After several weeks of working himself to the bone, an unabashedly solitary man collapses into bed in exhaustion, still in his work clothes. After some introspection, he manages to get to sleep and awakens to find himself not only in Equestria, but inside Spike's body! Follow his struggles as he attempts to adapt to world diametrically opposed to his philosophies on life in this tale.
This is my first attempt at fan fiction. All feedback is welcomed!
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Interesting.
Tracking.
I hope Spike isn't in his body!
>Self insert
>First Fanfiction
Yea, Fuck off.
Cheers
~iraqlobstah
199240
>First Fic.
>Been an asshole.
My good sir, Go have sex with yourself. (In other words SCREW YOU.)
Good day.
200108
[Link]
Can't blame me for being my ol' sarcastic assholish self.
Cheers
~iraqlobstah
201024
Yes I can.
This,
Good day.
202369
No you can't.
Good day to you sir!
Cheers
~iraqlobstah
Neat.
199039 Thanks. I hope to keep it interesting.
199105 He he, well read Chapter Two for the answer.
199240 Sorry if I offended you. You are certainly entitled to your opinion. What type of stories do you like to read?
200108 Thanks for the assist!
219431 Thanks for the feedback!
225482
Sorry about that, i was mad at something.
Stories i like?
Well...Look at the stories im tracking, that would give you a pretty good idea.
Cheers
~iraqlobstah
epic
nice
371861
Argument is old, finished
and you have no right to start it up again.
Please don't
Cheers
~iraqlobstah
I want to apologize for taking so long in returning to this story. I am uncomfortable with writing most of the established characters because I fear destroying their characterizations.
Some, such as Applejack and Zecora, are difficult to write for technical reasons. 
Others are simply difficult for me to imagine. 
I've spent a lot of time over the past month reading lots of fiction to see how people approach this issue and I'm ready to try moving forward again. Please feel free to critique to your heart's content. I appreciate all feedback! 
So you are afraid to write further on the story for risk of fucking it up... lol
dont be afride to write worst chase it that a randome stranger will say it sucks and that isent realy the end of the world rigth
But it is good to see that your taking time and and effort to make sure it's good and not just write and post chapter without thinking them through,
and so far it's paying off,
as long as we don't need to wait a month for the next update i have nothing negative to say about this story without nitpicking and looking for errors, its just overall well done and most important fun to read.
406891 Thanks for the positive comments.
I'll keep working on my writing and posting updates with more frequency. 
Keep writing, very interesting and original concept!
> It appeared ape-like, although the few areas of bare skin that showed had surprisingly little fur.
I don't mean to pick on you, specifically, but this is starting to become a peeve of mine. I've lost count of the number of HiE stories in which the first thing a pony does upon seeing a human is compare him with an ape. To me this seems highly unlikely for a bunch of reasons. For one thing, humans really don't look that much like apes. For thousands of years here on Earth, until Darwin came along, nobody made any special connection between humans and apes -- and Darwin only figured it out after years of study and insights into evolutionary processes that may not even happen in the magical land of Equestria (especially if griffins and pegasi and minotaurs are any indicators!).
Furthermore, we've got no reason to suspect that apes even exist in pony world. If they do, it's a good bet that they live in tropical regions far from Equestria, and therefore are not familiar animals for ponies to make comparisons with. I long for a HiE story in which a pony's first impulse is to compare a human with... a minotaur... or a gnoll (i.e. Diamond Dog)... or Spike... or an elf, a troll, a goblin, a fairy... I'm sure Equestria is at least as likely to have those as it is to have apes.
Man, this sh... oot is getting tense.
Could you try and make longer chapters? Even if it takes longer 'tween uploads, reading a big one is a lot more satisfying.
424601 Thanks I will do!
436324 That's a fair point I suppose. Taxonomically, Humans are one of the four great apes, along with chimpanzees, gorillas, and orangutans, however we don't particularly look much like them, at least in my opinion. Since we know for a fact that spider monkeys exist in the Canterlot gardens as mentioned by Fluttershy in The Best Night Ever, and since we have seen all kinds of exotic animals such as flamingos, toucans, wallaroos, and lions, I personally think it likely that apes exist somewhere. If they do, then it is not unreasonable for someone like Celestia, who has lived for centuries, to at least have knowledge of them.
That said, Celestia did compare him to a minotaur in Chapter Six, and your comment also gave me some ideas for the future. Thanks for the feedback. 
436599 I'll definitely longer chapters a shot. How long is the ideal chapter length do you think?
437908 For you, about 5 to 6K words. It pushes the plot along well, and doesn't fill the reader's head with content.
If you're going to make expositions, like "worldbuilding", do them longer.
437936 Cool. I'll try for a new chapter on Friday around 5-6k words. Thanks again!
437936 I want to apologize. I was not able to get my chapter up over 5k words for a couple of reasons. Primarily, I started it too late and I wanted to finish it tonight; in other words I didn't have time to fill it out. Also, the way I wrote the sections would have been a bit awkward at that length. It would have had to be shorter or longer. I'll put some more effort into the next one. This story arc will hopefully be coming to a close soon.
I do have an open question to whom it may concern. When writing Luna's Royal Canterlot voice, would you use all caps or just exclamation points? Thanks in advance for your feedback.
To everyone who has read this story, rated, commented, and/or favorited, I just want to say thank you very much!
I'm having a lot of fun writing and I look forwarding to developing this story further. 
