Brusher, a young pegasus pony, is happily flying along until she is hit by a misfired spell from Twilight's library. She ends up with a face full of bricks as she is flung through a wall that was attached to Max's house. however, things quickly turn from bad to worse when Twilight manages to get her back... with an unexpected guest...
(Recording an Audio version if you want my lovely Yorkshire accented voice reading this! Will be posting on Youtube as soon as each chapter is done.)
Chapters (21)
I LIKE IT
interesting, i'd like to see where this goes. i'm a little tentative about tracking this, because hey, humans-in-equestria fics are a dime a dozen. 4/5 for right now.
Alright two things. First, Dafuq? Second, trackin.
HEY! Maybe Skye can dragonshout! Her first words would be 'FUS RO DAH!'
"she muttered, flying towards canterlot, suddenly disappearing in a cloud of muffin-scented smoke." - Y U NO HAVE CAPITAL LETTER
"But first, lets get this guy up!" - let's
"LETS PARTY!" - Same thing
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I swear your cutie mark would be the little green wavy line... Thanks again!
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I finished reading this chapter...
"the times when we only had one Xbox" - had only (see this)
"but we only have the settee for you to sleep on" - I'm pretty sure the above applies to this, too
"If its okay with you and Luna" - it's
"my job at Sweet Apple Acres was raking in the bits" - I don't think that's how you spell it
"Me and Luna" - Luna and I
This line:
"Dammit, y u no warn me when you do shit like this?" He said, imitating the meme from earth.
is funny!
"as we walked out of the door, Holding our new" -
"we have an important address to make in the morning" - wut
"to stop ageing so fast" - This bothers me because of this
"No, your the best father that this little baby could ask for" - you're
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Thanks again for the corrections, but I prefer to use UK spellings I'm more familiar with.
"over our child, She stood up" -
"Why did we fly the entire way here when we know they wouldn't have left without a good reason, Dash?" - You require a comma here
"last time I checked Griffons weren't born from ponies" -
"I think Celestia has had enough of a sleep in. Lets go!" - Let's
"she could talk to her sister about making the Address" -
"Sorry, only royalty allowed to help plan an address to the people." -
"Me, Elliott and Rainbow stood there" - Elliot, Rainbow, and I (or something similar)
"I have gathered you her for an important announcement" -
"was amazed by this. another beam" -
(I'm not done reading this chapter, I'll finish it later)
D'awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!
So much cuteness. OH GOD!! HHHHHHHHHHHHHHNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11
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I finished reading this chapter,and I didn't find any more errors
"Same again, Do you object, Princess Luna?" -
"When she opened them with her magic, everypony in the chapel were stunned" - was
I noticed you did this multiple times:
"No." Said Luna.
^ Hmm... I'm not sure about this
(not finished reading chapter, I keep getting interrupted)
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I always put a capital directly after speech, it's how I was taught to write.
You help me so damn much 
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Yay, I'm a postreader
"Luna's necklace was a string of ice-like crystals joined my small links made of stone." - RAGE
"I had gotten rid of my keys from earth long ago" - Y U NO CAPITAL LETTER? Y I SO MEME?!
"Fluttershy came over, and was surprised to find me sat on the floor with my baby daughter, jiggling a key-chain around." - sitting
"You just look after the Skye." - the Skye?
"Erm, I don't know if you know or not, but I'm Luna's husband now?" The guard on the left facehoofed. -
"I said through chocking fits of laughter." - Did you mean choking, or am I just stupid?
"When we had all finished tickling each-other" - each other does not require a dash
OMFG ITS ME!
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first and yay
"Ha! you're not the only one with fingers now!" -
"remembering the times when I had almost flipped out when someone my family or my freinds." - First, friends. Second, what?
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I accidentally the whole word...
bigest douchebagge lol
I saw epilogue and I was all like:
Then I saw prologue and i was all like:
That was baller, never expected that. The title also confused me then i read 0the chapter.
Max is a huge ass troll
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I know I am...
((Didn't want him to come across as that...
))
D'aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaww
Haha the D'aaaaawww has been doubled!!!!
220043 Meh, ageing seems better on the eyes to me... even if the spellcheck my web browser has doesn't count it as a actual word....
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you can tell shits about to go down soon!
242119 Yes
first
"Skye carefully lifted out a Tiara that" - Why does "tiara" have a capital letter?
"As I sat next to Dad'd lifeless body. A surge of emotions hit me." -
It's "beginning", not "beggining"
"I've been refusing to use my griffon ever since the incident" - "use my griffon"?
"and everyone is worried about me." - You used "everyone" there and "Nopony" here: "Nopony said a word." - What happened to being consistent?
"A/N: It's gonna take more than that to keep him down!" - What the hell does "A/N" mean? People keep using it, and it's bothering me dammit!
"C'mon, lets get to wherever your birthday party is Skye" - let's
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A/N is a shortening of Author's Note. Ill make the corrections once I get home.
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Nopony - Only ponies
Everyone - Non-ponies included. (E.g. Elliott, as he is actually a human.)
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Okay then
shit went down. knew it.
epic.sauce
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i am totally putting a sticker that says "royal canterlot voice" on my capslock
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I would do that if I could
Me to but I'm using my family's computer as my laptop has just freshly broken
The damn thing just won't work!
Nightmare is a tank
L4d if you didn't know
Awesome chap. Everybody needs to let out a little bloodlust now and then, or it consumes you.
suddenly went very dark for a second. also A jar appeared in his hand.
"This should work!" i get that