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Electroshloob


My name is Jacob Kowalczyk (Kav-Al-Chick), and i live in Nottinghamshire, England. I'm quarter polish (Hence the name Kowalczyk), but i was born in england. And i love you all.

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After a party was interrupted by some drunk guards, Octavia and Vinyl scratch were nearly raped.
They join the Assassins Brotherhood to better defend themselves against this kind of incident.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 14 )

It's pretty goo so far, it just seems so direct. Try to make it to where Tavi and Scratch get involved in the fight to prove them selves. He hasn't actually seen what they can do, putting them in the fight would be perfect. Try to put more into it as well. Details and such, your putting all the specifics. But I sense great potential, 5 stars.

185569 Thank you for the feedback, Okami :P it helps :rainbowlaugh:

this is getting really interesting i'll like to see what will happen, im a big fan of the games i played all of them but which time period would this take place in?

241954 My apologies for not responding to this sooner:

It's intended to be viewed as the same time period as the show.

314469 Glad to hear that. AMAGAD I CAN USE PURPLEZ

It's.......interesting ta' say the least. If you want my honest opinion i'm intrigued I'll track cause I want ta' see what happens

hhhhmmmmmmmmmmmm:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright::trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright::trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright::pinkiehappy:

hhmmm potential there is lots:trixieshiftleft: yes yes :trixieshiftright: much potential

seems a bit blunt and rushed this chapter

The only problem here is Vinyl's reaction to Mordecai's death:raritydespair:show some emotion besides initial rage god dam it:flutterrage::rainbowwild:!

You should work on not being so blunt but other than that i cant wait to see what willl happen next!

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