For as long as she can remember, Scootaloo has hated her mother. She hated the mare who left her behind on the Ponyville Orphanage steps without a backwards glance. She hated her mother for leaving her father to suffer a life without either of them. She hated that selfish coward who couldn't stand to look upon her own baby's weak little wings and be proud of the daughter she had foaled, come what may. She hated her for everything, for she was the mare who ran away.
She's the same mare Scootaloo's running to now, the same mare about whom she'll learn the truth surrounding her abandonment.
She's the same mare who never stopped loving her baby.
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A Mother's Day side-story to the Valentine's Day tale "Love, in Other Words". Reading this beforehand is recommended, but not necessarily required.
My warmest of regards to the extremely talented Famosity for the use of her stunning artwork (I Had A Nightmare Too)
Featured on Fimfiction: 5/12/13
i cried and wasn't really expecting for the mum to have died
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Yeah, I went into that a little bit in my other work, but not in much detail. I alluded to it there and expanded on her history a little more here.
Hope it wasn't a put-off for you!
very long chapter
Excellent work. It took a little for the story to warm up, and show what make it special, so I'm glad I didn't let the length scare me off.
Very realistic and powerful emotions in this story. You made words on a screen feel like the emotions of one in the room with you. I just can't seem to be able to hold all of my feels.
Well done!
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yeah, I knew that might come up., but I'm glad you stuck with it until the end. The name of the chapter comes from the book mentioned in the Author's Note, and it was a story which my Mom always read to me when I was a kid. It's a little nod to her, and to anyone who's read the story.
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Boy, so am I! It's a bane to so many good stories when they're judged not by the quality of the words within, but by the quantity of them. I'm overjoyed that you stuck with it, and I'm very very glad you liked it!
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I'm overjoyed to hear that you like it, and it means the world to me that you felt as you did. I know I might say that a lot, but it doesn't mean it's any less true. Your comments are invaluable, and they mean more than you think.
Thank you, from the bottom of my heart. It's things like this that keep me writing.
Having come from a broken family let me tell you that you nailed the emotional reaction on Scootaloo's part. Absolutely perfect. This was painful to read, but it hurt real good. Liked and favorited. Keep it up.
Wow, that was amazing.
That... was good. I won't ask for more because it was pretty sad and completely in character.
I was expecting it all the way from the foalbirth scene for her to have died. Fuck if it didn't hurt though.
Well, now I'm depressed.
I haven't read the fic yet, but I wanted to be the first to say I caught this.
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I see what you did thar.
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someone did actually contact me about it, but you, classy shark man of undeniably classiness, are the first to comment on it on the story. Bravo!
I mentioned and cited the book in the author's note as the source of inspiration. My Mom read it to me all the time as a child, so I couldn't resist.
It's been quite a while since you've turned out a new fic, lol. I'm glad to see it was of this quality.
Oh, and btw, in case they didn't tell you, it's been featured.
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I was just informed a little while ago, and I feel like a moron for not having known sooner! Check your messages!
So far I have only ever cried while reading two stories, and this was one of them. The other one was the chapter in Love, in other words which is linked to in the description. Really great story, it was perfect!
2572499 Just did. If we were in the same state, I'd drive over and crack a bottle of Jack Daniels, and give you a good hearty toast!
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I can't tell you how much it means to hear that. I'm overjoyed that you enjoyed my work, and I hope the stuff I write in the future doesn't disappoint!
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If only you were going to Sasquatch, I'd crack open whatever it took to let us celebrate! I've got some beer in the fridge, that will do. Inter-state cheers, my friend! Best of luck!
2572548 Thanks! I'd say best of luck to you too, but since you already seem to have it, that's just a little redundant. Cheers!!
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Glad to know you liked it! I won't lie: your comment about making friends on the site got me thinking about my presence here. Needless to say, I'll be making a nice little effort to keep up the momentum (just as soon as school gets out).
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Agreed... but I have no intention to be a site god. I'd like to just tell some stories which get people thinking, make them feel something they usually don't, or inspire them to write themselves. If i get one person who says they write because of something I wrote, I would be more than content with every word I've put onto this site. Hell, I'd even work on something with them, just so I could be a part of it. But I'm not a big name, and I'd be a fool to act as if I am.
For me, it's quality over quantity... but regardless, I will make an effort to spread out a bit more. I've been reserved for a little longer than I'd like, and it's time I get back into the thick of it.
I nearly cried, you horribly wonderful author you.