How did Celestia get back to Canterlot so fast? If Edwin was in Ponyville during the beating, the only way Celestia could have brought him back would be to teleport, which is a magical ability. Other than that, good story, nice writing, interesting concept.
450510 Personaly I'd use all caps. Save the exclamation points for Pinkie. You'll need as many as you can get.
And the plot thickens to the point of oatmeal......
I like the direction this fic is heading... MOAR!!!
450953 I'll have to do some editing to fix the time issue. Ponyville looks pretty close to Canterlot in the show but not to the point where a chariot could fly the distance in the five minutes or so of War Horse's speech. Thanks for the feedback!
Edit: I altered the ending of this chapter to make the time frame more ambiguous. Hopefully it will make more sense now.
451016 Mmmm, oatmeal. Where's the Celestia licking her chops emoticon?
451163 My first MOAR! Awesome!
Seriously, thanks guys! I'm looking forward to telling the rest of Edwin's story.
Another week, another update. I want to thank CrappyUnicorn for allowing me to use his image in this chapter. Check out his DeviantArt if you want to be amazed. As always, comments and feedback are appreciated!
P.S. So how about A Royal Wedding, eh? Incredible! Exposition, world building, drama, suspense, action, music, the list goes on!
Can't wait for next update... You sir deserve some moustache spike
Best wedding ever
Though the Tori Spelling ads pissed me off
SPOILERS
Hopefully we get to see Shining Armor and Princess Cadence again as well as the Changelings
479410 Thanks!
479742 I loved Princess Cadance. I think it was especially interesting that she was depicted as an adolescent while she was Twilight Sparkle's foal-sitter. It makes me think that Celestia and Luna might have another sister(s) or brother(s) since Luna would have been on the moon when Cadance was born. I wonder now how large the royal family is exactly. We have Celestia, Luna, Blueblood, and Cadance, but who else could be out there?
Another update and the longest chapter yet. I missed last week because I discovered a fanfic called 'My Little Alicorn' and, like an idiot, spent most of the week reading through it instead of writing (or doing much of anything else). Great story, by the way, and I would definitely recommend it.
The image in this chapter is a crop from a vector of Canterlot done by ~Azure-Vortex on DeviantArt and edited my myself. I imagine the large room below the guest wing is probably the area where the Grand Galloping Gala is held, some sort of ballroom, especially since there appears to be a garden adjacent.
Thanks for reading. As always tips, suggestions, questions, flames, and all sorts of feedback are welcomed!
P.S. I couldn't resist writing Celestia having cake lol!
Another well done chapter, I like how this is all turning out. Especially the whole immunity to magic sort of stuff, that is certainly going to be fun to see you get past to transfer the bodies back, and even more so if your hints about AOE mind manipulation from the magical world is true and makes the human mad.
548771 Thank you so much for your comment!
Edwin's magical resistance has some significance that will be delved into later. As for him getting mad, maybe frustrated would be a better word. Unlike many humans who end up in Equestria (in fanfiction), he was (mostly) happy on Earth and is a fish out of water in Equestria. Thanks again!
nice chapter
, as i said before i like the pace the story is progressing at, and next chapter will be quite fun indeed
so is it like a switcheroo thing or more like yugioh except without the yelling into the sky, playing a childrens card game originated from egypt somehow, or switching minds.
LIKE A BAWSS! I shall kill you and youse yur sap for mah PANCAKES!
I just came across this story, and I'm really enjoying it! Are you going to continue writing? It seems that it hasn't been updating in a while.
I hope his job skills and hobbies will be a help in this story.
Wow, so it would look like these two have to work together to save the day huh. I hope this adventure will help them get their original bodies back soon.
Great job utilizing Spike's body Edwin, too bad you got him damage, but you did well considering your circumstance. Not to mention it seems like Spike is not so far away from the human as I thought.
Oh boy I wonder if these guys can learn some psychic connection and talk to each other in their mind.
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The story is looking pretty great so far, just keep on believing yourself and write the best way you can. That's all I can say for now.
Let's see how he and Spike can meet each other and save each other.
That's so sad of Spike to handle one of the cruelest openings of Humans in Equestrias, which is the rough treatments of the Princesses' high-strung guards.
Trying to fix the solution as soon as possible, which is really, really smart. Glad both heroes are about to reach the goals, but now the next goal is to prove Edwin is a good guy.
Awesome it's time for the real truth to find out, and I'm betting that the Royal Guard will now have secret tests of character from now on.
This is great, it seems like as the princess said, the worst of this entire situation is over, but it's still far from it. Now it's time for all the heroes to gather their information together and/or prepare for the tasks at hand.
I love this Swapped Spike story, it's very good with lots of adventure and everyone being as smart and as tolerable as they can in this. It's kind of sad that your story is also in the incomplete limbo like my own story, in fact I feel a little more inspired to continue my story. It's great that you have wrote it so well and everyone being easily recognizable, I'm so glad that I went out of my way to look for this story and to have read it. I really wish you can continue, but like my own fans it's up to you to find a way to continue it. I really want to know how this discussion of comparing mysteries will go and I hope Edwin will vehemently not let this go in a secret, at least not to the mane 6 if Celestia is persistent, when they found out that it will be a while to get Spike's and Edwin's bodies back to normal because he wants to help Spike win Rarity's affection in his own way and not trick her into liking Spike because Edwin was in his body. Anyway it's a very great story and I hope you will end up continuing one day, I have a lot of fun reading it. :D