“Heeeey Twiliiiiiight!” Ponyville’s premier party pony warbled in her perky, high pitched voice.
Rarity was standing behind her in the doorway of the library; the two had decided to visit Twilight together, curious to learn how her meeting with the Princess of the Moon had gone.
“Oh, hi, Pinkie, Rarity!” said Twilight. She turned from the books she had been reading and trotted over to the two mares.
“We were just wondering how your date with the Princess turned out, did she like the cupcakes? I thought they were pretty good, but just tell me straight, did she like them?” Pinkie asked, bouncing in anticipation.
“Ah, apart from the cupcakes – did you have a wonderful time, darling?” Rarity asked as well, her eyes shining.
“Yeah, I did, it was great! Would you like to hear about it?” said Twilight.
Pinkie and Rarity both nodded vigorously. The bookworm grinned and levitated out three cushions, motioning with a hoof for her friends to make themselves comfortable.
The three mares settled themselves side by side on the cushions, and Twilight started speaking – telling them about how a painting she had wondered about when she was a filly was in fact of Luna, how Luna had shown her the mosaic – and about how Luna had raised the Moon.
“…and then she told me about some of the stars and why she made them – she’s really such a nice pony,” she finished, smiling happily.
Rarity and Pinkie looked at her, both of them beaming as well.
“We’re so happy for you, darling,” said Rarity, putting a foreleg around Twilight’s shoulders.
“Yeah! It’s terrific that you two had so much fun last night!” said Pinkie, giving the librarian a hug.
“Thanks girls, I’m really happy, too,” said Twilight, after hugging them back, “and she really liked the cupcakes! I’m so glad you helped me, and well, I feel like trying some more baking, maybe I could bring something else with me next time I see Luna.”
“Sooo when are you going to visit her again?” the fashionista asked.
“I’m not sure yet, but Luna said she’s going to show me some new stars she made!” The bookworm stretched to a more comfortable position on her cushion.
“Well if you wanna bake something else for next time, you can come over anytime you want and I’ll help you out!” said Pinkie.
“Thanks, Pinkie, and I was thinking – maybe I should practice baking the same thing a few more times, so I can be good enough to start making things on my own? Um, not that I don’t like your help, I just want to improve for myself as well.”
“Oki doki loki! It’s super cool to learn to make things completely with your own hooves!” the earth pony replied brightly.
“And you could wear that gorgeous saddle!” Rarity sighed, glancing at Twilight’s back, where she imagined the pink saddle she had given her friend would rest. It was not as frilly as the model she had made Twilight try out the first time, but she had decided to keep the color; it would go perfectly with Twilight’s coat as well as bring out the highlight in her mane.
“Um, maybe next time– but I promise I will wear it,” said Twilight, smiling reassuringly at her friend. “Don’t worry about it gathering dust on a shelf or anything!”
“Oh I just remembered!” exclaimed Pinkie, suddenly bouncing to her hooves. “I have to go back to help the Cakes now! I’m reeeeally glad you had a nice time Twilight, just come over whenever you want and we can bake some more! Bye!” She waved, and then disappeared in a blur.
“Bye, Pinkie-” the two unicorns said in unison, but the pink pony was already out of sight.
“Sometimes I could swear she can teleport.” Twilight chuckled, catching Rarity’s expression.
They shared a laugh, and then the fashion designer rose as well. “Well, I must be returning to my work too, though I must confess that I really enjoyed designing that saddle for you, after all you are such a perfect model for them,” Rarity gushed, her eyes gleaming. “You gave me so much inspiration for my new saddle line – which I have in fact already sent to Hoity Toity!” With that, she trotted to the doorway before turning to give Twilight a farewell smile. “See you tomorrow, darling!”
“Bye, Rarity,” said Twilight, waving to her friend before closing the library door. She put away the cushions and trotted to her writing stand, where she took out her schedule book and a quill.
I should make sure I leave an afternoon free to visit Pinkie. Using her quill, she crossed some entries out, then drew arrows to rearrange others. Quantum Mechanics, hmm. That could go in the one a.m. time slot… She transferred that item to the new time slot.
