Luna was having a bad night, she didn't know if anypony actually liked her night, but she would never know if she standed on the castle, wasn't?
Cover by: PONYJOKER
This is my first fanfic that i am in fact publishing... So... it might have a tiiiny little mistakes, since English is not my main language, I would like to thanks Habanc for creating "Renaissance of The Moon" inspiring me to create my own fanfic, I would like to thank PinkiePieSwear for creating the song "Luna, Please Fill My Empty Sky" it IS a beautiful song. I write this fanfic when I am sad, so... almost everyday I am sad, (like now =P), I think that is all I have to say, I hope you guys enjoy my fanfiction (If approved by the website =P)
EDIT: Special thanks for Jealousypants McCloppington for helping me out it this fanfic, and thanks to him now I have an editor! and another song is inspiring me on! 'Somewhere over the Rainbow' by Israel Kamakawiwo'ole
Thank for BIG MAC for giving me a good tip, too!
EDIT[2]: MOAR special thanks for Darktoes that helped the shit outta me, I mean, it is being a great happy, and feels awesome, my fanfic is alive again, yay!
A short story but quite touching at a few points, I enjoyed it. I would encourage you look for an editor though, as there are a good number of errors in grammar and syntax that disrupt the story's flow. Still, an impressive effort since English is not your native tongue.
I'll be your editor if you want. Like Cyclone said, there are a lot of grammar and syntax problems. I feel I should let you know that I've never written any stories of my own, but I'm sure I could at least make some improvements. Don't feel bad about it. I've seen plenty of native English writers do much worse. It's not a bad story, and I completely agree with you about Habanc's "Renaissance of the Moon" and PinkiePieSwear's "Luna, Please Fill My Empty Sky" being awesome.
5517 Yeah, I totally agree with you, glad you liked it, I'm looking forward for an editor, thanks for the heads up!
5537 It would be nice! I'm not bad, I'm happy, if you want to be the editor it would be good! If you want to be my editor you are welcome!
I'm trying to make this a good fanfiction... I don't want to rush things up in the story and things, about the grammar and syntax I agree with both of you, I'm trying my best =P, any help would be welcome
Not ENTIRELY sure if I like the whole idea of a LunaShy fic, buuttt it appears to be going in the right direction so far. Looks like it could be good.........
Bahh, what the hell. I'll track it.
5842 yay, thanks! I'm trying my best to write a good story, but now that I have an editor it's more easy for people understand what is going on,
well, silly me, I wish I could born from a Country that speaks English... So, I'm glad that you actually liked it!
Oh, my, I don't know how, but I guess I overdid myself writing Chapter 4
I founded awesome, I don't know if is right or wrong to comment about your own story so...
I'll keep my mouth shut
It's nice. I look forward to chapter 5.
Although, I never really liked the whole socks thing.
6655 I'm glad you liked it! Chapter 5 is probably going up tomorrow.
about the socks, I... kinda found them cute :P, well, can't please everybrony
I'm definitely liking this story, but there's just one, tiny little thing that I would like to point out, if I could?
You tend to repeat words a lot. For example, the use of the word "smile" is a bit excessive. I understand you want to express an overall feeling of happy expression from the ponies, but you have to learn to substitute synonyms and write things a little differently. Take, for instance:
“Oh it’s quite alright, I still have that scarf you gave me last year.” Fluttershy smiled
“THAT old thing? Come on, I already told you you can ask me whenever you need a new dress, or…”
“Oh, I’m sorry… I didn’t wanted to upset you, since that day when me and the girls asked you to make dresses, it didn’t feel okay to ask
more things from you.” Fluttershy hid herself in her mane, it a sadness look
“Oh Fluttershy, it is okay, it make me happy when you ask me to do a few things for you, I am your best friend, remember?” Rarity smiled
“Yes.” Fluttershy smiled
See what I mean? You used the word three times in a mere five paragraphs, which is a tad too much, especially since they're short paragraphs. You'd want to do something more on the lines of:
“Oh it’s quite alright, I still have that scarf you gave me last year.” Fluttershy said happily.
