Till the sun goes down
The journey towards Sweet Apple Acres would usually take him awhile, about an half an hour riding on Twilights back or, a lot more if he went by himself. But today, judging by the suns position, he made the journey in just over an hour.
Like last week he saw Applejack working, unlike last time when she was busy getting some water from the well, today she was feeding the chickens.
“Morning A.J.”
“Morning Spike. Looking for Apple Bloom?”
“Yep.”
“Sorry sugarcube, she left for Zecora yesterday. She told me she would see you there.”
“Okay, thanks A.J.”
“Spike! Tell her that she has school tomorrow.”
“Sure.” He said waving his arm before he ran of.
“Morning, kid.”
“Morning... wait... you again?”
“You should learn to use your inner voice, ponies will start thinking you’re crazy or something.”
“Well I am hearing voices, so...”
“Don’t worry about us kid.”
“Ha, when the voice in my head tells me not to worry, this is exactly when I start worrying.”
“Aham...”
“Right... inner voice.” “Is this better?”
“Much. Now kid, where are you going?”
“Over to Zecora’s.”
“And you know the way?”
Spike stopped.
“No.”
“Inner voice kid, inner voice.”
“Right.”
“So if you don’t know the way how were you planning on getting to Zecora?”
“Umm... I was going to go to Fluttershys, the try to remember the path Apple Bloom took me on.”
“Great plan...”
“Thanks.”
“If you are trying to get yourself lost. Look kid I like you, you show promise and it would be a shame if I lost another before you even see me, so... Here.”
“Huh? Did you just give me something?”
“Uh... Listen how do you get to the manticore caves?”
“Oh that’s easy. Well I enter the Everfree and the closest entrance is the twenty third and to get to the caves from there I need to follow path seven hundred fifty five, past the sulphur pits number eight, take a right at the split tree, walk around... or above the field of Poison Joke, and follow the sound of cracking bones for about an hour, descent into the tunnels and take the first left, then the second right and open the fifth door to the left, then the pop the lid, and I’m right in the middle of the pit.”
“And what will happen when you pop out?”
“Well... I guess they will tear me to pieces and fight over each piece of me... Unless...”
“Unless?”
“I before I enter the tunnels I first stop to grab a little sulphur from the pits and a little hidra... dunk, and rub myself with it, making myself smell horrible to a manticore.”
“I see I gave you a little too much.”
“How did I know that?”
“I gave you a part of my memories, I only wanted to give you a map of the Everfree, but it appears I overdid it.”
“So... I got a ‘Everfree survival guide’ or something?”
“That’s... Quite accurate actually... You know what kid, ‘The Everfree survival guide’ is a great idea. Now, run over to Zecora, she will be waiting for you.”
“Okay.” He said as he ran off towards the forest.
“And don’t worry, the memories will be gone in a couple of days.”
“Great...”
Spike made good time in reaching Zecora’s. It was easy since he basically knew about everything he needed to know about the Everfree, he knew about every creature that made it their home, and about every plant that could eat him or worse.
He covered the couple of miles that separated the Orchard from Zecora’s hut in less than an hour. Upon reaching his destination he knocked on the door and expected to see the zebra open it. To his surprise, he was greeted by a yellow filly, only she was not yellow anymore, the filly, Apple Bloom was covered in a dark shade of bluish green from head to tail.
“What happened to you?” Spike asked carefully examining the pony as if making sure there was no part of her still yellow.
“Would you stop doing that!” She shouted annoyed by him looking so closely at her. “Just go in and take a dip in the tub and lets get going before I freeze.”
Apple Bloom took a step to her side, Spike looked behind her and saw a tub of multi colored goo, but before he could protest he felt the fillies head pushing him in. He reached the end of the tub and dipped his finger into it.
“You are not kidding...” He said turning his head around still struggling with Apple Bloom. “This stuff is cold. I don’t think I want to...”
Apple Bloom stopped pushing, turned in place, and then just bucked him in the tub. When he landed he could feel all the heat leaving his body, fearing for his life he jumped out immediately but it was too late. Just like the filly he was now covered in that stuff and he was getting colder by the minute.
“Come on,” she said, “we've got a long way to go.”
“Where are we going? Why are we covered in this?”
“I messed up... I got a potion wrong and now we need to go and fix it.”
“We? Why we? And what are we covered in?”
“Sulph and...”
“Let me guess... hydra dung?”
“Yes, how did you know?”
“Um... A little birdy told me. Listen I know a shortcut, so except manicure venom what else do we need?”
“Umm... Tears?”
“Of?” Spike reluctantly asked.
“An ursa...”