And I’ll have to complete the thesis on the flare experiment – Tuesday two a.m.? But I’ll have to get up at five for the dawn dew research. Maybe another day?
“Baking pan, check,” said Twilight, looking down at the notes that she had jotted down as Pinkie rapidly babbled a list of the equipment and ingredients that they would need to make brownies. “Aluminum foil, chocolate chunks-”
“Butter sugar eggs flour bananas salt vaaaannnillllla!” the energetic pony sang shrilly, jabbing a hoof at each of the ingredients on the counter. “All set! You ready Twilight? Llllleeeeet’s bake!”
“Um, actually… I was wondering if I could try it myself this time, you know, like I mentioned before?” Twilight said, pawing a hoof sheepishly. “So I can see if, you know, I can actually bake something edible on my own… please?”
Pinkie blinked, and grinned brightly. “Oh yeah you said that! I almost forgot! Because I love baking so much too I get so excited to just join! But just ask me if you get stuck – I’ll be adding the frosting to these cupcakes!” she said, pulling out a tray of cupcakes (from, it seemed to Twilight, thin air).
The bookworm beamed. “Thanks, Pinkie!”
“No problem Twilight!” the party pony replied, placing the tray on the far end of the kitchen counter and grabbing several pastry bags. “Just ask if you have any questions!”
Twilight nodded and put on an apron with her telekinesis, her expression determined.
“So, I should heat up the oven first,” she muttered as she consulted her notes. She turned the knob of the oven with her magic. “And second, add the butter then the chocolate into a saucepan and heat it.”
She levitated the utensil over, and paused. ”Um, Pinkie ? How much butter and chocolate do I have to add, exactly?”
The pink pony looked up from the cupcakes. “Just toss in as much as you want! Or as little as you want!”
“Erm…” Now that she recalled it, the last time Pinkie had done most of the measuring while she had just poured and mixed everything together. This is a complication. Well, actually, this is kind of like measuring chemicals for experiments, I can’t believe I wasn’t paying more attention to memorizing everything. But then again, Pinkie’s always talking about the ‘feel’ of ingredients so I suppose cooking isn’t supposed to be that precise. The unicorn bit her lip; she always preferred to get things perfect the first time.
It’s too late to go back to the library to find a proper cookbook and I don’t even know if I could find a recipe for brownies on time… all right, fine. Pinkie will definitely tell me if I’m doing something wrong.
She frowned and poured in a small amount of butter, then as much chocolate as she dared. Chocolate brownies are supposed to be, well, brown. The color must come from the chocolate, so I’ll have to add lots. She placed the pan onto the stove, and started heating it.
Stirring the mixture with a whisk, she glanced at her friend. “Does this look okay?”
Pinkie scooted over and peered into the pan. “Nope, it’s still too hard; wait until it’s just about melted!” she said with a wide encouraging grin. “Then you can turn off the heat and keep on stirring until it’s smooth!”
“Oh, okay,” replied Twilight, gently swirling the melting chocolate until it had become more like a thick liquid. She turned the heat off and proceeded to stir until the mix was even. “Um, so now I put the other stuff in?” She grabbed her notes and scrutinized them again.
Pinkie nodded approvingly and bounced back to her tray of cupcakes so that Twilight had more room to maneuver. “Oh! And the eggs go in one at a time, I think I forgot to tell you that!” she added mid-jump.
“One at a time, got it,” said Twilight, pouring the mixture into a larger bowl and stirring in the sugar. She then took an egg and attempted to crack it –
Splat! The contents spurted out, trickling down her hooves and making a mess on the counter. “Urrgh,” she groaned weakly, “why can’t I get the hang of that?”
“It’s okay! I’ll just show you again!” said Pinkie. She bounced back over, grabbed an egg, and effortlessly cracked it against the brim of the bowl. The shell split neatly in two halves, which Pinkie pulled apart to let the egg slide into the bowl gracefully. “There you go, easy as my last name! There’s another egg to add - c’mon, have another go!”
Twilight nodded determinedly, holding up another egg. I can do this. She brought her hoof down on the brim – splat!
