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[2/19/2014 9:24:53 PM] Merlos The Mad: Turtle, word on the street is your being you [2/19/2014 9:24:56 PM] Merlos The Mad: stop that
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Well, right now I'm regretting posting this so early.
Oh well.
This is AMAZING. I love the plot, how the little things can give me such a big shock, like how a world that revolved around six ponies in freedom can go into revolving around them in chains and numbers. The sophistication, how the one characters act, it's all just.. Wonderful. Keep it up, I am dying for more now.
How often are you going to be putting chapters out, because I am really liking this story so far.
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It'll vary. It probably will turn out like my story "Conscious" where I'll make a 2nd chapter but then I'll get bored with how much work I put into it only for it to get no attention and then it'll die off.
I am working on the 2nd chapter though. I will finish this story eventually.
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I have never received such a wonderful comment. Thank you. I really needed that and I'll try to continue as best as I can for you.
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I will be on the edge of my seat for more, this is one of my new favorites and it's only just begun. You deserve praise, this is a once in a blue moon amazing story that you stumble upon and love, then end up forgetting how you found it.
am I ranting at you if I am sorry i love it btw
Kinda like the GeoVerse?
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Yep.
Only I don't know what mines about.
2942339 Head into it blind then. It's always more fun to write when even the author doesn't know what'll happen next.
Amazing.
I love it man, can't wait for the next chapter.
I'm enjoying this so far
I'll be keeping an eye on it.
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Oh...
I thought it was the carnival of fear.
Woah.
This place be freaky.
Is the main character red?
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Her fur? It's white.
Her mane/tail? Not described yet.
Hmm. I admit that I only started reading this story because I recognized the art of Rakdos Carnarium. I can't say it's been used inappropriately. A very interesting dystopia you've created here, with just enough hints at the overarching societal structure to keep things interesting without giving away the game. Definitely looking forward to more.
If you build a man a fire, you'll keep him warm for a day, but if you set a man on fire you'll keep him warm for the rest of his life."
*Clears throat*
Other than that one thing, a stellar job as always. And remember little fillies: You never know what's on the other side of any closed doors. Especially metal ones, cause those guys are hard to see through.
Good to see this chapter after such a long time! I was beginning to think that you had dropped this story. Can't wait for the next chapter!
-would not be against romance, everyone needs love, as long as it well written or extremely cheesy-
Is protag male or female? Or had that not been stated? I forgot.
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Oh, it'll have romance, but it won't focus on romance. It'll just be brushing against the romance stuff.
The protag is female, I don't know if it was mentioned yet or not,
I should know the most about my own story, but I'm always forgetting the details written down.
Thanks for the comment
The door
The Door
What lies beyond The Door?
Maybe a room and nothing more.
Or maybe a portal to the past before.
I'm not up to date, but this is one of my favorite stories on the site.
This is a very fascinating story! I love the small snippets of world building your giving us and the way you are describing their society. I'm so very curious about this AU and you are leading me on like a fish on a hook with just the right amount of bait an tug to make me just keep following. I can't wait for the next chapter!!
Happy Hearth's Warming! And Update soon!!
Now that's unnerving. I think that they know that somepony went into the door, but don't know who. So they're trying to find out who it was, and at least hoping that whoever did if killed by the lashes, if they got lucky.
Lol, dat ending.
That really is how to get someone quiet.
Rather sudden tho, don't ya think?
I think I asked this before, but the protag is female right?
Also this world you made is very interesting, can't wait till you explore it some more.
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yea, I always feel like i end it to abruptly
and yes, the protag is female
That tiny colorful horse is thirsty.
He needs to calm it.
Lol
I liked it. Keep it going. :)
A new mare, ready to... kick ass?
Dat apology. Loved it.
Still loving this story.
Hmm. . . For some reason I'm not surprised she got raped, I kinda half expected it with the type of society you're building here.
And interesting, acidic atmosphere? Hm, most likely the outside has a lot of humidity, but mixed in with it is some caustic substance which explains why her skin started to melt from such short exposure time.
-takes deep, tormented breaths as anger flows into my body-
-shakes a little from spasms of anger-
-pulls out a machete-
-smiles extremely creepily and widely-
motherfuckers gonna die now!
-slices all evil ponies in half, chops them into small chunks, and feeds their desiccated remains to a starving manticore-
. . .
-points at the author-
dont do that again. i implore you.
-runs off into a forest, giggling madly-
1. Protag is bi polar on the whole lover thing.
2. AHHHHHHH! HOW COULD YOU DO THAT!!
I WANTED TO SEE LOVE BLOOM U EVIL PONIES!
Gratuitous revenge scene is now required for this story.
Can't wait.
Yeah the lover thing is bipolar . Besides keep this going, I'm loving it.
I don't know what heartless dick would downvote this awesome story.
Screw you, heartless dick.
That was brutal.
If this doesn't get our numbered protagonist to start fighting back against these guys, even just in her mind, nothing will.
*slow clap*
Good work #20443. Good work, indeed.
I'll hold you to that sequel bit, we need more 20443.
Hm, not a bad ending. Seemed kinda rushed a bit though.
What kept me glued to this story was that its setting was something completely original. I want to know more about the world in which #20443 lived in. Its history, what kind of catastrophe or power had turned Equestria into the land of horror you are building it to be. And so much more. I'm actually okay with you killing off #20443 because we can now get to another pony and see the world from another perspective.
Hm, perhaps there will be six books? One for each type of mask? That would be interesting, so compare the way other masks live. Anyway, really hope you do a sequel to this.
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I have thought about six books, but there will be at least two, one for the star ponies, and I hope one for the rainbow/cloud ponies but since those are the soldiers and I don't want to make this a fallout thing, that one sounds hard.
I apologize for the rushed ending, I just wanted to get it done, and the sequel will reveal more about this wonderful world :D (If I actually start it instead of keeping it all in my head like a lot of my ideas :c)
I really appreciated your comment, and I was surprised you guessed the way I was going to continue this in a blunt way.
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Hehe, as the old saying goes "Two idiots, one thought."
Gives me an abandoned by Disney vibe.
Vaguely reminds me of 1984...