Twilight is faced with the chance to change another pony’s life. If she takes it, she will lose everything she has ever gained. If she decides against it, everything will remain the same. But to that pony, it would mean a world of difference.
This story takes place about a week after the events of the finale in season three.
Author note: This story has been stuck in my head since I first heard that twilight was going to be an Alicorn. This is my first time writing a story for this site so let me know what you think in the comments and also if you catch any mistakes I will do my best to fix them as fast as I can. Thank you in advance. /)
Thanks to Blue Dragon for editing this story.
Image provided by Sagebush @ http://sagebrushpony.deviantart.com/
Fear not, LiteraTec operative Thursday Next has been dispatched to retrieve the stolen periods, commas, capital letters and apostrophes.
But seriously, get a proofreader. Some very basic grammatical rules have been broken.
I will like this story, if you improve the grammar I might fav it.
Overall concept is quite interesting, I want to see a happy Scootaloo.
Yes, I reckon there are a lot of typo mistakes, but the way story is told is quite acceptable.
I don't know why your story has more dislikes than likes.
You're using an image of mine that has not been credited and has had its signature removed. Would you be kind enough to correct this?
2363203 Sorry I meant to credit you for this image but I completely forgot.
I will fix it right away.
2363174 2362862 Thank you both for your input I am currently looking for a person to proofread these so hopefully I will be able to find one soon.
2363174 I guess grammar nazis and people who just wants Scootaloo to suffer.
I agree with everyone else, just capitalize the names, add commas, and you'd be good, oh also your and you're...
needs to be worked on.
how about, Twilight began to flap her wing unsteadily, slowly she gained height until level with Rainbow Dash. Over all I am really interested in this story and I can't wait for more!
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Try now, maybe?
*She, lol. It's not that big of a deal, but still...
I really enjoyed the concept, and am looking forward to where you'll take this. I have my own guesses as to where the story will be going, but I'll keep them to myself for now. Overall, I really can't wait to see more. (Remember, take as much time as you need! No one will blame you for extra time so long as quality is first-rate, which it will be, I'm sure. 
) I'm positive you'll get Part Two out as soon as you can, but know you have my support. /)(\
Anyway, I figured I'd comment here for good measure. Plus, comments are always nice to see, right?
(My favorite part of the chapter so far--Rainbow and Twi's interactions.
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I really like this so far. Keep going with it. I look forward to seeing what it is that you come up with to add to this.
Since Scootaloo always used her scooter to get around, she didn't use her wings.
-Her wings are how she powers the scooter...
2542554 Thanks for catching that I didn't even notice that.
I'll fix that when I get a chance so it makes more sense.
Oh and thank you for the favorite also.
Much better!
I hope this was an intermission chapter though, because chapters shorter than 1000 words are kind of weak to hold up an entire story.
The quality of this story is increasing. Very good!
Couldn't really find any actual problems in this chapter, Twilight, Rainbow, Scoots and Spike is really well written, none of them acts OOC as far as I noticed.
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Twilight's veeeery interested in fillies.
I have to say: I love this idea. I am a sucker for Scootaloo and Rainbow Dash, and this is a interesting idea. Taking away flying is one thing, but I don't think I have ever seen some one take away her cloud walking as well.
Keep up the good work and stay awesome!
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I agree wholeheartedly with you. Scootaloo and Rainbow Dash are adorable to me, ever since the episode Sleepless in Ponyville. Though I don't read as much of them as I ought to.
To the author: you're doing amazing so far. Keep it up
! I look forward to editing more for you. :)
Come on, Twilight! You can make a turtle fly, but not a pegasus with crippled wings? To the lab!
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My Little Pony: Steampunk is magic.
Decent story.
4159165 Thanks, I guess.
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You're welcome. Trust me I didn't mean it like a back-handed compliment. The characterizations pretty good, the story is well enough put together. While not mind blowing, it's still an enjoyable fic and something that I'm looking forward to seeing if Twilight who was able to fix Star Swirl the bearded's mess of a spell. Can fix this train wreck of a spell as well. After all her special talent is magic, and she is a genius. Maybe use the EoH to Freindship blast Scootaloo when using the wing spell?
Anyways. It's a decent fic, and I eagerly await to see what happens next.
one of my top 10 fave please keep up the alsome work
This chapter feels really off to me. Twilight hears that the spell utilises giving over her Pegasus magic entirely, and doesn't even blink or even have a split-second of introspection, nothing at all. She's way too casual there.
Another dead fanfic? *sigh*