“I’m so sorry Pinkie! I’ll buy you another carton of eggs to make up for this and the eggs I ruined last time,” she said hurriedly, disappointed at herself for failing to crack the latest egg correctly. But whenever I try to do it lightly, nothing happens!
“Aww, you don’t have to do that Twilight, I’ve ruined way more than you have!” Pinkie said reassuringly. “Though most of them were kinda on purpose! And nopony is an expert on their first few tries, just keep practicing and you’ll be cracking ‘em like a pro – wait, Twilight I’ve got an idea! Why don’t you use your magic? I'm sure you'll be a lot better if you use that!”
“Oh, yeah! Why didn’t I think of that before?” Twilight laughed. I guess since I kept seeing Pinkie use her hooves I just unconsciously did the same; she’s the one teaching me, after all.
Trying it a third time – this time with her magic – she cut the egg neatly through the middle. Twilight smiled proudly and pulled the two halves apart with her telekinesis, emptying the egg into the mix.
“Great!” she exclaimed, before checking her notes to see what the next step was.
Add flour, salt, and vanilla.Twilight knit her brow. Urgh, more things with no specific measurements. But yeah, again, if I want to get good at cooking I’ll have to get used to not being as precise as I am with my chemical experiments. She tried to remember how Pinkie had added the ingredients – a pinch and a toss? She made a face, and then added what she hoped were suitable amounts into the bowl.
After stirring the mix thoroughly she peeled the bananas with her magic and diced them, then added the chunks to the bowl. Following Pinkie’s instructions, she poured and scraped the mixture into the baking pan and placed it into the pre-heated oven.
“Whew, finally done!” she said, rubbing her hooves on a kitchen towel. “I hope it turns out okay!”
“I bet it’ll be better than okay! And ‘cause this is just practice, when you bake next time it’ll be even better!”
“Maybe… and it’s all thanks to your help, Pinkie,” the unicorn replied warmly.
Ding! The timer alerted both ponies that the brownies were ready. They trotted to the oven and the bookworm glanced to the gloves hanging on the wall; but then she decided to just use her telekinesis to open the oven and pull the tray out.
“Oooooh!” the two friends marveled at Twilight's creation. The tantalizing smell of chocolate and banana wafted from it, its texture a rich, glossy, dark brown with the fruit chunks wedged inside. They set it to cool for a while before Pinkie cut it into neat chunks.
“Wanna try it out?” asked Pinkie excitedly, for once refraining from stuffing some of the desserts into her mouth in an instant.
“Oh, okay,” said Twilight, floating a piece with her telekinesis and observing it carefully. It smells good, and the surface is quite smooth, not lumpy at all!
Hoping it was a success, she hesitantly took a bite… and her tongue seemed to shrivel up. She gagged, expelling the half-chewed brownie from her mouth forcibly, but even that could not extinguish the burning in her mouth. While it smelled good, she had added way too much chocolate, making it taste sickly, and it was like a very dense sweetness had congealed within her.
“Pinkie,” she said, an eye twitching. “I need more practice.”
Dear Twilight,
I enjoyed our recent meeting very much and was wondering if we could have tea again soon. Would two o’clock in the afternoon next Saturday be convenient for you? I would really like to show you my new star, and something else as well!
Your friend,
Luna
The Princess of the Night rolled up the parchment, a satisfied smile dancing on her lips. Now off to Celly to send it - she was right, I should find time to place the linking spell on Twilight’s dragon scribe. If I keep asking her to send my letters she’ll only start making implications…
“I wonder what Luna’s going to show me?” Twilight said, eagerly re-reading the scroll for a third time. “Saturday afternoon, that should be fine, though I don't know how we’re going to see a star during the daytime – Spike, would you mind looking after the library for the afternoon? I might not be back until Sunday, so I’ll ask Fluttershy if she’s okay with letting you stay overnight, like last time.”
“Okay, sure,” the dragon replied cheerfully, stacking up a pile of books. “So you’re hanging out with Luna pretty often now, huh?”
“Well, I’m not sure if I’ll be visiting all that often, though I really hope so!” Twilight chuckled. Trotting over to her writing stand, she gathered her writing stationary and quill.
