But thats just me……
...I enjoyed the first chapter. I mean, not original work, but still touching and well-executed.
This twist, not so much. I don't see anything that it adds to the work other than a "LOL FOOLED YA" moment, followed by "AND NOW CRY WHILE I BLUDGEON YOU WITH RANDOM SORROW." Heavy-handed and poorly-executed, in my opinion. Would have been significantly better without the epilogue.
Crying liquid pride so hard now.. Sweet Celestia this is the sweetest and saddest story in my life!
Aaagh.
Excellent and sad
Spike should be listed as a character. I thought this fanfic would piss me off when I started reading it until it turned out he was actually in it.
no cry no cry no cry
I'm just gona ignore that second chapter if you don't mind.
Loved it by the way, although I feel you could have done without the twist ending.
Maybe re-name Epilogue as "Alternate Ending?"
Everyone is treating as such anyway.
Well. My heart just broke. Good job. But I'mma go ahead and forget this epiloge exists. Kay? Kay. </3
My feels, they hurt
it was a really well executed story, and it made me cry liquid pride throughout the whole story
I'm gonna pertend I never read this chapter
Dang both chapters are rough... at least on these smooth skins. Honestly though good job on the fic I actually felt as if I had a heart for a moment there.
MY FEELS!!
2452909 2454164 2457864 2454336 I give my recurring concurrence.
Feels!
Feels!
FEEEELS!
FEEEEEEEEEELLLS!
Everyone thinks the epilogue sucks.
...well, I don't. I liked it. Do I count?
I liked it, but it needs a proof reading for grammar, spelling etc.
Also, their reaction to RD's death seemed rather callous.
I liked the Epilogue, but honestly preferred the Twilight ending more. It was a unique twist, however, the line "Dear Princess Twilight" hit much harder that your true ending. The romantic in me loves the first ending, though the realist adores the second.
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Thanks for all the feedback! I'll just state that the Epilogue was the only reason I wrote this. Started out as an idea inspired by a image (This Image) that inspired me. After about the 3,000 word mark, however, the frame that was setting up for the twist became a story in it's own, which wasn't quite supposed to happen. In the end, I did't want to do the original ending I had planned, but I still had a longing to use it. So I threw the Epilogue in there and allowed people themselves to decide which ending is better to them.
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2453786 I swear, computer makers put d and s together just so fast like me make that mistake!
2454495 I teetered on whether or not to add him as a character, but decided in the end that being mentioned a few times and having just one scene wasn't quite enough.
2460024 Funny how such a small line can be so powerful, isn't it?
"“Goodbye… Twilight.” Spike reached down with his head and nuzzled against Twilight, who hugged as much of his snout as she could."
Right here. Right here was where I started to lose it. After this line it was a back and forth battle between me and my heart. Needless to say, I lost. While there were a few small but glaring typos, they were drowned out by the sheer beauty and eloquence of the story. Everything after Spike leaving was another hit to the heart strings and the story plucked them in just the right way as to make you really feel for Twilight. Bellissimo, semplicemente bellissima.
*sniff* I'm gonna go pick up the jagged pieces of my heart now. Please excuse me...
2474021 Glad you enjoyed it, my good fellow! And don't worry, that was a sad part to write.
damn it i managed not to cry reading the story itself but the epilogue? well i can hardly see for the tears damn you why do you have to so good at writing?
I'm glad this isn't just a twilicorn fic. Goodbye, twilight.
I lost it at Today, the student became the master…
2454164 Glab! Really?
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I would put the first chapter there.
Im not sure WHAT to think about the epilogue though………
It just took a VERY unexpected turn lmao
Huh. I thought the epilogue was what made this something different from just another sappy sadfic. I actually like it much better now.
I don't believe in the afterlife.
But I'd be lying if I said I never wanted to see my loved ones who have passed on again.
Good work.