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Darkwing Dash


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The story of the Battle with Nightmare Moon is well known, but few ponies know but half the story. The other half was an unseen battle, as Luna struggled to overcome her past choices and past demons. She struggles to overcome the does within her, as well as the ones she made during banishment. But another foe has been waiting for her this whole time. After all, even in Equestria, a monster like Nightmare Moon doesn't just appear out of nowhere.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 4 )

'Nox' is a feminine word (both grammatically and, in this case, metaphorically), therefore it is 'Nox Invicta'.

Thanks, but I do prefer to stay with the original title though. It has a deeper meaning than just the Latin translation.

One free review as promised.

Grammar mistakes found:
Smaller mistakes: 2
Sentences with major flaws: 0
Overall: Good grammar with descriptive words.

Plot and pacing:
Good plot but felt slightly rushed. Try slowing things down a little.

Overall I don't really have much to say about this story, I liked it though.
8 out of 10

Notes:
You need to add some cover art, some tags, and some groups; in that order.
For tags I would recommend [Sad] [Slice of life(?)] and take off [Adventure], maybe. Definitely add [Sad] though.
And if you don't know what groups to add it to I can help you. Just sent me a PM and I'll give you some help.

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