Dear Luna,
Thank you for the invitation, I would love to meet again! Saturday at two o’clock is fine for me.
I’m really looking forward to seeing your new star and I can’t wait to find out what else you want to show me!
Your friend,
Twilight Sparkle
Twilight stepped off the chariot, levitating a box containing the fifth batch of brownies she had made. The scene gave her a sense of déjà-vu despite two obvious differences: it was the afternoon, and this time only the lunar princess stood waiting on the lawn.
“It is good to see you again, Twilight,” Luna said warmly.
“It’s great to see you too, Luna!” the unicorn replied.
They grinned at each other, and the alicorn noticed the box Twilight was levitating. “Oh, are those more of your delicious cupcakes?”
“Um, it’s actually something else I wanted to share with you, they’re called brownies.”
“Thank you, Twilight!” said the princess, beaming. “So, shall we go then?”
The unicorn nodded. “Sure thing!”
Luna led Twilight along the route that they had taken during the previous visit: through the grand hall, up a few levels, and through the entrance to her wing. “This is what I wanted to show you,” she said, coming to a stop in front of the circular mosaic in the spacious hallway.
Twilight looked at the black gem in the center of the mosaic curiously, remembering how it had absorbed a trickle of magic from her horn. Luna said that it’s a magical artifact. I wonder why it needs to drain magical energy. Should have asked last time – but I was nervous because Luna said it meant that I was powerful…
Luna then summoned a dark blue couch; it was quite puffy and was complemented by a few light blue cushions. The two sat down, and Luna motioned to the mosaic. “I am going to show you the purpose of this gem, and perhaps you might be able to use it as well.”
She released a flow of magic into the wall, and the energy was immediately absorbed into the gem. “You see, the stone in the center is a means of channeling magic – are you familiar with foci?”
Twilight nodded. “Yeah, they’re objects that are used to focus and direct spells.” She furrowed her brow in thought as she tried to grasp the implications of what Luna had said. A passage in Spellcasting: Level 3 surfaced in her mind:
‘In instances when a spell is difficult to focus or maintain, unicorns (or alicorns) can choose to enchant an object – preferably a gem, which of all suitable items can absorb magic most easily – so that the object can direct the spell automatically. The spell caster would only need to provide the required energy and the object would complete the spell so that the caster could spare more attention on other matters.
This essentially means that the gem is probably used for a powerful spell which originally would have been very difficult to cast; but with this, it would only require a sufficient amount of energy to be provided and the gem would maintain the spell for as long as the energy lasted-’
She snapped out of her thoughts as Luna started speaking again.
“This,” the princess explained, “helps me and my sister to view the night sky, even during the day. Although the spell itself is hardly tiring to us, she thought it would be convenient to enchant the gem to allow other ponies to cast it – although we realized afterwards it would be difficult for ponies other than my sister and myself to have enough energy, or magical prowess, to power it. From what happened last time, I believe you are an exception!”
Twilight froze. “I-I don’t think I can,” she said, shifting nervously on the couch,” wouldn’t it take an immense amount of energy for magic to be distributed across the entire sky? I mean, it’s so vast, and deep, and even with the gem to help direct the spell…”
“From the way my sister speaks about you, and the way the gem reacted to you, I would say that there is a distinct possibility that you have both the skill and energy to use it.” the princess paused, suddenly a bit worried. She had thought that Twilight would be interested in the gem and its uses, but the unicorn beside her seemed very hesitant; uneasy, even.
Twilight looked up, and saw that Luna’s ears were drooping, her eyes blinking uncertainly. She realized that the princess was waiting for a reaction, so she quickly put on a smile. Get a grip, Twilight! Luna says I can do it, and she knows the spell better than I do! “Oh, so, uhhh, you mean I should give it a try right now?”
“That is what I had hoped, but if you do not want to do it, it is all right. I just thought you would be interested in watching the stars…” Luna frowned, concerned – Twilight’s expression seemed a bit forced. “Twilight, is something the matter?”
