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TheBrownUnicorn


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This is the story of a special mare, that has a friend. Her friend might not be the brightest of them all, but she still loves him the way he is. She and her friend have to hide from a bully known as Shining Copper every day. This brings them to a couple of arguings about whether or not confront him.

What she didn't know is that one of these arguings brought onto her so much sadness...

((Snowdrop was greatly involved in this))

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first comment on a genius story

Ok now that was brilliantly done. It could definately use some editing though. You have a few wrong words and missing words in places along with a few akward phrasings here and there, but the overall plot and progression of the story is totally spectacular. Going to favorite, and update this and pass it along.
I really like the subject of blindness, I have an uncle that is blind, and I think the world of MLP has potential for some great stories on the subject and it's always great finding one. You've also got a great story on bullying here too. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Don't know why I'm the first to do that, but we need to like this story

“No, don’t touch me.” He ordered, still crying. “I don’t think you get it, Snow Drop. I want you to be stronger, I want you to go there and fight that unicorn bully with me, to defend you, to stand up for yourself. You don’t deserve him to treat you like that, to call you names and-“ Light Seer placed a hoof on his mouth.

Uhhh wrong character!

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