What would you do if you knew everything, about everyone, just by looking in their eyes? Every dirty secret, every happy moment, their very soul laid bare for you to see. Could you keep your sanity? I don’t have much of a choice, if I go crazy, I don’t know that I can do anything to stop it. But, maybe someone else can. You see, there’s this filly, and she drives me up the walls, but I followed her through a door that doesn’t want to close. Thing is, I’m not sure if I want it to.
What would you risk for the chance to have a friend? How many doors would you cross? I'm about to find out.
Original Editors: Flink Brony, CMC4TW and Benprodemo
Original art done by: tryhardbrony
Note this story was previously canceled and has now been revived.
I. NEED. MOAR.I have no words. This is amazing. I would PAY you(if I had any money.) To continue this. Right now, I am BEGGING you to please,PLEASE continue this for the love of everything! Anything you need to keep reading, I will try to provide. Just please continue this story! Followed, faved and liked
6551727 I will. Hehe. I can't take your money for the story, but I do story commissions, if you're interested. ^^ You didn't find it flawed though?
I could swear that we'd had a conversation stating he was from Canterlot...
6551815 Maybe you thought it would make sense for him to be from there?
When will we start to see changes over the original? I am also VERY curious to see what new route this story will take!
This is a good re-read, but when are we going to get to the new stuff? @.@
I hope this time Sweetie will have more substantial motivation to travel than the last time (I admit that while I enjoyed last story, her route was going to hopeless/doomed path).
6551760 Didn't find anything story-wise, and I wasn't really looking for grammar or spelling errors. The idea of the whole thing just makes me giddy though.
Spike, mon ami, told you they'd go crazy over it.
6552198 I haven't decided yet, but probably toward the later chapters.
6552208 Sooon, hehe. To be fair, I had attempted several re-writes before finally deciding on simply posting this. I figured it was fine on its own, I just screwed up in the later chapters.
6552226 That's why I stopped. I didn't give them enough motivation and I felt that things could have been described better.
6552526 Now you know how I felt when I started writing the thing.
6552562 You were right...
6553145 So why is this labeled On Hiatus?
Also, I just had cool fanfic idea similar to this, but different.
6553163 AH, I should un-label that. It's because when the story was deleted, it was labeled as that.
6553183 Also story commissions? what are the rules for that?
6553971 I messaged you them, thanks for checking it out.
Given how cynical Veritas is, it seems really darn naive to consider Celestia having needed to kill being what would be sanity snapping about meeting the gaze of somepony that tamed the unconquered sun.
Guess he might have been simplifying for far (mentally) younger foals?
6563252 I think, initially, I had written something different, something similar to what you just said. But Veritas knows that by looking into the eyes of a 1000 year old being, he may go insane.
So far this still seems awfully familiar.
Still, it is a good reread, and something to help take my mind off reading a bunch of stats and figures that make my brain glaze over
I just dont see any positive features of character this protagonist.
Not one single thing remotely redeeming. And outside of a break the haughty aspect, or the morality pet, that only may bring something tertiary by proxy, he isn't going to change.
So, sorry. This isn't going to be a story I care for I believe.
6564393 You could give it more of a chance, but I can kind of see what you mean. He is a dick.
6564522 I may try a little later on. (And I do mean that in retrying a story a later to enjoy.)
But I had read through the original of this. But I didn't wish to just cut and unfave without a why. Sorry if I sounded crude. I wanted to be clear, because i've been mistaken on my words before in how they came across.
But I do think this story can do well. It at the moment just isn't for me. I always hope I can revisit later to find my statements are untrue.
So this might be a 'Who Actually Heard Him Say Rosebud?' type thing...
But if True Sight requires direct eye-contact, couldn't he just get a pair of sunglasses?
Or if its metaphysical eye-contact like that mind-control power in Vampire: The Masquerade, a pair of enchanted novelty ones that makes everypony else's head look like smiley faces?
I'd get if the solutions are out of his price-range, but given that True Sight is a known if rare ability it seems a bit forced the more I read that there's no way to stop or shield against it.
6574643 Rare Ability
If you want to talk about being realistic, that's fine. In our world, for example, rare aliments are typically more difficult to cure or treat. This is because there are so few people to test and study those things. You did bring up a good point, however, I think I'll be adding a few scenes in a future chapter. Well, once I get to the point where I had originally cancelled this story.
Ooooh. That makes sense. I thought you was going for SweetieBot.
6575571 Sweetie Bot didn't exist (I don't think) when I started making this story. But that would have worked too.
Yes, start an exercise routine. The CMC do a lot of running.
6581712 Now that you mention it...
Very interesting premise! The character and story building possibilites of this True Sight ability have me very intrigued. Looking forward to where you take the story.
6582796 Thank you. Hopefully this time I'll come up with a concrete plan for the plot.
On one hand, Gary Stu as all hell, on the other, kinda comes with the territory when THAT is the special talent. Surprised he hasn't gone insane yet... Then again, could be worse. Could be 'read others like an open book' like one of my OCs. May not be as strong, but doesn't need the eye contact either. I shudder to imagine the pony who knows everything about another creature just by looking at a single part of them...
He should tell Scootaloo she can stay over at his house. :)
6603148 That's what makes him fun to write. Yes, he's powerful, but it's not like he wants it.
6603550 But why?
Kid is an utter dick... but honestly I don't blame him.. his life is hell, pure and simple... you go little dude, stay sane!
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Ok, it's been 5 years, so, seriously, what is Sweetie's cutie mark supposed to be?
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When I get around to it, I'll likely be re-writing this story and as such her mark won't really be anything special. But the door was simply meant to signify her affinity for finding the right door, the correct "out" to a sticky situation. Also her new ability to change dimensions by peering through the correct "doors" or wormholes. This was also back when I wrote stories on the fly without planning everything through. Both have pros and cons and I really do prefer this method of writing as you tend to get stuff done quicker, but you can easily end up writing yourself into a corner.
Or in my case, not publish enough things.
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It should also be noted that this story used to have more chapters that were up on the site with her unlocking the ability to traverse through other universes/ dimensions. I found the idea exciting at the time, but it kind of takes away anything interest about Veritas and his True Sight.
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Interesting. Thanks.
6552198
I really should consider what I wish to do with this story...
6551815
You're from Canterlot!
6551815
I updated a thing.