The end of the beginning

Why must stories start at the beginning? Mine? The ending is the beginning. I did not wake up expecting to kill somepony.

(One-shot fiction. This story starts from the ending and works it's way down to the beginning.)

Image by ~ russelh of deviantart.

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ugugg93

ugugg93 #1 · Feb 7th, 2012 · · ·

Reminds me of Momento

Very well done. Not going to lie, I WOULD'VE been surprised, except two minor details:

1) You didn't tag Scoot in the fiction, but tagged instead.
2) You put the main picture as a crying Sweetie Belle.

The way you wrote it led the surprise to be absolutely perfect. The minor details kinda gave it away for me. I suggest tagging at least Scoot and Applebloom as well, and changing the picture to maybe something more vague, like a picture of Fluttershy or something.

Curious

Curious #2 · Feb 7th, 2012 · · ·

I agree with ugugg93. The story picture betrays the ending, and the tags do too. Add more character tags and definitely change the story picture.

Vidhwansak

Vidhwansak #3 · Feb 7th, 2012 · · ·

Hmm, I believe I'll edit this a bit, then!

1. I was under the impression that I could only tag ponies that actually played a role in the story, and seeing as Scootaloo was nowhere to be found in the story at all, I left her out.
2. Well, the intent of the picture was to make people think it was Sweetie Belle, then when readers found out about the scooter and Fluttershy's cottage, would immediately then think it was Scootaloo when it really was Sweetie Belle all along.

I'll be sure to change the few minor details!

Edit: Minor details added.

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