• Member Since 28th Jan, 2013
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Edensola


Used to write a lot more on FimFic some time ago, left for a bit, but want to get into the groove again.

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When a lone baby draconequus happens to stumble into Cheerilee's class one day, the caring mare can't help but take it upon herself to attempt raising it.

But as time goes on, Cheerilee soon learns the risks of taking in a draconequus. Risks, that could cost the both of them, everything.


(Much loved Editor: The11thWonder, + Revision Chapters 9 & 10: Jokie155)

Chapters (12)
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Comments ( 305 )

Wow... I'm already expecting big things.

Having read through this, I am impressed. You've nailed all of the characters. Twilight's insistence on taking every precaution, Discord's sarcastic and humorous approach, the mutual concern that Rarity and Fluttershy have for cruel and unusual actions, and of course Cheerilee's caring and considerate nature.

Woah.


This is really good. There are a bit of spelling errors here and there, but it was really good. The draconequus was so cute and I had a few D'aww moments. I also got a little bit of liquid pride at the end.

Nice Job!

I like it! Very clever with a baby draconequus, I think that the interactions with it and Cheerilee will be really interesting to watch.

Interesting, all though Twilight's speech about why it had to be alone was kind a lacking there. Anyway MOAR! :flutterrage:

awesome fic is awesome

very sweet

I'm guessing Eris is her name

2359682 no im pretty sure its melancholy.

I'm really happy you guys are enjoying this story! :pinkiesad2:

I really need to read more of your stories, Eden.

I really want to read this story but i am just sitting here staring at that Tragedy tag...itsthe only thing keeping me from starting... so I gotta ask to know if I cantake it. Anyone Die? maimed i can handle their still there at least.

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Ah I'm sorry, I want to tell you but I don't want to reveal too much if you do decide to read it as well. :applecry:

I guess all I'll say is, I tend to use the tags more so as symbolism rather than their literal meanings.

:unsuresweetie: It's pretty confusing but, I'm pretty sure you'll be able to handle it. :pinkiesad2:

At some point you have Twilight saying "Me and Fluttershy..." when it should be "Fluttershy and I". Since this is within dialog, I would have let it slide, as people and ponies don't always have perfect grammar, but Twilight seems to be the kind that would be a private Grammar Nazi to herself, like I am, so you might want to change that.

Otherwise, adorable chapter! :fluttercry: So much d'awwww...

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"Me and Fluttershy..." when it should be "Fluttershy and I".

FIXED! :pinkiehappy:

"Momma", A word that has blown the mind and broke the heart of untold millions.

Is this going to end sad? Or happy? because I need to know.

I like the name you chose for her :heart:

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broke the heart of untold millions.

In a good way...right?

Eve is one of my 2 favorite names for girl

Part of me hopes this will have a happy ending, but part of me knows it probably won't, either way, it is still a good read. Looking forward to the next chapter! You sir, have yourself another follower. :raritywink:

Hey everyone! I'm glad you're all still enjoying the story so far. :pinkiesmile:

I'm also really happy you guys like the name for our little Eve! :yay:

Grey, I don't want to spoil you, but I'd say it goes both ways. :rainbowderp:
At least imo, my sad levels may differ.

Hmm....Is it me, or does she seem to only make Sweets?

....maybe....Nah, it couldn't be.

Could it...?

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it could...YES!... wait... no...

what are we talking about again?

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I'm thinking her abilities might lie in the realm of Imbalance, rather than disharmony...

After all, Discord has hundreds of tricks, yet she has only made candy. It just seems odd to me...

I mean, a Sugar Rush is DEFINITELY an example of being Imbalanced...

Discord said the danger was that Draconequui couldn't be in a family because their powers might develop disastrously....but maybe Eve already HAS Hers....

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...which would mean its not dangerous to raise her.

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on the OTHER hand (hoof? paw? claw?) it could just be that shes young and doesn't know that she CAN do stuff other than summon candy.

2390317 Either way, she seems to have found her niche in candy making.

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It just seems odd to me...

Lol heh heh. :raritywink:

MOAR!

Lol I know it might seem a bit simple. But your MOAR comments
are big inspirations to keep putting out stuff as well. Just had to mention that.

Too short but who am i to complain
Keep it up sir

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Yea I'm sorry for short chapter. It was actually going to end up much longer but, eh I felt this might build things up more. I think I'll forget that next time and just do the jumbo patch.

:rainbowlaugh::pinkiesmile::heart:

I think it would be funny if the plan failed and then Discord just summoned the two at the end of the next chapter and then took a nap to their shocked expressions. Anyway MOAR! :flutterrage:

Twilight regarded Applejack next. "Applejack, you go search the other half of the woods, me and Pinkie got this side covered. I'd like you down in this area with us, three heads are better than two."

Should be "Pinkie and I". I would pass this off because it's within dialog, but Twilight doesn't seem to be the kind of pony to use bad grammar, either. Now Rainbow or Pinkie, I'd understand.

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Should be "Pinkie and I".

:facehoof: I can't believe I did that TWICE now. I'll definitely try to watch out for this next time! Thank you for catching it again Rain. :twilightblush:

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Discord just summoned the two at the end of the next chapter and then took a nap to their shocked expressions.

L-O-L! Don't give me any new ideas now! :rainbowlaugh:

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Lmfao, I keep reading that picture in Thor's voice. :rainbowlaugh:

Oh my gosh, this story is amazing. I'm shocked I never found this earlier. Please continue

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