Case study 201: It's Only Genealogy!

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Super_Big_Mac

Super_Big_Mac #3 · Apr 9th, 2013 · · ·

2396055 Pic's fine, mate. I've seen worse for story pics, and if they don't want to see it, they can turn Mature off.

On a similar note, I know a good artist on the site...

Hoarse

Hoarse #4 · Apr 9th, 2013 · · ·

2400930 I was referring to before. It was a bit more revealing. Wanderer D smoothed things out with me.

Super_Big_Mac

Super_Big_Mac #5 · Apr 9th, 2013 · · ·

2401036 Ah, kk. D's pretty awesome like that.

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Hoarse

Hoarse #9 · Apr 9th, 2013 · · ·

2401630 I'm an optimist, so I see a smile... Glad you enjoyed

Iron Nebula

Iron Nebula #10 · Apr 9th, 2013 · 1 · ·

Not bad, not bad at all.

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Elric of Melnipony

Elric of Melnipony #12 · Apr 10th, 2013 · 1 · ·

Celestia had her horn in Twilight's ass and her mouth on Twilight's pussy? How did she do that without breaking her neck?

Hoarse

Hoarse #13 · Apr 10th, 2013 · 1 · 1 ·

2403630 Long tongue?

Meh, I actually thought about that when I was writing, but decided to overlook anatomy for impact.

I know where you're coming from though

Violet Echoes

Violet Echoes #14 · Apr 10th, 2013 · · ·

2403630
simple really, if twilight was standing on all 4 legs and celly was behind her it would line up right although it was said that she lying down...still works.

this story is amazing, i love the concept of celly and luna trying to teach twilight how to mate properly now she is royalty and is supposed to be a mature adult, i can imagine celly coming up with "genealogy lessons" so twilight will feel less embarrassed xD

Hoarse

Hoarse #15 · Apr 10th, 2013 · · ·

2405873 I like this guy!

Thanks for covering my ass mate

oblivion2k

oblivion2k #16 · Apr 11th, 2013 · · ·

Not bad for your first published clopfic. A little short, especially the buildup. Twilight didn't really seem to add too much to the scene, it seems like you could have substituted any pony in for twilight and wrote nearly the same story. She needs more involvement if she's going to be the centerpiece.
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