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A Bit of Red: A Day in the Life of Big Macintosh

just a normal day in the life of big mac, takes place during ticket masters, or well i tried to make it that way.

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Comedic Arts

Comedic Arts #1 · Feb 7th, 2012 · · ·

i really hope everyone that reads my story enjoys it, if you have any tips or opinions let me know :) i can take criticism

SennenRyu

SennenRyu #2 · Mar 11th, 2012 · · ·

I spotted a bit of a continuity error. Near the beginning, they're conversing about Big Mac hurting himself during applebuck season, but that didn't happen until the next episode past Ticket Master. Unless, that is, you're saying Big Mac is accident prone during that particular time of year, which is fine, if you want to... I guess...

Comedic Arts

Comedic Arts #3 · Mar 11th, 2012 · · ·

310149 lol yeh i thought it looked wrong, but yeh we'll go with that :3

Radical Gopher

Radical Gopher #4 · Nov 27th, 2015 · · ·

As a diary entry, it's not bad. However as a story it lacks a critical element, conflict. Conflict is absolutely necessary to a story be it internal or external to the characters. A character's personality is refined by his or her reaction to the conflict and how they resolve it. Something you might want to keep in mind for your next effort. Keep writing.