“Tears? Form an ursa? Apple Bloom where is Zecora?” He was starting to panic, a manticore was one thing but a ursa.
“Umm... Here.” She pointed towards her head.
“What the hay were you making?”
“Um... well you see Big Mac got a cold, and I was trying to make some cold medicine, but I got the proportions wrong and I accidently added something I shouldn't have and then Zecora... And why am I explaining this to you?”
“HOW DID YOU MANAGE TO MAKE A ‘LAST WISH’ POTIONS FROM A COLD REMEDY?”
“Last wish? Is that... Wait Zecora is telling me something... She is not rhyming... it sounds so odd...”
“Focus Apple Bloom what is she telling you?”
“Right... She is telling me... to tell you.. that we...”
“We? We what?”
“We only have till moonrise to make the cure before it is permanent.”
“Oh for the love of... HEY VOICES ARE YOU THERE?”
“Spike?”
“Shush.”
“Yes Spike, I am here, and I heard everything. Tell Apple Bloom to get the rest of the ingredients and that you will make the cure on the spot. I will send you some help with the ursa, but you have to deal with the manticore's yourselves.”
“Right. Apple Bloom get the rest of the ingredients we are going to make the cure elsewhere.”
“Spike how do you know all this?”
“I have a voice in my head too.” Spike answered with a smile.
Haha..gosh, after all of this Applebloom should get her cutie mark in medicine or something. Now she is going to think Spike is a loon after telling her that he has voices in his head.javascript:smilie('');
2522516 i think your script failed
Awesome spike is a badass leader
And your keeping your promise to post 5 times a week
2522687 I am trying, believe me I am trying.
But I decided for a few edited chapters to pile up just in case.
So until then 3-4 chapters a week is the best I can do (a chapter every 2 days)
2522685 everybody has his moments
case and point
two purely cosmetic chapters will be released sorry for raising your hopes and knocking them back down
Take your time, no deadline, just your story and work. Love the story anyway, thank you so much.
Here is the riff for part 1, which is chapters one through five.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1r6gm5aw3piBGxPBhZqDd6ow2tp7S3jU8TiK3YhUdW2k/edit?usp=sharing
2527822 i know i should be angry but i find it actually pretty funny
you honor me sir
2527822 I would like to thank you for the time and effort you placed in writing this riff.
It's really me a lot when someone points out my mistakes.
When I will have the time I will rewrite these chapters, hopefully solving most, if not all these problems.
(and creating new ones of course)
If you make the riff into a fic I will add a link to it.
2528218 chapters 1 to 5 are due for a rewrite
thanks to kalash93 riff I have a good idea of what and why something does not work in these chapters
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It is forbidden to upload riffs as stories. However, they can be posted as blog entries and there are groups that archive riffs. I believe that MrSing is going to put the riff into one such group tomorrow. I am glad that you enjoyed it and took the criticism well. That is more than I can saw for most authors.
2528246 then post it as a blog post and I will link it, or I can add them as chapters at the end and credit you for them, whatever you prefer.
2527822 I just finished reading it and i really enjoyed it.
maybe some of the innuendoes were a bit much...
Maybe if I didn’t kick you in the head, You wouldn’t feel so bad. was brilliant
unfortunately i didn't get the songs but maybe that is just a culture thing or a joke I am missing.
can't wait to see what you do with the rest of the story.
I am not sure if the opinions at the end are yours or just what the characters are saying but either way I appreciate it.
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I'm glad you liked the riff so much, it was very fun to make.
And yeah, we did go a bit overboard with the innuendos. I'll try to cut down on them in the next part. I can't speak for Kalash though.
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I think that it's really cool that you're willing to link our riffs in your own stories. Not many authors would do that, so thank you.
Here's the blog post that I made with a link to the riffing document.
http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/161256/new-riff-spike-the-knight-chapter-15
2530595 2528246 you know "there is no such thing as bad publicity", and I did get a few (a lot actual) good laughs out of it.
case and point, yesterday (for me today for where fimfic is based) i got 355 views (~90 were from 2 cosmetic chapters) but a total of 265 actual chapters were read, beating my previous best of 241 by 24 views.
All this without me releasing a new chapter.
Now I'm not saying that your riff brought me 200+ views, but some of them are thanks to you,
So thanks, and expect an edited version of the first 5 chapters soon
2530617>>2530595
I had great fun riffing it. I'm glad that we could help.
I'm going to continue the innuendos. My specialties are being massively sarcastic and a total perve. As for the humorous criticism, It's fantastic that you take it so well. Oh my...
Indeed, they both have voices in their head. Awesome. With Appblebloom having Zecora, who is Shaman I bet.