“Oh, I’m fine. I’m just a bit nervous, that’s all – it sounds difficult. But I’ll never know if I don’t try,” she replied, not wanting to disappoint Luna or come off as scared.
Luna let out a sigh of relief. “It’s simple; just send a strong and steady flow of magic into the gem; it will be absorbed for the spell.”
Twilight nodded, and tentatively released a flow of magenta energy from her horn into the gem. Her magic was quickly sucked in, vanishing like water into a whirlpool. Twilight looked at the gem expectantly. A second passed, then two. Nothing happened.
Bleh, I knew it. She peered at the princess beside her, who was looking back hopefully. Twilight relented. Oh, fine. I’ll try again.
She glared at the gem. Not enough, huh? She drew on more energy from her magic reservoir, letting it build in a bright ball of light on her horn before discharging it. The aura was vacuumed in, disappearing without a trace again, but still the gem was unyielding.
Urrggh. The unicorn gritted her teeth. Fizzling sparks erupted from her horn now, her magic pulsing and crackling as she poured more and more energy into the foci.
Luna raised a hoof as the glow from Twilight’s aura turned a brilliant white, her eyes clouded over by the immense power she was releasing. “Twilight-”
The built-up energy exploded with a bang and a blinding glare which lit up the entire space, the force of the backlash throwing the unicorn off the couch with the speed of a bullet towards the opposite wall of the grand hall. Luna watched in horror. Time seemed to slow as she cast her starry aura to reach for her friend. No!
But she was too late. In a split second Twilight slammed into the wall with a sickening crack, the force of the impact leaving a dent in the marble wall.
What more needs to be said?
427647
Oh no!
Now this is an interesting development... I can now see why the 'sad' tag is on this story.
Great update! Twilight's baking antics were definitely in character and the dialogue felt on. Now you left us with a major cliff hanger though, looking forward to seeing what happens next!
First thought: Ow.
Second thought: That's gonna leave a mark.
Thought #2.5: It already did - in the wall, on Twilight's back...
Third independent thought: Twilight's undoubtedly going to need (long term) medical attention.
Following thought: Hey, maybe Luna could provide said medical attention.
Conclusive thought: Luna in a nurse outfit.
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! NOT TWILIGHT!!!!
Don't worry, she'll be fine. Killing off Twilight at this point would be way too anti-climactic, right?
...right?
By the way, "Time seemed to slow as she cast her starry aura to reach for her friend."
Didn't Luna lose her manipulatable starry mane when she lost her Nightmare Moon powers? Or was the starry aura just supposed to be Luna's magic?
Oh, and awesome chapter!
Crap! I looked at the comments before I read! Now i am sad
Edit: Now that I HAVE read im even more sad!
427678 Well, I usually write fluffy stuff but yes, sad tag is spoiler A long time ago I wouldn't even read shipping if it had a sad tag... And um, dialogue is one of my weakest points
427745 That's a nice mental picture you're describing
427754 Don't worry, I write fluffy, happy, sweet stuff
427792 It's meant to be her magic only, trying to use her telekinesis to catch Twi. Maybe I didn't word it clear enough?
427801 Wait for next chapter~ plus I have romance tag! There's no romance (not yet) so you all know how this is going to end up
427821 Well, usually, spells in the show don't need to "reach out", the only exception being Nightmare Moon's starry mane. I guess that's where my confusion came from. Still makes for an awesome mental image.
427821
Some of the dialogue is a bit weak, I will give you that. The start with Rarity and Pinkie talking to Twi felt a bit forced. However, the internal dialogue Twilight has with herself while she is baking felt spot on. It got a few chuckles out of me as she got annoyed with Pinkie's lack of clear instructions.
Though don't be too hard on yourself! I have read stories with dialogue so bad I couldn't finish them. Yours is fairly good, room for improvement sure, but good nonetheless.
HNNNNNNNNNNG so unexpected!
427745
I second that conclusion!
Anyway, about the story....
What happened to Twilight?! NNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!
She will probably be so knocked out that not even the royal Canterlot voice will wake her.
DAMNIT QUILL! I practically did a luna styled HUZZAH! when I saw this story updated...BUT SUCH AN EPIC CLIFFHANGER FOR A STORY YOU DON'T UPDATE OFTEN?!...
