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WriteAboutHorses


I've been watching MLP since 2012, and though I don't consider myself an amazing writer, I love to make something out of the ideas I occasionally get.

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Applebloom never got to meet her parents, heck only one of them only got to see her for about 10 seconds. Applebloom wants answers as to why her parents aren't with her to this day. Is she ready to hear about their fiery doom?

A/N: Cover art is not mine
A/N: Sequel: A Different Kind of Reunion

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Comments ( 16 )

Why.... Just why
Wow.....Just wow
Pinkie wtf crack are you smoaking

I enjoyed it greatly, sad but sweet.

"Mmmmmm! That smells great Ma!" Applejack loved the smell of her mother's apple pies, they always tasted better though.

The last part doesn't really make sense. Maybe it should be

they always tasted better than anypony else's.

Applebloom was crying. "That was a real sad story sis, you could've told me!"

I think it would flow better if it was

"That was the saddest story you could've told me, sis!"

Applejack shouldn't say

I love you guys!

It just sounds not very personal given that it's her parents. I think it would sound better if she said

I love you both so much!

I don't think Applejack and Big Mac as kids should be referred to as foals, since they're clearly older than that. Maybe the Apple siblings or the Apple children. I would describe the hat as leather since this is a world of vegetarian animals, so i doubt they'd use much leather. Plus Applejack's hat is identified as a Stetson most places, so it wouldn't really be made of leather. And while this is a minor nitpick, I think it flows better if it's written as Apple Bloom; plus that give you more words. Phonetically it just sounds better as two words and pretty much every official MLP source has it as Apple Bloom. But that's up to you of course and I really shouldn't complain about that (but this also the internet, lol).

But seriously, that was a good fic. MUSTACHES! :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

A bit rushed, to be honest. Pretty good tho.

Yes, a bit rushed but it was really good. My explanation was that the dad, Jonny Appleseed died in a fire. He died because he was trying to retrieve things at the barn. AJ and her friends knocked over a candle without noticing. Their mom, Apple Melody left the family after giving birth to Applebloom because she felt guilty for letting her husband die. Anyhoo that's my take and not yours! Nice story!
Peace Out,
-Ginger:heart:

I forgot! Four out of five Spikes for you, since you rushed!:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Thanks for all the feedback :pinkiehappy: might so a sequel

:raritycry: W-w-why would you write this?
:raritydespair: Why. I-I-I-I can't handle the crying.
YOU SICK PERSON
Who wrote an amazing story.

Ahem, besides the crying. I like how you rushed it, it made it seem more dramatic and well, busy, which in this case, is a good thing! The ending with the stars is amazing, really shows how symbolic and hurtful their deaths were.
I hope there's a sequel! :pinkiehappy:
B-b-but don't make it too sad :fluttercry:

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Thanks so much! I didn't think it was sad enough to make you cry, I was expecting to cry myself while writing this but didn't. Anyways there will be a sequel eventually, maybe a certain little filly finally gets to meet her parents?

The sequel to this, A Different Kind of Reunion is up now :pinkiehappy:

It was so sad:applecry::pinkiesad2::raritycry:

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Sad in a good way, right? :twilightblush::

Here's a tip, don't read this while listening to Aerith's theme from FFVII :fluttershbad: :raritycry: :applecry:

Okay, normally I don't work well with tears.
But seriously, this story had me choking up a bit on the inside, the closest I've come to "liquid pride".

Great job, man! :fluttercry:

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