When a strange being crash land onto Equestria and claim to be Rainbow Dash. The Mane six was skeptical, was this the same Rainbow Dash they knew? Or was this some Changeling's pathetic attempt to infiltrate into their lives?
To gain the Mane six's trust, Rainbow Dash talk about her tales of traveling through out the cosmos, jumping into hell, making new comrades, cracking some butt-ugly alien skulls, getting shot, losing friends on the battlefield, and then back again.
One of these days though, you wish you’re really dead. But hey, it’s like what they say… Only Death Stops Them.
Thanks to all the proofreaders Man Of War, Katherine Kerensky, plainoasis and Identity for helping me out with the story.
My first story. So criticize if you will (which is good) but please, don't stir up a flame war down there.
[Warning: Humanized ponies, read at your own risk]
More tags will be added as the story progresses.
Disclaimer: I do not own either the franchises Halo nor My Little Pony. They belong to their respective owners and this is just a work of fiction.
This is going to be interesting when the real Rainbow Dash gets back from Cloudsdale.
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Great to know that someone liked this fic. And yes, the confrontation between the human Rainbow Dash and the Rainbow Dash that we all know and love, is going to be very, very interesting.
hell jumpers seem to be a very popular front when it comes to halo crossovers (im also writing one myself). So far I like this. Little confuzzled at first, but caught on after feeling like and idiot. Great job!
2348232
That's my goal, to confuse the audience as much as possible!
No not really, but I was trying to add the mystery into the prologue and all that fun stuff.
2348272
You wouldn't be objected to checking out my story would ya? It'd be awesome! (Its my first fic too and im getting along. So far ive gotten good ratings on it).
2348291
Sure, why not? I got time to kill.
kinda sems like a storie im working on now but it could just be a couinadins i mean your RD is not the master chief *i hope need to reread to be sure*
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To be clear, Rainbow Dash is NOT Master Chief. But what I can tell you is that she's an ODST (Orbital Drop Shock Trooper) and a very special one too.
2348538 ok just making sure but now i kinda what this to have a crossover with the story im wrighting
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There will be more! I've already finished 4,000+ words on Dash's memorys of her enlistment into the UNSC and her first orbital drop into battle but I still need to fill in the gaps.
And please, feel free to give any suggestions on what you like to see in the story. For example: Space ninja cat zombie robot pirate marines
(I don't think there will be any of those in the story, sorry).
The description make it sound a lot like the story "On The Wings Of Angels" but its probably still pretty cool I'll read it later
2350216
Why yes, the story's style is loosely base on it.
I originally planed this to be just Rainbow Dash and her going on adventures of her kicking Covenant ass, and not about her crashing nearby Ponyville (which was suppose to be a sequel if the first story got popular) but the mods denied my first attempt to submit this.
So I combined the two into one, with the slight modification of her explaining her past to the Mane six.
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Kinda fits both her own personality and a kick ass UNSC partying psychopath.
I don't know why, but I hope for their Pinkie to have more Joker like personality, (With her jokes and gags ending in covenent death) (If she is an ODST squad member also, considering RD mentioned a human Rarity I figured the others were in too) with the pranks and jokes just... with a twist ending.
Maybe as the one who handles the explosives.
2350317 a few? There's more than a few grammar/sentence errors. For example, one sentence will be written in present-tense, but the next one or a few after would be in past-tense. Its not consistent or used properly most of the time and a little confusing. I'm not sure exactly how to explain it but it'd make your writing and stories way better if you learned how to use the 'tenses' properly.
There's also some missing words here and there, along with words that should be different.
Shouldn't plunge be plague?
But yeah, aside from all the writing errors, good start, I'm interested to see where this goes.
Lol love the consept a team of six odst girls that are the halo univeres vertion of the element bearers drop in to equestria after drifting through a dimentionle rift. BRILYNT!
You should explain more.
You said humanized ponies in the description, yet only Rainbow Dash is humanized.
You didn't give any of her squad mates names, you just referred to them in general, so I wouldn't feel bad had they died in the landing.
Did Rainbow come from an Equestria that was with the UNSC and she is just another Hell Jumper? Or did she come from a humanized Equestria and get portalled to the Halo universe?
Either these should be explained well in the description or weaved into the first chapter. If I have this many questions that relate to the plot of the story, it isn't a good start to what seems like it could be a magnificent story.
Also try to update your pictures, that ODST is from Halo 3, the ODSTs from Halo 4 look better
continue w/ epic adventures in equestria too please
Rainbow Dash:
Primary: Shotgun
Secondary: Magnum
Uses a jetpack and has a lighter composition of armor to allow for higher mobility. By far, the fastest of the group. Also a bit headstrong.
Rarity:
Primary: SMG
Secondary: Magnum
Other: 1ft. Tungsten Carbide Knife
Specializing in stealth operations. Uses active camouflage, and has low-profile armor.
Applejack:
Primary: Assault Rifle
Secondary: Magnum
A highly capable mechanic, Applejack is responsible for keeping the team's gear in working order. Utilizes drop shields with great efficiency.
Pinkie Pie:
Primary: Grenade Launcher
Secondary: Magnum
Other: Flamethrower
Not your typical soldier. Not even your typical demolitions expert. Skilled with a flamethrower.
Fluttershy:
Primary: Battle Rifle
Secondary: Magnum
Other: Complete medical kit
The team's medic, she is responsible for the health of the whole squad. Quick on her feet. A quiet type, but capable in dangerous situations. Do NOT anger her.
Twilight Sparkle;
Primary: DMR
Secondary: SMG
The boss. Also the team's marksman. Quick, efficient, reliable, but not the most social. Utilizes any armor augmentation with high efficiency.