Yeaaaaaa, look's like Spike be looking at Fluttershy's plot for the weekend.
like a sir
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NOOOOOO TWILIGHT
I thought Luna got her starry mane back in Luna Eclipsed?
That, is what happens you you take Newton's Third law of Motion and apply it to someone who can blast like Twilight can. Still that was a good twist. As a side note I now wish to take a hammer to that gemstone for indirectly causing Twilight pain.
428012 Whoops, my bad! Can't believe I hadn't noticed that Knowing that could actually be what's happening, my mental image of this scene just got twenty percent cooler.
No big deal people forget this all the time.
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CLIFFHANGERS!!!!
CLIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIFFHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAANGEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEERS
Also, excellent.
I thought the sad tag was because Twi can't cook and would get Luna sick or something like that. This... Is just painful. Cele ain't gonna be happy that her sister killed her most faithful student. Or will she ?
CLIFFHANGER!? NOOOOOOOO!
*dangles over edge of cliff*
Gaah!
Gentlecolts, we can rebuild her. We have the technology. We have the capability to build the world's first bionic pony. Twilight Sparkle will be that pony. Better than she was before. Better, stronger, faster.
*container of magic, with cautions*
Caution: EXPLOSIVE
Damn...
Have a good one.
Good chapter! Altough i was shocked when Twilight got slammed into the wall, oh well she is a strong pony...(i hope)
The next update better come sooner than the last one.
Also, why is this story not on EQD? This is an unacceptable state of affairs.
I hate cliffhangers, I really do.
oh dear Luna no, not lil twilight!
but I can totally see that stubborn unicorn do just that when faced with a magical challenge
Man the amount of TwiLuna that could come from this is incredible, Luna taking care of twilight due to injury, luna taking care of twilight due to magical exhaustion, twilight comforting luna upset she may have hurt her. though thanks to reading the comments, all of these situations have luna in a nurse outfit.
If luna was at the bottom in a nurse outfit, I think im fine with this cliffhanger
...And then, Luna discovers something that her sister was trying to hide and Twilight ignored about herself.... her own inmortallity and insanely fast healing factor (nopony elise would have ever survived being hit by a flower pot, an anvil, a piano and a fully loaded cart of hay just barely after falling a flight of stairs towards a very deep basement and then after all of that recover to the point that it looked like nothing had happened at all, but a pair of bruises here and there)
Why the cliffhanger? They are worst then fat lady in bikini
429194
Thus, Detective Gadget crossovers ensue.
427853 Some people who've helped me out have said the same thing, and I'm glad to improve, for the sake of every reader
427875 Yes, I know... how you all must hate the ending :(
427914 Good guess! But I can't spoil anything~~~
427950 I wanted to update tooooo But been busy for uni applications and stuff :(
427979 Twilight and Luna are sexier. Just sayin' =p
428003 NOOOO, indeed! and I remember ur last pic comment~ so kyoot!
428012 I had that law running around in my head as I wrote! and... Y I am sucha drama queen?
428037 Luna's starry mane is awesome~~~ twinkles and winks! The stars in her mane will serve a purpose later.
428055 Yep, perhaps.
428188 Sorry~~~ must be the trollestia rubbing off.
428393 Thanks >< and I was bad to leave that at the ending =P
428814 To tell you the truth... this isn't the main reason for the sad tag (oooh, what could get worse?)
428858 Sorry Well everything shall be revealed in due time...
429171 Shall catch u next chapter!
429194 Didn't get that it was a reference (?) until I scrolled down XD but Twilight is awesome anyhow~!
429529 Eeeyup.
429663 I must be getting good at this cliffhanger stuff... (suddenly everyone is glaring daggers at me)
429787 She is! And with Luna there beside her? Even more so~
429857 I sure hope it will, too! And truth is I did send this when I finished chapter 2, but it was rejected - too generic was the reason, which I accept. But hearing praise like this is enough for me>< (warmth)
429939 I hate them too, and as one who reads fics... I know how you feel... but but don't worry, you shall know all in due time!
