• Member Since 1st Apr, 2013
  • offline last seen Jul 25th, 2013

Amanda Dianne

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Comments ( 5 )

interesting concept, but it feels like someone cut the climax out of a good story. If this had more build up, less jumping between scenes, and proper grammar this would make a good story.

The story started out well, but like Zman said, it lost momentum, and the ending felt anticlimactic and abrupt.

xD I know it's just a little story I wrote, between my big project.
I needed a break you know?
But thanks for the feedback and likes, I love you all (even the people who dislike :D)
My main story project will be out soon though so, it would be nice if you checked it out.
-Amanda out!

Pay back is a bitch Diamond Tiara!

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