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Rarity finds that she is a very rare type of pony, a Marshmallow pony, which are born only once every millenium, their births marked out by the stars. But some strange ponies in armour appear in Ponyville, demanding that Rarity come with them at once. After she refuses, they attempt to take her by force. Rarity is vital to them, but why?
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What. The. Heck.
I can't tell if this is a troll fic or a normal fic, but it seems to be the latter. Anyway, Ima think about what I just read.
I wonder if there are any jelly bean ponies as well...
I needed something original... I'm not trolling, I just thought it would be interesting.
Thanks for reading, anyway.
Done and done
After I read it through again, I agreed with you.
I also removed the 'Sad' tag, because I trial-wrote the ending and decided it wasn't that sad.
Thanks.
This could be a pretty fun adventure story, all you need to do so is keep up this flowing narrative you seem to have. Keep at it, I smell and see potential in this.
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trollfics are only troll fics because you're an idiot looking to be trolled.
>>Tonto the Trotter
Thanks!
I predict I will now be unable to replicate the 'flowing narrative' in later chapters.
It's been quite a while since I've seen this meme.
Soldiers prick her hoof with a needle. If she bleeds blood she is normal. If gooey white molten marshmallow comes out instead, then she is the one.
This seems like a fun little random, not trying to be too serious about itself. I wonder how long it will be before Pinkie begins to hear the voices commanding her to 'eat the marshmallow'
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Oh shi
! Are they gonna cut off her hooves?
Now this story is... Good.
Who am I kidding? Its AWESOME! Moustaches for you!
>> Fimbulvinter
Why didn't I think of that 
2395756 Um. Thanks for that glowing compliment, which I deserved, and which I totally get.
CONTINUE!
I loved it!
it's so random and yet so brilliant
I wonder... are they going to eat Rarity, or worship her??? Anyway, have a mustache
Interesting way to introduce ones self.
Hi, nice to meet you, Let me harvest your soul. Come on, it'll be fun.
Rarity should be twice as wary of Pinkie now that she caught the scent of Marshmallow.
That's not necessarily what's happening. At the moment I have about three alternate endings. I just need to decide which is best.
sounds like it's choose your own adventure time to me.
2455785 ok that is one AWESOME avatar
hi i rule over the everfree can i eat your soul?
they should have brought the elements
also -_- luna celestia dude save rarity shes an element
Oh god, I was hoping someone would write about marshmallow Rarity...
This is the best possible thing!
Stupid question, but why didn't any of the other Ponyville ponies defend themselves against the soldiers? An entire town vs. one platoon would be enough.
And why didn't Twilight contact Celestia or Luna when the trouble began?
2461011- Sorry, I must have forgotten to put this in the story, but Spike was away in Canterlot working for the princesses. Twilight couldn't contact them. And as for the other thing... I don't know.
it might be a good idea to write an alternate, darker ending in which that happens. either way the story is very good
And then Rarity was a Marshmallocorn,
Well. Rarity is the marshmallow pony, has been hunted, kidnapped, beaten, had her house burn down, and become an alicorn in the span of 6 hours.
I'd call it a day.
2468372 Um... 6 hours? By my reckoning this story has stretched over the intended 48 hours
THE FEELS!
Nice way to finally finish the story, and I kinda agree with Rarity's assessment of Bubble Beam.
Mini sequel there maybe?
~InfiniteZero
but i thought successors had to be marshmallow ponies. but bubble is pink..?
3722688 there are pink marshmallows
And yellow
And now
Marshmallow verse
I enjoyed this, but the story felt just a little rushed. That cannot be fixed now, though, so I can only say that that was a very lovely ending.
Wow... That was... Just horrible. Too fast, plot holes everywhere. I can see why so little people gave it an up vote. I am giving it a down vote. Too short, the 'plot' what little there was, moved by too fast, and way too many things that just don't make sense and form plotholes
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I know, right?
I can hardly bear to read this now. Being fair, it was my first story, but I understand your opinion totally. In fact if someone else had written this, I probably would have downvoted it.
I might rewrite it at some point, but probably not. It will likely remain here as something to compare my more recent work to and hope I have improved since this shambles of a story.
Excellent.
Beautiful.
Just beautiful.
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I sincerely hope this is sarcasm
6523100 Um, why?
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Mostly because this is my first ever story, and I'm not afraid to say I think it's pretty bad.
But if you do like it, thanks!
6523927 You are most welcome.
A well done story..thank you
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2437254 LOL