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Obsidian_Winter


Hi! I'm Obsidian Winter and I'm here just to enjoy stories, act as an editor and maybe write a few things of my own.

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During a Wonderbolts performance featuring Rainbow Dash attempting a death defying stunt, a terrible miscalculation takes her life leaving all of Equestria to mourn the loss of the Element of Loyalty. No one, however feels the loss of Rainbow more then her wife and Best Friend, Applejack.

After over a year of mourning her loss and unable to deal with the grief, Fluttershy and Discord have come up with a plan to help. The plan seems too good to be true, but it comes at a terrible price...

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 16 )

The first paragraph suffers from a bit of tell don't show, but you rectified that happily.:twilightsmile: if I had to make a reccomendation I would suggest that Rainbows death be revealed through dialouge with Big Mac and AJ, though that's just personal opinion. Overall, nice work, have a like and a watch for the story!

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Thanks for the comment and idea's! I was worried about having -too- much dialogue between Big Mac and AJ because of how usually quiet Big Mac is, but I can see your reasoning. This may be something I come back and revisit. I really appreciate the feedback! :heart:

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No problem! Heck, I might actually suggest Granny Smith or Applebloom, since their a bit more talkative and all.:scootangel:

It just.

Damn.

That freaky bathroom Rainbow Dash is my new nightmare fuel.

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Yeah, there are a few nightmare inducing segments in the first part of the story. I really wanted to hit home how haunted AJ was. I'm pretty pleased with it. Now its time to move past that where the real fun begins! Thanks for the comment!

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I thought about that. Applebloom is older in this universe but to so many readers she is still that same little filly. I was worried people might not accept such a mature topic being brought up with her. Granny was my next choice but after 14 years she would likely have died so that scratched her out.

Omg this story is amazing! :rainbowkiss:
It makes me cry everytime I read it :raritycry::fluttershyouch:

:heart: Plz update soon :heart:

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Thank you so much for the comment. I update once a week, so I should have the next chapter out by friday!

Oh god
The tension

DISCORD WHY
OH MY GOD WHY DISCORD

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You know Discord. Always playing at something. :ajsmug:

OMG I'm soooo excited!!!!!!!!! :rainbowkiss:
I can't waiiiiitttttttt to read the next chapteeeer!!!!!:fluttershbad:

Looove iiiit!!! :heart::heart::heart::twilightblush:

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I've been wanting to update for a while, it's just been finding time. Maybe over christmas!

Just a quick update. This story has not been forgotten is just been really hard finding time to do it, but good news is my days off are changing next month and I'll have a whole free day to work on it, so expect updates then. Thank you for those of you who like the story. I promise it won't disappoint.

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