2nd person fic
After nearly dying in an explosion, you awake in Equestria. If you didn't already know, this is a story about you x Spitfire. I felt there weren't enough shipfics out there with this ship. Enjoy!
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KarlGaks
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Maybe........ Maybe not........
Maybe so....... Probably.
I shall wait for more.
I like the idea! What you have so far is great!
Please, Please visit The Proofreader group and find a good one, your story has great promise, but I find your lack of commas disturbing. also some of the sentences are unclear.
You, my good sir, are in need of a proof reader
2304979 I already have one on the case, calm down and it will be prettied soon enough.
2305204 I must admit I was rather scatter brained around the time of writing this so some things came out sounding something like "sflaberf" but I'll patch it up tommorow if my proofreader doesn't.
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sorry, i can't stand it when stories that have a great principle are nigh unreadable for me due to grammar. There's a reason I created that group.
2305299 Bam, fixed
2305299 I fixed most of it. It's a good story, give Cakesok another chance!
2310740 I never said it was a bad story, In fact, i think the premise is quite well executed, I just have a comma fetish, and there were so many missing...
2308426 Just for future writing. When two people (ponies) are talking separate them into different paragraphs. It gets annoying when reading when you think Spitfire is still talking when it's some other pony.
So far I like it.
MOAR!!!
That description makes no fucking sense.
...Dude...How badly were you rushing this?
2317222 I'm not sure what you're referring to. If you're referring to the ship, I haven't even started to develop that. If you're referring to the story then you had better realize now that this is not an action story and so there's not going to be any heart pumping adrenaline to make it 'fast paced.' All in all I'd say this is a lot slower paced than a lot of ship fics I've seen out there.
-Cakesok
2319604 I mean the writing itself. The way the chapter reads tells me you were trying to get it done quickly.
That is an awesome name
2320212 I'm simply on Spring Break so I want to get out as much as possible while I have the chance.
Update?
MOAR PLZZZZZ
2410485 Sorry, I've been out of town a lot lately and I need to update my other story before I update this one again. Trust me though, you'll get your update soon enough.
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more please
2489353 More is coming within the day, if my proofreader doesn't get back to me by 6 o'clock mountain time it's going up as is, you guys have waited long enough.
2513229 YAY
2513345 Okay so maybe not 6, had to go some where but now it's up.
2514018 YAY
awesome chapter man it was great can't wait for the next one
MOAR
The proofread chapter 2 is now up. *fist pump*
will you update, also where is the pic from?
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1. Yes, I will update. It's getting to be then end of the school year for me and there's all sorts of finals and projects right now so it's kind of hell trying sort it all out.
2. I made that by hand over the course of 15-30 minutes
3. I will hopefully update it soon and this is also the first time I've been on in like a month.
update?
2716311 Ya sorry about that... I've been debating whether or not to scrap one or both of my stories. I just don't know what to do!
2716311 You know what? I'm just going to make it a short 5 chapter long fic and discard the other one so I can make room for new ideas. In other news I've started chapter 4, finally.
2761886 If that's the case, I'll be expecting a sequel.
Any sequels will have to be written by the readers, I run out of good ideas on a single track too fast, either that or i'm ADD, probably the later though If I am I wouldn't know.
Well shit guys... I've hit a writer's block that's right in the way of the main plot. I swear to you I'm about ready just throw this story out the window in hopes that someone else will pick it up and finish it or something. I am really tempted to hit that hiatus button right now and I swear, if I do it'll likely never be taken off of hiatus.
If you can't do it, I could try and finish it.
I would need someone else to help me though.
2910338 If you want to write the rest go ahead.
2910338 are you still gonna try to finish it, if so I will help you with it unless you don't want me to.
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Sure. Why not? I haven't started yet though. PM me.
You know, I think I could make this a thing, I write the first chapter to start it off and then people can submit chapters, if more than one is submitted we can vote on which is best. Reply on your opinion to this.
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Please PM me when you do.