After Princess Twilight came to Canterlot to amend her friendships with some old marefriends, she inspires one pony to begin a journey to learn everything she can about the power of friendship.
Minuette, your average unicorn, is actually not that average. Someponies just wish she was, though... because then they probably wouldn't be trapped inside Canterlot's time corridor with a maniacal, time-addicted unicorn...
This is a story of four mares and a mysterious colt, that try to go on in life but, something brings them closer together than ever before. Colgate, Ditzy, Lyra, and BonBon must face something that Equestria only once faced before.
Not long after taking the throne, Twilight finds herself in need of company while she waits for her first friendship council meeting. So she decides to invite her old Canterlot friends over for a sleepover.
this story is very original, i like original. i have never heard of a story that puts these three ponies together, Vinyl, Lyra, and Colgate. and i havent heard much of a Turner Colgate relationship... of course i dont really look that kind of thing up... usualy its Dr. Derpy stuff. whatever. this was a good fic, i liked it. thumbs up and a fav.
I see nothing wrong with this. Maybe a slight change could be made with fancier language, but it's already an improvement over your first story.
this story is very original, i like original. i have never heard of a story that puts these three ponies together, Vinyl, Lyra, and Colgate. and i havent heard much of a Turner Colgate relationship... of course i dont really look that kind of thing up... usualy its Dr. Derpy stuff. whatever. this was a good fic, i liked it. thumbs up and a fav.