My vision of the team.
that was epic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Yes I do have have pre-readers but since there was road bumps along the way I had to rush through the prologue just to reach my deadline, making it hard for me to contact my proof-readers.
And for my grammar, I tend to do many mistakes due to my english not being my first language. I'm still facing problems of my grammar, like tenses and spelling errors (Thank god for spell check). And I when I use the same words over and over again in one paragraph, I
tendhave a habit of trying ways to overcome the problems and this leads to my many grammar issues.But yes, I do need to patch that up and make sure I don't keep on making the same mistakes. So yeah, thanks for pointing that out guys. Always love to see people enjoy my story.
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You could say that she will have an explosive personality.
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My point, exactly.
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Okay, to answer your questions I think I need to put this into some sort of format.
Q: You said humanized ponies in the description, yet only Rainbow Dash is humanized.
A: You've just read the prologue, so expect the rest of the humanized mane 6 to arrive in one of the future chapters.
Q: You didn't give any of her squad mates names, you just referred to them in general, so I wouldn't feel bad had they died in the landing.
A: I know this isn't a question but I have to say that I had this idea a couple days ago but I scraped it. And I assure you, nobody died in the landing.
Q: Did Rainbow come from an Equestria that was with the UNSC and she is just another Hell Jumper? Or did she come from a humanized Equestria and get portalled to the Halo universe?
A: For this Halo universe, there is no Equestria. But the ponies in the show did however exist and is how humanized. Most of them though, live in different planets in this Halo universe. But now, it seems that our speedy Helljumper is now in an alternate reality.
Q: Either these should be explained well in the description or weaved into the first chapter. If I have this many questions that relate to the plot of the story, it isn't a good start to what seems like it could be a magnificent story.
A: Yeah I know and to tell you the the truth, I'm still putting in the pieces together but most of Rainbow's details will explained when she talks about herself and her history.
Q: Also try to update your pictures, that ODST is from Halo 3, the ODSTs from Halo 4 look better.
A: There's Halo 4 ODSTs? All I saw when I played the game was regular marines and spartan-IVs.
The missing plot in the prologue was intentional though, I was just adding the mystery and all that fun stuff. But feel free to point out things that I may miss in the next chapter.
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You're very close, my friend.
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Sure do but I'm still figuring out on how I'm suppose to keep going with their adventure on Equestria. I'll just cross the bridge when I get there.
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You ain't seen nothing yet!
I request more.
Needs some editing to clean it up a bit, but not too bad.
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on the matter of apperances of ODSTs I do believe that Halo 4 does not have any ODSTs in it. I think that you are thinking of the ones from Halo:Reach, who do look a LOT better than the Halo 3 ones.
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probably
2358008
Wow, I mean, just wow. I never expected to attract one of the website's famous authors with my little fic here.
Yes, I'm still editing this chapter here and there but let me just say that your story, "On The Wings Of Angels", inspired me to make the whole 'Helljumper Dash explains her past to the Mane 6' thing. And I'm also glad that you liked this story.
About to faint,
WarKing76
Alright, war king I officially hate you (not really). Your story has 21000 less words than mine, you already have more comments, likes, and view than mine. So, I must do a review on the story so far! (You dont have to do a counter review on my story.)
At the beginning I found myself cery, very confuse as to what was happening. The fact that there is the possibility of two Rainbow dashes makes for an interesting plot in the story. As there isn't much to review on yet I give whats writen so far 4 1/2 out of 5. A few errors here and there that could be fixed. But overall good.
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Oh man, did I make you jealous? I'm sorry if I did. It just that I didn't expect the story to be this popular, but somehow it did.
Was it the plot that got me this far? I'm not sure. All I know is that I played Halo: ODST with a friend a few months back and I said to myself "Hey, what if the elements of harmony were Helljumpers?" and there you go.
And if you ask yourself why I made Rainbow Dash the main protagonist here is because I thought it might be the most appropriate since she is an adrenalin junkie and I'm sure you get a lot of excitement by jumping from orbit. Maybe.
2362860 it was TOTALLY the plot
plus i love ODSTs
everything from what they do/did to how badass they look
i think ima go play some halo 3 ODST now
cheerio!
Mind giving us a little detail on their ranks? or will that be in the next chapter?
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I don't think I'll give out that info all at once in one chapter but I might give out Rainbow Dash's rank in the next part.
Edit: Oops, I guess not.
AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Being a massive Halo fan myself, im looking forward to see how this goes.
Nice work
-Toast-
huh. talk about "reality check", know what I mean?
so basically, the next chapter is about Rainbows or in this case Isabels life in UNSC as an ODST or Helljumpers as most like to call them.
great chapter, hope to see more soon
sorry
P.S. I have no Idea who these people are
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Would you like to care to explain what you mean't by not knowing certain people?
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Being a massive toast fan myself, I'm looking forward to eat you.
Very hungry,
WarKing76
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Its dangerous to eat me alone... take this
cheesemaking.com/images/recipes/35Butter/Pics/pic51.jpg
many questions answered, thank you
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I mean ODST Rainbows name: Isabel and Carmen, which I figured to be Twilights middle name.
sorry, I don't know many people
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Ah I see, let me clear things up. The 'Human' Rainbow Dash's full name is Isabel Miles, while the 'Pony' Twilight's full name is Twilight "Carmen" Sparkle. And if you really want to get specific, the 'Pony' Rainbow Dash's full name is Rainbow "Isabel" Miles.
The rest of the humanized mane six's actual names will be revealed later as we go deeper into the story.
2377626 dude by your logic we already know that pinky pies human name will be Diane
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You're just going to say 'Damn' every time I post a new chapter, aren't you?
I'm gonna join in
DAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAMN