About time this updated! So, is Rainbow going to end up having some form of sex with the rest of the Mane 6? She boned Twilight, got a BJ from Pinkie... what's next? Anal with Fluttershy?
I never expected to see a sequel to this (despite the way the first chapter ended). Can't say I'm not happy to see that it did though.
Gotta love how nonchalant everyone else seems to be about Dash having a dick, or maybe it's just Pinkie being Pinkie, but I'd think "It keeps growing" might bring up the thought "I should let Twilight know", not "Oh can you bring some things over to Fluttershy for me"
Love seeing more of your stuff Cosmonaut, keep these crazy gender swap trains going .
oh shit son looks like we got ourselves a good old fashioned Mane 6 fuck fest *sits in crash seat with 6 point harness* buckle up bitches, this shit is about to get serious
I thought this was decent until the second chapter with the Pinkie scene. Now this is a typical "going to rut all my friends because that's what you do when you grow a dick."
This is like a man growing a vagina, then suddenly all your friends wanting to eat you out.
Pinkie does know that Rainbow is in a relationship with Twilight, right? So why did she even ask, and why did Rainbow agree? Rainbow is the element of loyalty. I know that sometimes shes brash, but this is taking it to the umpteenth degree, not to mention that she would normally be loyal to the mare she's dating.
Wait, why is the spell even having trouble dissipating? Twilight had trouble with transforming a rock into a hat, and Spike had to concentrate also, and now there's a dick on Rainbow that Twilight can't get rid off? Okay then. This all seems so contrived.
Yeah, I know the point of clop-fics (I just don't clop), when I see an something like what chapter two (or even some of chapter one) did, I'm consciously become aware of the logic behind this, which takes me of the story.
Transforming a rock into a hat would be very hard, and wouldn't last long without another spell to keep the shape, seeing as they are made up of entirely different materials, have a large weight difference, and are mostly unrelated. Changing the gender of a living being is just a matter of changing the plumbing and adding in some new connections. ( I'm assuming Equestria uses D&D transformation rules)
772299 This shit is magic. As for what happens with the spell I'm pretty sure it was explained fairly straightforward enough in the story when Twilight EXPLAINED it. Of course it's farfetch'd but hey, magic. As for why the thing between Pinkie and RD even happened it was because Pinkie's a party girl, and after having Dash sit down and taste everything for her of course Pinkie would return the favor in her own special way. Besides, Dash is IMPULSIVE and thats part of her character in the show. It's nothing personal either. Pinkie doesn't expect to start dating her after giving out a complimentary BJ and neither does RD.
Don't try over thinking this stuff. More chapters on the way.
"Therefore I don't need an explanation," yeah yeah, I know. It's just odd that she suddenly gets a massive power boost when the "plot" demands it in these things.
As for why the thing between Pinkie and RD even happened it was because Pinkie's a party girl,
Isn't Pinkie all about not wanting friends to lose trust in each other, and will even bend time and space to make sure that every pony is in good terms? I'm sure making Rainbow Dash cheat on Twilight on a whim would make those two lose massive amounts of trust in each other and would hinder their relationship.
Besides, Dash is IMPULSIVE and that's part of her character in the show.
Her core personality is loyalty, as she's demonstrated that when something important comes up, she comes through in the clutch no matter what, and I'm pretty sure cheating on your girlfriend would warrant a second thought about loyalties from the pegasus that represents loyalty.
Pinkie doesn't expect to start dating her after giving out a complimentary BJ and neither does RD.
Uh, duh, that's not really the problem. It's Pinkie being an instigator for more drama and possibly ruining a relationship, something that she tries her best to counter and make sure every pony is in good terms with each other (even to a fault).
More chapters on the way.
I pretty much already figured out what's going to happen, so I wont really bother.
Don't try over thinking this stuff.
Oops.
Don't get me wrong, the parts I didn't mention are the parts I like, so it's not like I hate this fic or anything.
My perception for any clopfic is that it's all taking place in a fundamentally different culture. Rampant sex is assumed because there, it has a completely different connotation. Just as friendship in equestria seems to have an idealistic viewpoint, so do more intimate relationships. Sex is physical. Love is ethereal. While both at the same time is great, each by themselves is much more commonplace than it is within human societies (AFAIK. All i really know is american culture.) Under this assumption, it's alot easier to excuse or ignore what would normally be glaring plot holes.
Anywho, loved it, now i have to fav this series. I feel lucky. I just read the first chapter a few days ago and i noticed you had the intention to continue it, but as someone who hasn't been here that long, most clopfics that are "incomplete" won't see a new chapter for months or more. Heres hoping it's not another two months before another update, but i understand you probably have other series you're working on in addition to whatever else life throws at you. Liked/faved/subbed.
FWIW, I see very little problem with Dash having sex with her friends if this is the type of world where her friends are apt to go "oh, you have a penis? Let me give you an orgasm."
775038 You do seem to be dead set on picking it apart. If I'm misinterpreting that you don't like the story anymore that's my fault, sorry. 789693 Hey! I haven't seen you in a damned long time. Since /co/ at least. What's up?
I meant that the things that I didn't mention in my massive whining comments are the things I like about the fic (like Rainbow trying to hide... "herself" at work and such).
Have an awesome gif to know that there's no hard feelings at all:
793036 Nothing much, really. After summer ended, I basically stopped posting with my name. Just been writing a lot. I was just reading this because I'm writing my first clopfic, and I've been reading others to get a sense of how they go.
783626 I actually disagree pretty strongly with that. It's an acceptable suspension of disbelief that, for the purposes of a clopfic, characters will be much more apt to engage in sex than they might otherwise be. It is not an acceptable suspension of disbelief for a character who is the literal, magical embodiment of Loyalty to not even consider that her marefriend might take issue with her cheating on her. I would have been much more okay with a simple throwaway explanation along the lines of "Dash and Pinkie had fooled around in the past, and Twilight had no objections to them having their fun on the side" than simply having the issue ignored. Unless, of course, this is all gearing towards being a much more dramatic fic than it first looked to be with Twilight finding out and getting legitimately angry etc. etc. In that case though, there's still the issue of Dash cheating without so much as a second thought which still runs counter to her character.
The fic as a whole is still a lot of fun, but this was a jarring detail to just be glazed over for the sake of Dash getting a blowjob.
Well, just read both chapters again (or rather, the one I read and the one I skimmed in corresponding order to first and second), and I have to say I really wish you would resume writing and continue this among others I've enjoyed reading! Rainbow Dash as a dude because of a spell, while not new to me, is definitely interesting the way you've done it here. And her relationship with Twi while seemingly odd in its start, does seem to be based on love as shown by her thoughts on what she did in Chapter 1 coming back to bite her in the flank here after her fight with Rainbow. While Rainbow hasn't figured it out yet, I'm sure she'll notice in time, if she gets an outside perspective or even hears her voice changing to a male's. Both scenes were rather arousing, detailed well and whatnot. I hope to see another chapter if possible of this story someday, as long as I'm around this site and into ponies! Which'll likely be a long, LONG time.
Well, since Dash is a cheating whore and Pinkie just stabbed Twi in the back by sucking off Dash I can only hope that Twilight just leaves her like that. That would be hilarious.
Her tastebuds were screaming. The tart was the most horrific tasting thing she’d ever have in her mouth. Eyes watering she painfully swallowed the tart down. Pinkie Pie was observing in rapt attention. “Wellllll?” Pinkie asked as Dash wiped her mouth. “Pinkie Pie that was,” Dash paused, Pinkie Pie was looking up at her expectantly, “the most horrible, disgusting, gross thing I ever ate. Sorry…” “Okey-dokie-Loki! I’ll cut the licorice!” said Pinkie cheerfully. Dash cocked an eyebrow.
I fucking LOVE licorice. Whether it be red, or black.
About time this updated! So, is Rainbow going to end up having some form of sex with the rest of the Mane 6? She boned Twilight, got a BJ from Pinkie... what's next? Anal with Fluttershy?
A new chapter.
Huh.
Not bad, liked it a lot.
I......wha......?
so, now Dash is cheating on twi?
Whut moar?
And here I thought this was a one-shot... cool!
Moar plz kthanks.
I never expected to see a sequel to this (despite the way the first chapter ended). Can't say I'm not happy to see that it did though.
Gotta love how nonchalant everyone else seems to be about Dash having a dick, or maybe it's just Pinkie being Pinkie, but I'd think "It keeps growing" might bring up the thought "I should let Twilight know", not "Oh can you bring some things over to Fluttershy for me"
Love seeing more of your stuff Cosmonaut, keep these crazy gender swap trains going .
Whoa, I thought this was a one-shot
oh shit son
looks like we got ourselves a good old fashioned Mane 6 fuck fest
*sits in crash seat with 6 point harness*
buckle up bitches, this shit is about to get serious
It's certainly not a 'one-shot' for Rainbow anymore.
I thought this was decent until the second chapter with the Pinkie scene. Now this is a typical "going to rut all my friends because that's what you do when you grow a dick."
This is like a man growing a vagina, then suddenly all your friends wanting to eat you out.
Pinkie does know that Rainbow is in a relationship with Twilight, right? So why did she even ask, and why did Rainbow agree? Rainbow is the element of loyalty. I know that sometimes shes brash, but this is taking it to the umpteenth degree, not to mention that she would normally be loyal to the mare she's dating.
Wait, why is the spell even having trouble dissipating? Twilight had trouble with transforming a rock into a hat, and Spike had to concentrate also, and now there's a dick on Rainbow that Twilight can't get rid off? Okay then. This all seems so contrived.
Yeah, I know the point of clop-fics (I just don't clop), when I see an something like what chapter two (or even some of chapter one) did, I'm consciously become aware of the logic behind this, which takes me of the story.
772299
Transforming a rock into a hat would be very hard, and wouldn't last long without another spell to keep the shape, seeing as they are made up of entirely different materials, have a large weight difference, and are mostly unrelated. Changing the gender of a living being is just a matter of changing the plumbing and adding in some new connections. ( I'm assuming Equestria uses D&D transformation rules)
773666 Sure, why not?
772299>>773666
You do realize you're debating the fundamentals of magic within an entirely fictitious world, further more in a fan-wrote story set in said fictitious world. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Redheart_hmph.png
But yay! Let us enjoy more shameless clop! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png
774098 Your user image is hilarious. What is that even?
774121
My head exploding from sheer, unmitigated RAGE!
772299
This shit is magic. As for what happens with the spell I'm pretty sure it was explained fairly straightforward enough in the story when Twilight EXPLAINED it. Of course it's farfetch'd but hey, magic. As for why the thing between Pinkie and RD even happened it was because Pinkie's a party girl, and after having Dash sit down and taste everything for her of course Pinkie would return the favor in her own special way. Besides, Dash is IMPULSIVE and thats part of her character in the show. It's nothing personal either. Pinkie doesn't expect to start dating her after giving out a complimentary BJ and neither does RD.
Don't try over thinking this stuff. More chapters on the way.
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"Therefore I don't need an explanation," yeah yeah, I know. It's just odd that she suddenly gets a massive power boost when the "plot" demands it in these things.
Isn't Pinkie all about not wanting friends to lose trust in each other, and will even bend time and space to make sure that every pony is in good terms? I'm sure making Rainbow Dash cheat on Twilight on a whim would make those two lose massive amounts of trust in each other and would hinder their relationship.
Her core personality is loyalty, as she's demonstrated that when something important comes up, she comes through in the clutch no matter what, and I'm pretty sure cheating on your girlfriend would warrant a second thought about loyalties from the pegasus that represents loyalty.
Uh, duh, that's not really the problem. It's Pinkie being an instigator for more drama and possibly ruining a relationship, something that she tries her best to counter and make sure every pony is in good terms with each other (even to a fault).
I pretty much already figured out what's going to happen, so I wont really bother.
Oops.
Don't get me wrong, the parts I didn't mention are the parts I like, so it's not like I hate this fic or anything.
