Queen Chrysalis is the ruler of the changeling race. She has led an invasion against Equestria, bested Celestia, and ruined the wedding of two innocent lovers, but is she really evil? Or did she have good intentions all along? And if so, how will she make it up to everyone she's wronged?
Well that's part of the story anyways.
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Some great writing.^_^
A good fanfic.^_^
I like this!^_^
A very interesting take on Chrysalis here.
Now I just hope the next chapter shows us what the "Human" label is for.
2419596 I probably shoud have waited a bit to add that label.
Oh well. I am still a beginner after all.
Anyways, I'm glad you liked it.
... Famous last words.
Ok few things.
Immortal human teleported to equestria with amnesia - ugh overused especially as deus ex machina.
Queen Chrysalis if i remember correct she said before duel with Celestia that her nation need love to eat and will conquer all of equestria, i know its can still be claimed as power corrupting but you writed this like she got power corrupt after duel
Not all humanized? You mean Anthro ?
Something like that th09.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/f/2012/288/a/1/changed_changelings_by_glancojusticar-d5hwnae.jpg
2484999 Not quite what I had in mind but close enough, I guess.
I plan to elaborate a bit more about Jack and how exactly his powers work later on in the story, (I can almost gurantee that part is going to be boring as hell when I write it) but all I'll say for now is that he's not immortal or invincible.
As for Chrysalis well...
My memory is terrible and this is fanfiction so please just bear with me here and roll with the punches.
2484935 "Epic Foreshadowing?"
(Where did I even get that line from?)
is this anthro or humanized it reads like it is
2487371 Anthro. Very anthro.
2489381 i typically dont read anthro but ill try this fic
>come into my parlor said the spider to the fly
Wait, is the door a far cry 3 loading screen?
2599170 More Lewis Carrol, less Vaas Montenegro.
interesting read my friend
Ok you got me hooked but are you trying to keep the chapters short
3094514 At the time I was going for 1000 words a chapter. Only now do I realize how short that actually is.
3095569 if you want to add more story or detail your going to have to make them bigger
3095614 I am aware of this. I'm planning on revising the format a bit so that it looks neater and to make the chapters longer, but I probably won't get around to doing that for a while. However, the more pressing issue (for me at least) is that I'm having a bad case of Writer's Block.
3095738 well im no writer but I can tell you that inspiration can come from anywhere but it cant be rushed so take your time on it..
It really is a great story
3095754 The problem is that even though I have an idea where I want to take the story, in the short-term anyways, I can't figure out how to go about writing the damn thing. In fact, I'm tempted to do a bit of rewriting just so I can more easily get the story moving again.
3095973 mmmmm well it depends where you want to take your story from now rewrite ing the story is a good idea but there must be a couple of othere options like editing the last chapter or put in some othere chapter to explain where your takeing your story.... just some ideas.
3096015 I was planning on rewriting the ending of the last chapter a bit...
Alright, that settles it. I'll make the revisions I need to the last chapter and get to work on the next chapter (which will be much longer than the others). However I won't post anything until I feel the chapter is finished, so this might take a while, especially with school starting for me next week.
3096197 yeah ok cool.....still cant believe school starts in one week
pretty good so far!