That was a beautiful and heartrending story, well written and with plenty of amazing moments.
BUT IT'S ALL RUINED BY ONE THING:
This horrible pun that I sincerely hope was unintentional.
It shows up in the last quarter of the story if you happen to look for it.
You sir, are one of the few authors who makes have feelings for a a character, and then make me cry my eyes out (metaphorically) I was very close to tearing up, knowing that that Scoot's Mom would be dead but hoping she wasn't. Hoping that she was still alive. But those hopes were crushed by Luna and Derpy, saying that she gave her life for Scootaloo and that Derpy would try to do her best to help her out.
I am a cold-hearted person, and you jut melted my heart with all these emotions.
Bravo, good sir, bravo.
The first story to make me cry. Well done. You captured the emotion perfectly.
BUCK!
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heh heh heh
Thaaaattttsss a mistake... good eye! Noted and corrected, and yes... that pun was 100% unintentional.
Or was... because it no longer exists.
There's a simpler and more fulfilling resolution to the question of why Luna didn't do anything than the one given here: she was on the moon at the time.
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I did indeed think about this, and it's been one little thing which has haunted me. I kind of reasoned that, even if she might have been on the moon, she wasn't completely detached from her creation (the Dreamscape) and would still be able to watch, but not a whole lot else... hence her inability to intercede. Her body may have been the one banished, but not her mind. It would also still leave some rationale for her not telling Scootaloo after her release, which might be the betrayal in itself.
Take it as you will, but that's kindof how I saw it playing out. Regardless of the semantics, I do hope you enjoyed the story!
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No problem! Still a great story, just try not to let any puns that bad ever get through again. That one made me
Hope to see more good work from you in the future!
My mother used to read me the same story. To this day, I can't even pick up that book without weeping. Neither, I'm certain, will I be able to take up this fanfiction—first among my favorites—without tears. I made the mistake of reading this fic while at work, and had to excuse myself to go weep like a child in the private bathroom. This is a masterpiece.
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I'm going to go call my mom.
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It's an odd thing to be proud of: making someone cry... but I'm glad you enjoyed my story, and I'm especially glad you gave your Mom some love. They all deserve for many different reasons, and sometimes it takes blubbering like a little filly ( and believe me, I did too...) to remind us of that.
2574508 This is exactly what I was thinking- to me, Luna being on the moon when Scootaloo was born doesn't break the story, it makes it even stronger. It provides a better reason for her not to have acted than just "I'm a princess, I don't have to explain myself to you", but it doesn't necessarily prevent her from having seen what was going on. I think including an explicit reference to this as her reason for not being able to do anything to help until now would improve the story. Sorry if that wasn't clear the first time.
This is by far THE saddest and heart wrenching story I have ever dared to read. The birthing in the hospital and the orphanage made me want to curl up and cry.
I salute you you wonderful author you!
Such a beautiful story.
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It was (admittedly, on my part) a little hazy, but I'm glad you mentioned it. I will add something if I can, just a little line to keep it mostly intact... though you are right: having it noted would be advantageous.
I'd like to thank you for your critique! It means a lot to me that you care enough about the story to pick it apart, analyze what you've found, and suggest changes.
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This... this is awesome!
I'm glad you enjoyed my work, especially if your kitty gets some love in the process!
I liked it, but you could stand to have less purple prose. There were many points where it wasn't clear what was happening at first read. Simplify your descriptions and make your tone a little less overblown (it feels like
) and this will be a better story.
I'm crying. Do you know how much it takes for a book to make me cry? Actually not that much, but there are still not that many stories like this here. That or I can't find them. I want you to write more stories like this, but, I also kinda don't. OH GOSH MY HEART HURTS!
I'm not crying!
I- I'm just... uh...
*Snatches an onion from offscreen*
I'm just making dinner! Not crying at all!
But seriously, excellent work.
You should submit this to EQD... Seriously. This is really great.
, the writing style is neat, and the story itself is just really good.
The emotions are extremely strong
Props to you dude.
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This story has indeed been submitted just three days ago! Fingers crossed, but I think this might be the first of the one's I've sent to make it!
Nervous as all hell though
I need to stop reading sad fics...
I haven't cried for 3 years, from physical pain or emotion. I didn't cry when I watched the Green Mile, I didn't cry when my uncle died, or my aunt passed. I haven't cried in so long, I nearly forgot how good it feels.
Thanks.
My mom gets that book for every new parent she knows.