... And Magic is Free
Chapter 20- ... And Magic Is Free
The sun shines brightly through my bedroom window, pulling me out of yet another restless night. My parents arguing had kept me up until the early hours of the morning, and I would have tried to ignore it but it's kinda hard considering they were talking about me.
I sigh softly as I roll out of bed, groggily rubbing my eyes with my hoof. I wish I could just climb back into bed and let the day slowly waste away. Sadly, life doesn't seem to go my way.
I create a list in my head of what I need to do today: Regular chores first, and then Apple Bloom said she was coming around to help me with my homework. It sounds easy enough, my to do list for today is an awful lot shorter to what it normally is and I'm glad that I've managed to earn some time with Bloom today. Recently, we've been spending less and less time together. Mainly because of Applejack keeping her on lockdown and the other crusaders trying to tear us apart, I try to find the point in time when things suddenly turned horrid for us all. I can't seem to find what went wrong. I wish I could fix it; I just want to spend time with Apple Bloom.
The thought of seeing Apple Bloom sends warmth throughout my body. I'm not really sure how another pony has managed to make me feel this way. Nopony has ever made me feel this way before, well to be honest; nopony has ever shown me love before. I suppose that's why I was so overprotective, so stubborn when it came to the other crusaders. Apple Bloom is the only pony to show love towards me and I don't want to lose her. I'm so afraid that I'm going to lose her.
Another reason why I acted so cold, particularly towards Scootaloo, was because she reminded me of myself. I know, it's awful, I should know how she feels, how much it hurts to be pushed away. But I could see it in her eyes, the heartbreaking sadness which shows me that she is going through what I go through every day. The fact that she couldn't fly was also an indicator that her family didn't seem to care for her. I don't understand why nopony has questioned it yet, that's when I think back to the bitter words I uttered to her about being unable to fly.
Truthfully, I had to teach myself to fly a few years ago so I had no right to comment on her inability. I should have offered to teach her. I couldn't though; it hurt to look into her lonely, empty eyes. It still hurts now. My first reaction was to be bitter, before Apple Bloom I didn't know anything other than bitterness and hate. Now, I'm going to lose the one thing that is keeping me happy and it's all Scootaloo's fault.
That's why I kissed her. I wanted her to know that she should just go. I wanted her to think that if she stayed around she'd hurt Apple Bloom too. She's ruining my life, she's ruining my one chance of happiness, and I just want to be loved, is that so much to ask?
Right now, I need to do whatever I can to keep Apple Bloom. If that means hurting innocent ponies that don't really deserve it, then I'll do it. I don't want to lose Apple Bloom because Scootaloo is making things worse, if it means I have to make Apple Bloom hate her so that I won't lose her, then I will do it. I just want to be loved.
I trudge out of my room quietly and down the stairs to find my family eating without me. I'm not shocked; it's the same every morning. They don't care about me. Sure, my parents have provided me with food, shelter and the occasional toy to keep myself entertained but once I turned six I was expected to cook for myself. I may be given toys but they never play with me, they never tell me that they love me, they never hold me when I'm sad. They aren't parents, they aren't real parents but I don't know any different. Until I met Apple Bloom, I didn't know what love was. I thought it only existed in stories.
I decide to skip breakfast today, and go on doing my regular chores which include washing the dishes, cleaning the floor and doing the laundry. However, a knock at the front door stops me before I have a chance to even reach the sink.
None of my family seems to shift, wordlessly indicating that I have to deal with that as well as all the other chores which they've left lying around for me. I roll my eyes and mumble bitterly under my breath as I proceed to answer the door.
As the door swings open, the sobs which could only be Apple Bloom's fill the room. I instantly step forward and wrap my forelegs around her. Her warm tears wet my fur as I gently stroke her mane in a hopeless attempt to soothe her.
"What's wrong, sweetie?" I ask gently as I pull her inside.
"The Cutie Mark Crusaders aren't together no more!" She sobs into me, her voice being muffled by my neck.