772299
My perception for any clopfic is that it's all taking place in a fundamentally different culture. Rampant sex is assumed because there, it has a completely different connotation. Just as friendship in equestria seems to have an idealistic viewpoint, so do more intimate relationships. Sex is physical. Love is ethereal. While both at the same time is great, each by themselves is much more commonplace than it is within human societies (AFAIK. All i really know is american culture.) Under this assumption, it's alot easier to excuse or ignore what would normally be glaring plot holes.
Anywho, loved it, now i have to fav this series. I feel lucky. I just read the first chapter a few days ago and i noticed you had the intention to continue it, but as someone who hasn't been here that long, most clopfics that are "incomplete" won't see a new chapter for months or more. Heres hoping it's not another two months before another update, but i understand you probably have other series you're working on in addition to whatever else life throws at you. Liked/faved/subbed.
But cheating...
so much WHARRGARBL over Dash "cheating"
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FWIW, I see very little problem with Dash having sex with her friends if this is the type of world where her friends are apt to go "oh, you have a penis? Let me give you an orgasm."
775114
I... I like this.
Thank you.
775038
You do seem to be dead set on picking it apart. If I'm misinterpreting that you don't like the story anymore that's my fault, sorry.
789693
Hey! I haven't seen you in a damned long time. Since /co/ at least. What's up?
I meant that the things that I didn't mention in my massive whining comments are the things I like about the fic (like Rainbow trying to hide... "herself" at work and such).
Have an awesome gif to know that there's no hard feelings at all:
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793036
Nothing much, really. After summer ended, I basically stopped posting with my name. Just been writing a lot. I was just reading this because I'm writing my first clopfic, and I've been reading others to get a sense of how they go.
What's up with you?
I liked this but I'm kind of wondering why this isn't on furaffinity or something.
795523
Still writing away. I've been learning to draw as well. Trying to get a grasp on a medium I'm unfamiliar with. It's been fun.
783626
I actually disagree pretty strongly with that. It's an acceptable suspension of disbelief that, for the purposes of a clopfic, characters will be much more apt to engage in sex than they might otherwise be. It is not an acceptable suspension of disbelief for a character who is the literal, magical embodiment of Loyalty to not even consider that her marefriend might take issue with her cheating on her. I would have been much more okay with a simple throwaway explanation along the lines of "Dash and Pinkie had fooled around in the past, and Twilight had no objections to them having their fun on the side" than simply having the issue ignored.
Unless, of course, this is all gearing towards being a much more dramatic fic than it first looked to be with Twilight finding out and getting legitimately angry etc. etc. In that case though, there's still the issue of Dash cheating without so much as a second thought which still runs counter to her character.
The fic as a whole is still a lot of fun, but this was a jarring detail to just be glazed over for the sake of Dash getting a blowjob.
holy celestia this is exactly what i have been craving!!!
I must agree with naturalglitch on that, the casual cheating of RD was jarring.
Otherwise, good job
Update?
1026743 The clop must go on!
Erm... update anytime soon?
no update ?
Dem.
must have MOARRR
Don't leave us hangin'
I'm afraid this story has not updated since June of last year. I fear it has been abandoned.
2765055
2 months later?...
nnnded
Is it dead, can we eat it?
Well, just read both chapters again (or rather, the one I read and the one I skimmed in corresponding order to first and second), and I have to say I really wish you would resume writing and continue this among others I've enjoyed reading! Rainbow Dash as a dude because of a spell, while not new to me, is definitely interesting the way you've done it here. And her relationship with Twi while seemingly odd in its start, does seem to be based on love as shown by her thoughts on what she did in Chapter 1 coming back to bite her in the flank here after her fight with Rainbow. While Rainbow hasn't figured it out yet, I'm sure she'll notice in time, if she gets an outside perspective or even hears her voice changing to a male's. Both scenes were rather arousing, detailed well and whatnot. I hope to see another chapter if possible of this story someday, as long as I'm around this site and into ponies! Which'll likely be a long, LONG time.
793036 hey man, is this story going to be continued?
Well, since Dash is a cheating whore and Pinkie just stabbed Twi in the back by sucking off Dash I can only hope that Twilight just leaves her like that. That would be hilarious.
I fucking LOVE licorice. Whether it be red, or black.