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Twilight Sparkle finds a book about monsters and casts a spell and makes all her friends turn into monsters from the classic universal movies. Thats all to it. Seriously

Now cancelled. I will be remaking it with a much better story.

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No... just, no. Spelling and grammar issues abound, and having the narrator interact with the characters? That's the cardinal sin of storytelling.

Thank you for playing. Go directly to jail, do not pass "Go", do not collect $200.

there is this empty room which is empty

Ross gets punched in the face by an invisible force "OW!" He got hurt.

Completely different fanfics and he says, And I quote!
"I am Ross Pit: Shark Hunter!" Ross Pit said

Hmm, something seems repetitive here...

a threshold of ponies

What does that even mean?

2414989 He was just interacting with Ross Pit and that's Ross's character he breaks the 4th wall, I didn't play jack shit with you, and I do agree my spelling is downright awful and, What the fuck am I doing? Telling people the same thing they know over and over again! Y'know what! Fine you think you can do a better homage? If you do, Game on then!

2415394 I don't know I was copying the opening speech from Night Of The Ghouls!

2415407 We need Cricket and Cousin Frank all up in this biz. :trollestia:

2415449 Well, they aren't in Jar anymore, he's full of Dirt these days.

2415400 I would like to apologize. In retrospect, I was overly harsh in my original comment. You just happened to hit on two of my biggest pet peeves (spelling/grammar and non-Pinkie fourth wall breaking) within the first few paragraphs.

I still don't like the story, but there's no need to throw you in jail over it.

2421987 Yeah, but it was only made for the Universal monster lovers. And, oooh no! Your not getting out of this one! YOU THINK YOU CAN DO BETTER! I have to go through shit! Hours and hours of shit! Watching all the movies over and over again! trying to deal with 2 whiny little brothers and a older sister who doesn't care about anything! Yeah who cares about my problems? The point is, YOU THINK YOU CAN DO BETTER?!!!!!

2422076 Um... you don't have to go through anything, you are choosing to in writing the story. Hell, you could probably write the story and still not have to watch the movies over and over. You can find any information/pictures you need on the internet, without having to watch the movies for hours.

Do I think I can do better? No, I know I can do better. The thing is, I don't want to because I'm already juggling two stories and the premise does not interest me at all.

Now, good day to you, sir.

2424904 I'm confused about which part of my comment prompted that response.

2425921 It's not just you it's everyone. I almost never make a story withought someone coming in and making me feel like a complete asshat and that should get off Finfiction and not make anymore stories.

2425921 In retrospective, I was being kinda a dick, and I apologies.

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