My Harshwhinnial

by horizon

Chapetr 2: Twilicorn comes after breakfast

Chapetr 2:

(AN: this is an author's note ok)

The next day I woke up from being asleep. It was sunny so I made it rain on earth ponies. I got up off my exercise mat & drank a bottle of taurine and harsh training. My mat was lined with my Meddles and decorated with stallionly blue medicine balls. I gotup off the mat and took off my spandex which shows off my muscles. Instead of flexign I did wing pushups, 30 self-facebucks, and only 49 house lifts instead of 50 because I was having a bad day. I cried manly tears.

My best sister friend Trixie (AN: if u want to be my prerater which is like an inspector of prereaders then this OC can represent u!) woke up fro my mat and grinned at me. She flipped her long athletic mane and did a workout of her own. 20 hoof curls, 30 luges and she shot a biathlete. We both showered and toweled off but not too much so we could glisten with mucscular exertion. I felt better.

"OMBA I saw u talking to Twilicorn Princess yesterday!" she said excitedly!

"Yeah so?" I said, holding back a manly blush.

"You like her" she said as we went downstairs where mom had made breakfast of victory and stern angst. It tasted like oats.

"No I so bucking don't" I shouted.

"Yeah right!" she said. Just then, Twilicorn ranged the doorbell.

"Hi." she said flirtily.

"Hi." I said flirtily.

"Guess what." she said flirtily.

"What?" I said flirtily.

"You two are so cute" Trixie said flirtily.

"Shut up you're adopted," Twilicorn and I said. We all laughed.

"So"

"Yeah."

"So what do you wanna do today?"

"I dunno"

"Maybe," Twilicorn said we can go inspect Cloudsdale for the upcoming games!"

"oH. mY. bUCKING. aLICORN." I screamed. Cloudsdale is my favorite place to inspect besides Harshwhinnia.

"Well…… do you want to go with me?" she asked.

I gasped.

Comments

[hawthornbunny]

I got as far as 'Chapetr 2' and lost it. XD

[Cynewulf]

This is the greatest thing I have ever read.

I give up at pone horse words

you win

I love you

Keep doing this

[Normal]

Well, the chapter length makes it easy to read

[horizon]

2355982 wat did u loose? i hope u fond it agan

2356805 2357366
+2 postive revues AT +10 i FIC NEW CARPTER!
……I guess bcuz thats' how "My immoral "does it

[FashionablyHospitable]

I thought I could take it

I was wrong

[horizon]

>> fashion Hospital
DO NOT teak my fic...................... i'will rite many arthur's notes taht say

***AN: DO NOT sTALE!!!***

&& add tehm 2 aLL my cjapters

then........ teh only 1 taikng MY fic will b ........................ U!!!!!

[The Elusive Badgerpony]

omfg I findd dis stor 2day an its soooooo cumpelin an dark n moody! mEHdul iz teh coolst colt evuh!!!! i cach up now on all teh capders i miss rn but pls rite mor chpters 4 me 2 red ps vlop chap w/ medull n tricksee pls

Inasofar, this is still more coherent than My Immortal. Hopefully in the coming chapters you find your autistic artistic voice and make it almost entirely unreadable. That said inasofar this is a pretty good adoption of the world's worst fanfic– I just hope eventually it finds a point where it can be a unique bad story and be less of a retelling of My Immortal but with horsies.

[Posh]

(AN: this is an author's note ok)

btw i stil cunnot find mah swetter.

[NOT VIKTOR STRELNIKOV]

I'm your prerater now, change Trixie into me

[PresentPerfect]

now I'm drunk for real

[Moosetasm]

So, several glasses of wine later... and I’m understanding this story a lot moar. Is well wrote say I’s!!?