429978 Twilight is cutest, smartest, all-around best pony~ and boy is she competitive... and strong willed! That's why she's such a good shipping-partner
430070 I feel a bit guilty for cliffhangers, but I admit the saddle one was funny
430322 Now I'm starting to think that she's immortal too... ~"~ Oh, well. We all know she's the most powerful unicorn in Equestria...
430486 I hate them too. But since I started writing... I can sympathize with the authors that do (and make me scream gibberish at the screen)
And that right there is another reason you are so damn awesome!
430578 I would say, a little bit too powerful to be actually a unicorn I suppose that there's some Shape-shifting spell or some kind of concealment spell actually cast on her
430578
I started off as a Luna fan :lunasmilymissing: , then I stumbled across some TwiLuna and loved it , from then I read all the twiluna I could find... by then I understood that I enjoyed it so much thanks to an awkward little purple unicorn, so I expanded my search to include Twilestia and (thanks to somepony ) to rarilight
so now you know how much I agree with you
The improvements are amazing Quill! great job!
found one though:
Bleh… I knew it. She peered at the princess beside her, who was looking hopefully back . Twilight relented. Oh, fine. I’ll try again.
Looking back hopefully.
I do believe that Twilight has canonically left dents in walls before, so I don't expect her to actually die or even suffer permanent harm from this. (Ponies are pretty resilient in general, anyway.)
I do look forward to finding out just what answer she'll get once she wakes up again and asks what happened, though. So far I'm not sure why what's been described as a fairly straightforward scrying spell would cause spontaneous explosions like that even if poorly handled -- unless, of course, the "explosive instrumentation" trope is in play here...
If it was a generic story, I know what would happen.
Twilight would awake as an alicorn. Don't you dare to do that, quill.
By the way, I spotted a mistake in chapter 3, you once wrote then instead of than:
Oh, no, I couldn't possibly be as powerful as that... I'm just a little bit more talented then the usual unicorn, after all - gotta change subject, gotta change subject...
Anyways, I wanted this to get off of my 'to go'-list, it's not a disappointment so far. Keep it up!
You best be publishing the next chapter soon after throwing something like that at us!
430744 (happy mood for rest of day)
431367 I don't know who that somepony is, but I'm glad, cuz those three are my fav ships as well!
432127 Thanks! And it wouldn't have been if not for your help~~~ (and Twi was originally such a good baker?)
432256 The main reason is because it's simply too powerful, and sensitive as well - if it were used wrong it just wouldn't react well, especially when it's a unicorn with magic like Twi. But then in the show, things explode just for no reason...
432299 No, that's not going to happen... so that's a spoiler of some sorts And thanks for the check, I've corrected it
434754 Working on it, working on it! I don't like Twi getting hurt myself - but since Luna's around
I usually can't touch sad shipfics, but this one.... Has me interested. I'm not sure if I should be sad or not so I'm sort of mentally flailing at what I just read. ......
Well that was an... Interesting way to end that chapter.
Oh man... that was a rather sudden change of pace.
The way I imagine the impact (she left a bucking dent in the wall!) that can only mean harsh consequences.
Hope this wont get too sad. I am bad with sad stories. Although I like them. :D
Also: Starfall is a boss as pre-reader :P
I have a feeling the next chapter will bucking kill me. I could already see every emotion on Luna's face as Twilight flew right towards the wall. So soon after finding friendship does it all crumble down to tragedy. Please don't make Twilight crippled
442880 It's not very sad, really, just the occasional thing, but enough to need a sad tag. (doesn't mean the sad has already happened)
443532 I know...
450184 Yeah, they will And thanks! Great new chapters of yours as well!
450951 This won't be really sad, I'm not really a fan of those either, I like fluff and sexy stuff
457397 I won't! No way... she's best pony
459204
Bah. Sometimes I forget ponies are actually made of dark matter You'd think bullet speed was enough to break a bone or two. B-but, that doesn't mean you should do it, unless you want to. I mean...eeeep!
this is EPIC!
Twilight has been knocked
Out; I hope she does not need
To have a funeral
and as a last note *runs away crying*