“THAT old thing? Come on, I already told you you can ask me whenever you need a new dress, or…”
“Oh, I’m sorry… I didn’t wanted to upset you, since that day when me and the girls asked you to make dresses, it didn’t feel okay to ask more things from you.” Fluttershy dropped her head and hid herself in her mane, slightly sad.
“Oh Fluttershy, it is okay, it make me happy when you ask me to do a few things for you, I am your best friend, remember?” Rarity grinned at the yellow pegasus.
“Yes.” Fluttershy said sheepishly and gave Rarity a smile.
See the difference? It still manages to convey a happy and optimistic - for the most part - mood, but I only used the word "smiled" once. I will admit, it does take a bit of practice to get those things flowing smoothly and avoid using repetitive words. But believe me, before long, if you keep at it, you'll be able to substitute words and phrases without knowing it, and still managing to provide and accurate visual and convey the desired mood. And also, once again, I'm not trying to be rude in any way, I'm just trying to help you out with something, one good writer to another.
All things aside, I'm actually starting to warm up to this idea of LunaShy. Keep at it, I really wanna see where this ends up!
6731 Thank man! I really appreciate your comment, I always think that in order to make a good fanfic, it would be nice to have someone to point that errors, and I admit, when I'm writing th chapters, I know I overuse the word 'smile' that much, but is because English is not my native language, and this is my first fanfiction... That's why I need editors...
To the everyone, I think Chapter 6 and 7 will be delayed, my computer keeps shutting down, and that really pisses me off, yesterday I just finished Chapter 6 and the goddam thing shuted down
well... so, that kind of thing upsets me and blablabla, so... I'll try to make more chapters even when my computer is not cooperating 
I'm laughing at my own fanfic, I dunno why.
and BIG MAC, thank you enourmously for that advice, I shoulda start practicing that now.
...Are you aware of the quantity of grammatical mistakes you made? It was impossible to read it! Oh, lord, please, save everyone else from this and go edit this thing!
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7174 dat comment made me 20% happier
1- See how your fanfic are about to reach 2,000 views
2- Listen to Guile Theme
3- ????
4- PROFIT!
That new story image! Oh my gosh, that is amazing!
7155 Be patient, man. I'm editing these as fast as I can. =P
daaaaaawwww the whole time i was reading this i wanted to hug them both and make them feel better (sniff
) but ill be good
and let you finish. I cant wait to see whats next, thank you again
Chapter 7 is a little short, well, good thing I already wrote Chapter 8!
7904 GIMMEGIMMEGIMMEGIMMEGIMMEGIMMEGIMME
7910 Sorry, you'll have to wait till tomorrow for chapter eight. I'm going to bed now. =P
I'm not tell spoilers, but I'll talk about chapter 9 or 10 depends of my little lazy upgoing with the fanfic but it's not gonna take it forever, I promisse, and the next chapters... It's gonna be MAGICAL!
This story is so CUTE!
Great story. I'm soo excited to read the rest.
SOCKS!
It's weird but ponies wearing socks is probably one of the cutest memes ever XD
I am really loving this. It is tender and cute and sweet. This is lovely!
This is such an awesome and adorable story! I hope it doesn't end with mortality catching up to Fluttershy.
Guys, I'll make a big update in this story. (I'm not gonna delete the chapters!!!) I'll just add more story.
Why?
Well, This is story is WAY too short, it NEEDS more interaction with the characters, I've been rushing things up,
I'm sorry for the incovinient, but in the chapters will have more explanations! So you will understand what is going on in Fluttershy and Princess Luna's mind, I'm not just updating this fanfic to be good for me, I want it to be good for you guys, will guys gave me a lot of support recently, and this fanfic don't even have a month! I'm so happy you guys received my fanfic so welcome, I want it you guys to focus more in the story, I don't want just to write a fanfic, I want to write something magical, I want you to feel the energy and emotion the fanfic gives to you.