I freeze for a moment, unsure of how to react. I'm happy because there's no risk of Apple Bloom leaving me anymore, I can look after and stop her from getting hurt by her friends. But, I'm hurting because Bloom is distraught. I hate seeing her upset. I should be happy that I get to have her to myself, but I just can't.
"It's alright, I'm here okay?" I say as I continue to stroke her mane, letting her cry it out.
Bloom shudders against me as her tears continue to fall. "Ah know, Chase, but they were ma best friends, Ah don't want them ta hate me."
"I know, but it'll be okay. What happened?" I ask curiously, I wonder who caused all of this to happen, I bet it was Scootaloo.
"Well, Ah was angry cos Sweetie was stickin' up for Scootaloo and Ah wanted ta see ya, so Ah was telling Sweetie that Scootaloo was lyin' and stuff... Then Scootaloo came and we all had a talk, ya know? It was a nice talk..." She stops as she takes in a shaky breath, obviously still trying to gain composure. "Then she told me that y'all were a bad guy and Ah didn't want ta hear it so Ah snapped, Ah didn't mean ta. Ah just love ya, Chase."
Of course it was Scootaloo who caused this to happen. I would be thanking her but seeing Apple Bloom like this almost makes me want to run and sort this out. Almost. I know that Apple Bloom is hurting but she will get over this soon enough. She has me as a friend, I'll support her until she stops hurting. I just hope it won't take long because I feel helpless just sitting here watching her cry. All I can do is comfort her, and be a better friend than those other girls ever were.
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i thank u meant other not over but it was a good one
... Nope, I don't hate him less. Still wish I could go into Equestria and beat the hell out of him in town square to embarrass him and say he was beaten by a girl.
3564141
I agree with the beating him senseless thing. Although I'm not a girl so I can't claim the second part. What he did there's no real excuse, and he passed the understanding and sympathy threshold chapters ago. I want Pinkie Pie to shoot him out of a cannon into a dragon's mouth then have what evers left slung into the face of a hungry Manticore.
3564141>>3565014
Aww nooo! I genuinely feel sorry for him, I was hoping I'd at least trigger a little ounce of sympathy from you all XD
3565035
Nope. I mean sure, his life isn't great. But that doesn't excuse assaulting a filly, when he's a colt; Threatening her to the point she becomes suicidal; Kissing Scootaloo to get her to back off of Apple Bloom; And then there's the fact that throughout all of this he Blames everything he's done onto Scootaloo.
As Rainbow Dash said previously. He's no good. He litterally has nothing about him that is truly sympahty inducing or dredges up any amount of care for him. Quite the opposite in fact. He's a sociopath, narcissistic, and veiws those around him in only their value to make his own life better. Seriously with what insight I gained from here. I can honestly say that his socipathic tendancies make me more pissed than when I just thought he was manipulative and a D-wad.
this colt is a prick, sorry for my rude language, but its true.
I really hope applejack does something about all this, hes the one corrupting applebloom.
i got no sympathy for this colt at all.
fix this
I Sentence Chase to life in the friendzone!
3565014 Benefits of being a tomboy with odd strength: all the pain of losing to a guy, all the shame of losing to a girl. It's a win-win situation for me
3565035 At this point, it's impossible for me to feel bad for him. I'm one of those people who goes into a kinda rage and doesn't forgive... after twenty chapters of Ass Chaser being an ass, I can't forgive him in just one chapter. It's not 'cause you're a bad writer, it's because you're too good if anything
3565307
Definite benefits. I am 65% jealous and 35% applauding you for your win-win bonuses. And I agree 3565035 you are too good. 20 Chapters of making him a deplorable sociopath. One chapter isn't really going to fix that, especially when you did such a good job building him as a giant Hate Sink that no ammount of Hidden Depths and nothing is really going to make him a Jerkass Woobie.
Probably the only thing that'd make him redeemable. Is a redemption sub-arc, that totally breaks him, and rebuilds his character. Even then ... he's been a HateSink so much that it's almost impossible to Appeal to Pity. Or really feel for him.
