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If someone continues this, in a version where the changlings make a comback, there needs to be an epiphany moment where AJ realizes "Ah did this."
Short, but very nice.
If you ask me however, you should be the one to continue this.
Chrysalis seeking out AJ, trying to find a new way to live rather than survive...
hell, these are awesome grounds for a redemption story.
...I don't know why, but I couldn't not imagine the two drones as puppies...Now I want to take one home.
, you should consider continuing it in some direction as it's an interesting premise.
Oh and the story was good too
I wonder how long it'll be till someone tries to create a sequel to this... be it Chrysajack, or any other possible direction it could take...
Why is there so much Changeling hate? You did good with this, but I can't help but see the Changeling's as a beautiful grossly misguided people. I also see them as having more magic than most unicorns. Thanks for this.
Well damn, Nice going. defently not your normal writing style! You did a good job on the random pull! I liked the way how you ended it though, very open could become a really big story or just end there.
we are tied at the moment though! we shall see what happens! Good luck!
Also where did you get the art? did you do it?
Poor Changeling.
2395262 Great, let me know what you think!
2395367 Yeah, I was thinking something along those lines. I saw Applejack's intentions here as giving Chrysalis a kick in the flank to get her back on her hooves. But she obviously didn't give it a lot of thought, and the future consequences could be disastrous.
2395416 Hey, thanks! That's certainly one way the story could play out, there are a lot of possibilities. As I said, I personally have no plans to continue it, though I'm starting to fancy making some. I'll be thinking about it, for sure
2395506 Puppy changelings! I kind of saw them that way myself
Thanks, I'm giving some thought to continue it, but as I said above, no plans as of yet.
2395654 I certainly hope someone does. Seeing everyone's comments, it seems there are a lot more directions the story could take than I originally thought. It'd be cool to see someone's interpretation. Thanks for the comment.
2396747 Indeed, I see them as a people who have a unique society, biology, etc. There's a lot of potential with them, and exploring it just a little bit here was quite fun. I have other planned stories and snippets which make more mention of things like a 'hive mind' or the changelings' need to 'feed on love'.
In regards to their magic, I personally see them as getting more powerful by being in proximity to one another (a la Geth), as well as getting a significant boost from pony love (that would make for an awesome theme in a shipping story). Which is a possible explanation for how Chrysalis overpowered Celestia.
Just my thoughts
As I said there's lots of potential there. I'd love to see it explored further!
2397492 Awesome, thank you! Yup, it's very close this time - good luck to you as well!
As for the art, yes I did make it myself. Here it is on my deviantart - UnlicensedBrony on deviantart.
2398991 Indeed
Hopefully AJ's little kick in the flank will get her moving again.
2400758 Thanks for acknowledging my post. I'd try to write a sequel to this myself, but I'd probably suck... Maybe when I can improve my writing skills
2400758 Reading it now. Did I missread or was Chryssi described as being half the size of AJ...?
2400758 I like it, let's see where this goes!
2400758
Well just keep the idea simmering in the back of your mind until it's ready, maybe brainstorm some ideas for it with someone. Changeling puppies would be amazing...now I really want one...
...You've just crossed my favorite pony species with my second favorite Mass Effect race
...You...are amazing.
The dialogue is very smartly written, which made it a joy to read! Great little quip here, I loved it!
2400793 By all means give it a shot if you want to! It's important to try to not worry about whether you suck or not, otherwise it's no fun at all (and, speaking from experience, you'll never get anything done
).
2400852 I could've worded that part better. Not sure how, just yet, but I could have. Since Chrysalis is laying down beneath the blanket, she is half of AJ's height. If she were to stand up, she'd be a lot taller.
2400869 Thanks! Let's hope it goes somewhere, whether it's me or someone else who takes it there.
2400904 Aw, thanks
Hehe. And yes, the idea is now simmering - we'll see if anything comes of it! 
2400957 Thank you very much! I hope to make more soon
2402217
I'm now reimagining the entire Mass Effect series with the Geth replaced by the Changelings...and oddly...nothing changed...it all fits too perfectly. The Changelings even drop down out of the sky like the Geth do! And the Geth ship designs? Insectoid. Dear Celestia this is awesome.
2400758>>2400758 I am writing a Changeling story about them abandoning their Queen and striking out alone, and could use another perspective and thoughts. I don't see them as bugs (their wings are the only reason I think anyone would say that) but I also see them a bit like the rachni. Beautiful, full of potential and misguided, but not for long. Anyways, would love to here from you. PM me if your interested.
2402217 I'll consider it, good author...
2414490 It was a lot closer than last time. Thanks again for the challenge, it's a great push to get more stories out there (and good practise too). Shall we do another draw? PM and let me know if you're game!
It's too bad you're not going to continue this. It feels like the set up to something bigger, and it certainly could be a much bigger story. There are a lot of different things you could explore, the consequences of AJ's actions, how she would feel if this led to her friends being harmed, or how Chrysalis will view Applejack now, might she seek her out as a friend? Spare her in the coming onslaught?
Or maybe the story is best as it is, with endless possibilities. Either way, good work.
I like to think this is what Applejack was thinking;
I'm as bored as buck!
Lets see here if I can rangle an adventure out of old Chrissy here. 
Sorry for the late replies! Lost track of time again
It's not fair that two weeks can just disappear like that!
2428690 Thanks a lot! There are definitely a tonne of possibilities for this, and I'd love to explore it. But, as always, there are a hundred more stories and ideas that I want to explore as well
2462589 Haha, well, that's one way to look at it
Somehow found this story of yours, Unlicensed, and I demand that you continue it after Eyes on You!
Nah seriously, it's fine if you don't, but even if this was a random fic you wrote, there is so much potential to be exploited here. It would be a total shame to let it go to waste...
In hopes that you see and read this comment.
Your pal, Applejack-fan
3712934 I know! I really do want to continue it somehow, and the same goes for several of my other works. Just finding the time and focus to do it (I'm working on it
)
I'll let you know if I come up with a plan for this story! And thanks very much once again pal!
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You're more than welcome, buddy
This needs to become something more.
Hah, nice. Though I have a feeling that in some of the possible futures it comes back to bite Applejack in the plot.
Another engaging read. Well-written too. Thank you for sharing.