So, I'll add more story, and side stories, more interaction and etc.
I would like to expecially thanks to McCloppington, and BIG MAC, I'll try my best to improve this fanfic, I promise.
From the Author: Brazilian Brony.
Oh, just saying the fanfic have light comedy, since when I began writing this story I thought it would be good to have some light comedy, but nothing more, I'm investing more in personal life, etc, what can I do... this fanfic is mostly based in Sadness, Romance will still appear, you guys will have a surprise in Chapter 9 and 10, the fanfic isn't in the halfway I guess
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I'm happy for the support by the way! (how many time I just said that?
The Improved Chapters will not be late for arrival! I just finished Chapter 1, and I'm almost finishing Chapter 2, and I guarantee you, it's godlike compared to 1.0 version
Oh, I would love to hear if someone founded a error or wrong mispelling in the fanfic... thanks...
I found a few misspellings and errors in there. I can proof it if you want.
I want it
Wow, first paragraph is a HUGE run-on sentence. Fix them commas bro. So is the last one. You need to go back and fix this whole chapter...
I'm waiting for my editor... *sigh* this fanfic is all messed up... I don't know if I want to continue...
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Please continue. I'm really enjoying this so far. I can see that this chapter skipped the editor, but that's ok. Give it time for your editor to take a look first, even if it takes a few days. We're patient, we can wait.
Don't get down on yourself. Everybody needs practice to become good at something, especially when it's something as difficult as learning a new language. You're doing great here, keep it up!
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Ah, NO, Keep going. I want to see the end of this. And NEVER stop writing. It is an art that lets you express yourself, your ideas flow, and your skills shine. You just need to read it over 4 times or so and edit it yourself, find your mistakes and attack them. Then get friends to help you out before posting it. I rewrite whole paragraphs constantly, even as I'm just writing. You just need to practice, because writing will never be something one can perfect. Keep moving forward, NEVER give up. Or I'll be dissapointed,
forrrrrrreeeeevvveeeerrrrrrrrrrrrrrr 
10504 The sad thing is, I don't have anyone to help me out, I mean, I tried to get some help, but I couldn't, My Microsoft Word is in English-American Language, I myself rate this fanfic 'semi-good' I am in fact trying to correct the chapters, believe me, it could be a LOT of worse than it is, this fanfic is not being that good because I'm working all alone on it, I didn't even began to write Chapter 10, I feel like I have a big rock on my back and I have to walk with the rock in my back till' I finish this fanfic, I really wished to English be my first-language, sadly, it's not, so I'm doing with what I've got, you guys have all the right to judge this fanfic since is that you guys that are reading it, Also, I'm just following my dream, I've always wanted to write a book or something.
I guess I'll stop writing this fanfic (don't worry, I'll not delete it or stop writing next chapters) I'll just take a rest for a time, I don't know how long, my head is full of problems right now... Hope ya folks understand it, and thanks for all the support I got it so far, it was the main reason I didn't give up.
-Brazilian Brony
This is really good, I really enjoyed it.
I do not mean to offend anypony, but the grammer in this is terrible. Just saying.
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I meant to say "grammar"
11942 I know, if I had an editor, this could be fixed. :)
I'm done with this fanfic.
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I'm sorry Brony. I really wish we could have convinced you to keep going, but you need to do what is best for you. Send me a message if you ever decide to continue writing this, okay? Thank you.
12204 It's fine, maybe next month I continue... I just need some time to rest, I always dreamed about writing something... *sigh* I'm put this fanfic on Hiatus...
"Styaed waked up in the day"
for proper grammatic terms should be changed to
"Stayed awake during the day"
From what I'm reading this isn't a romance, can anypony prove me wrong?
I like this fanfic too much for it to die, I'm a bit of a grammar wizz so if you need an editor lemme know.
14502 OF COURSE I WOULD SAY YES!
hit me up on the private box @_@