On the upside. 3565035 You did a good job making him a villain. And are doing a good job with this fic.
3565035
He had it right until the end. And then it was gone.
This chapter is the first one I haven't enjoyed, as it appears to be nothing more than a sudden attempt to make the story's villain look sympathetic by putting it in his POV and giving him Freudian excuses. I can safely say I will never feel pity for this pony :D
3567882
I'm sorry you didn't enjoy it, and I'm only going to address this issue once, for everypony, okay?
There is a clear difference between making a character seem sympathetic and giving him actual character. Writing the whole straight-villain thing gets really old after a while and it leaves a bad taste in my mouth, I'd prefer making you lot think of another side of Cloud Chaser. To realize he isn't all just jerky jerkiness and that there's some definition in there too.
Sorry if you think it's a "Freudian" excuse but you do realize that does happen, right? People endure poor childhoods and it makes them who we are, and if we're lucky we turn out to be like Scootaloo, a sweet, unassuming filly, than a Cloud Chaser, misguided and lonely.
I'm not asking you to love him, I'm not even asking you to like him, I'm only asking you to think about him, like how I've thought about him. Realize that he is a lot more than some overly clinging colt desperate for love. And if you still hate him after that, fine, that's your God-given right.
Whatever your opinion is, I hope you still continue to enjoy this story as much as I've enjoy writing it, thanks guys, I love you
I do not feel pity towards him. He is still a bastard and this makes it all the worse actually. He's trying to rationalize that what he does ISN'T abusive in the least, a common thing for abusers to assume.
From thinking that Scootaloo would actually lighten up from the kiss to the end, I can't pity him. He's playing this act off in his head and blaming Scootaloo, who's acting pretty normal for a pony in that position. (the way he's acting at least) He's just blaming Scootaloo left and right in the chapter, which makes me still hate him.
Your not good with making him sympathetic, which is great. You can't have villains that have an overly sympathetic side that you feel bad for. Azula from Avatar the Last Airbender is the perfect example of a character that is a total asshat as a villain, has a sympathetic side, but still an asshat you can not change before she's with the gang.
Russia from Hetalia is also in this light. Yeah, his past is really bad. Terrible even, but he's VERY bad. Insane even to the point others fear him. He's still pretty much that character that you can't really sympathize. (Even if you love the character) There have been nations with the same problems but don't go around sporting the insane look. (Italy being bullied MOST of the time by every nation, England's failed attempts with countries, etc.) They could have easily done Cupcakes Hetalia style with other characters. But nah, they don't.
You just make him such a jerk that it makes this character the true true villain. Still want him dead.
3564141 Agree, I can pull the same thing.
3569350
I'm not really seeing the argument in this, if there even is one.
Um, okay?
Don't pity him, hate him, but there is still a reason behind it.
An interesting chapter. Showing us Chaser's background could give sympathy to the villain, but he is still acting out of greed. Whether or not his actions can be blamed on indifference at home is to be seen, but for now, he's responsible for all of his actions.
3580057
Yeah, I mean I feel sorry for him, but I don't think it makes up for his actions.
I have a couple of minor criticisms i think you should probably have put something in the the start of the chapter to more clearly indicate that it was from cloud chasers point of view. i thought i had missed something and had to go back and reread the end of the previous chapter.
also i get that it's like a pet name or whatever but when cloud chaser called applebloom sweetie i really thought he was talking to sweetie belle for a second. it confused me and i had to go back up and reread part of the chapter.
anyway despite that I still enjoyed this chapter. It was nice to at least see why
cloud chaser acts this way, even though i still think he's a prick and that this is all mostly his fault.
How can somepony be so
fuckingstupid!?Does this kid really think Scootaloo is in the wrong!? What a dildo!
Wow, what a dick.
Haven't most of us who have been in a relationship before had this kind of situation, involving all the trust issues and heartache?
(I know exactly how you feel if your answer is a yes!)