"I pressed enter to post my video and I got knocked out.
who's that? Nanners? Sparklez? Simon? Lewis? FREDDIE?"
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*track*
I'm not sure where this is going... but you've piqued my interest.
Oh!Oh!Do they go to ponyville and spread the magic of internet?
Interesting...Although it certainly needs to be lengthened, it has stolen my interest....
Hmmm I am exited to see what you make of egoraptor
Is it sad if I know who your talking about?
190240
What?
I swear to god, if Tobuscus and Pinkie Pie meet up... That'll be the REAL end of the world.
To the fourth wall, and beyoooooond!
190310
I have no idea who any of those people are besides Simon and Lewis, and just those names have me interested.
190815 Here's some links to their channels
http://www.youtube.com/user/Tobuscus
http://www.youtube.com/user/Captiansparklez
http://www.youtube.com/user/Yogscast
http://www.youtube.com/user/Egoraptor
http://www.youtube.com/user/paperbatVG
http://www.youtube.com/user/smosh
http://www.youtube.com/user/inthelittlewood
http://www.youtube.com/user/freddiew
http://www.youtube.com/user/Seananners
Please, FOR THE LOVE OF ALL THAT IS HOLY, start a new line when someone starts talking. It's difficult to read properly.
But Simon and Lewis make it all worth it.
190926 Fine Fine OOkay!
super internet ponies indeed
THERE EDITED
You might have forgotten, Sheogorath (Almighty God Of Chaos And Cheese) Is also the ruler of the Shivering Isles, expansion pack of the wonderful, Oblivion. Therefore, it is very possible that he has only played Oblivion.
190984 I know, but tobscus has only played skyrim
Due to many errors, I have reposted chapter 2 sorry for the inconveince
Darn it! What did I say about stealing my ideas?!
191064 What'cha talking about, I made this before the tobuscus one got up...
191075I know, i was just joking. I tracked by the way.
191079 YAY
Don't forget, Simon and Lewis are bronies!
191773 bronies that can't recognize AAAAAPPLEOOSA! when they see it.
I'm okay with this.
What is this I don't even
195143 Whut you mean...
S*
*T JUST GOT REAL!!!
Getting better.
My mind is full of fuck right now...I'll track only because of Tobuscus and Yogscast are in this (And i want to see where you take this)
ya need to spaces.SPACES!!!!!!!
*sigh*and this looked like such a good story
214793 I have no Idea what you are talking about
longer chapters please?
also, pbat + tobuscus+ captainsparkles = me gusta
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Sheogorath is too violent to be Discord. Plus Discord fails at everything he attempts. Sheogorath always gets his way regardless. They are too different to be the same!
968246 Exactly.
Inthelittlewood ay, SAPLING WIN!
All in favor for longer chapters, please say I.
1052514 Sorry, I've been having trouble writing for a while, but It's nice to know that some people do read my stuff, even now.
190310 god help us.
Tobuscus + Smosh + captain sparklez = me awesome gusta
Hmmmmm Needs More Pewdiepie
The concept is great like all these Minecrafters in Equestria stories, but isn't executed as well. You use the little stars to indicate motion (don't do that, say they sighed or something), it's short, and we just get a teaspoon of description. Not to bash your story, but this could use a lot of work. Love the idea though, I'll read on.
..what? What the heck was the tune to that song?
once again short. Each quotation should also make a new line, and new lines are indented. Like this.
"Where the heck are we?" asked Sparklez.
"Nowhere, I think," Seananners said.
How do they know who the ponies are? Why didn't you tell us where we were, and what was happening? More description, and capitalize Earth. It's a planet, not dirt. How did Celestia even know Discord was meddling somewhere? You leave too many loose ends like that. Sorry if I was rude.
Okay, interesting concept, but it could be done better.
Tracking
215585 He means you are pacing to fast for the comfort of everyone. and is going with the cliches. like all of the HiE's. The chapters really just need to be longer and have a slower pacing.