2767303 It fits in really well with the last chapter...

2767358 YES! I SUCCEEDED!

Is this the end of the story?

2781964 Well, the status says 'Complete', so, yeah.

Damn!

http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=uuTDhLfkYV4

This is an avenged sevenfold song and its perfect for this fic

2818104 Holy crap it is...
also, very sorry for how long it took to respond. When I first saw your comment, I had to leave my computer for a while, and then I completely forgot about it.

2818104 Also, this song is also really amazing:

Finally got around to finishing this. It's a damn shame they all died... Meaning, I loved it. Though, we never did find out what happened to Fluttershy. Last I knew, she was in the garden. Nothing major, but still.
Anyways, once again, good job.

2890202 Oh shit, forgot about Flutters... let's just say she was attacked by zombies in the garden.......

2948668 Thanks man!

In my opinion, it kinda drops later on, so sorry about that, but I'm really glad you're enjoying it!

2948668 Well, I'd have to re-read it to formulate an opinion. You can decide for yourself.

excuse me, I must vomit.... I read 13 chapters of this ... in the span of about an hour... I'm going to be sick... well done you bastard... well done... nice story....

2967185 Thanks.

4261286 It can be hard thinking of an original zombie story. I had my struggles while writing it. But thanks!

4261365 You don't know what Rainbow Factory is? It's a song and also a fan fiction. Both are amazing.

5698356 Well, I couldn't write a novel here, so it did have to move at a pretty quick pace. You are right, however, some parts definitely did seem pretty rushed.

Also, you gotta appreciate the timing here; the first time I check my notifications in almost half a year (as I'm no longer a brony) is the day I get the first comment in 45 weeks on this story. Thanks for reading

Well for what is it...I suppose it's okay. It does feel rushed. And you act as though RD and Soarin are in some sort of relationship but it doesn't feel that way at all and kind of comes out of nowhere. One minute he is just her idol and then there are lines where it's like they are supposed to be a couple. It doesn't really mesh. Some lines are a little...and please don't take offense to this, novice like. Such as calling Pinkie a "depressed psycho pony badass". Due to the pacing we also don't really get to see them become accustomed to what they are doing, killing. RD seems like she has been doing it for years, Pinkie snaps without any real pretense, Soarin's break into what he becomes isn't really understandable since we have literally no insight into his mind and what he is going through. That goes for most of the ponies here.
I see Twilight as being very OOC, she left Ponyville without her friends? She knew what was going on and didn't see to their safety? That isn't like her at all. Things come out of left field a lot here, like the Guards stealing the food and supplies, again no pretense, no build up, and no reasoning just "this thing happens now!". And finally the OCs thrown in here are more padding than anything else, we don't get anything on them other than they're there.
I suppose that is really the biggest problem here, we don't get to know these versions of our ponies, it's a lot of "this thing happens now, this pony snaps now, this pony dies now". I can't feel anything for the deaths because I don't know them well enough as they are in this world you have crafted. Even the conflicts we get within RD's mind are superficial at best and really don't go anywhere. So if you ever come back to this story for an overhaul I hope you take this critique to heart and know that I'm not telling you "This is bad, do it my way." these are legit things I think could help this story out and draw more people into it.

Also I did spot a continuity error, in the first chapter(I think) you said they burned the remains of the Apple Family but later had RD see Big Mac's body.

5823758 I definitely appreciate the critique. For a writer, it's very important to see where we struggle. It's also helpful to see what we're good at, which your review unfortunately left out, but I 100% agree with everything you said. I was barely 13 years old when I wrote this story, and if that sounds like I'm just trying to give an excuse, it's because it is. Previous to Plague in the Land of Equestria, the extent of my writing experience was really only various school papers and short stories I used to jot down in notebooks when I was bored. I read a lot, and I feel like describing things has always been my strong suit when it comes to literature, but when it comes to crafting characters that stay in the reader's mind and affect them throughout the tale, I've never been any good. I still am not, though I'm actively trying to improve in that field. The Soarin x Dash part of this story was not planned in advance, it was more of an impulse thing to include around the middle of the story because I pictured them having a falling-out at the end and killing one another and I liked the idea. The "depressed psycho pony badass" line was meant to be the middle school me's attempt at including a humorous line within a bleak story, which in hindsight embarrasses me quite a bit. As for Twilight being OOC, yeah, I can see that, but I wrote this story pretty much when I first started watching the show. I knew Rainbow Dash was kind of an athletic character and I turned that into the aggressive killing machine she's portrayed as in a very rushed and unprofessional manner, though considering my goal was to make the story very violent and gory, and that making decent characters was a secondary objective that I hardly put an effort into, I think I at least succeeded with the former.

Thank you for taking the time to finish the story, however, despite how broken it is. As the author, nothing really delights me more than people reading it and then taking the time to construct feedback. Your criticism was very constructive and I'll be sure to keep it in mind so as to improve in the future.

My name is KillingFrenzyCreator and I write stories to make people I'm entertaining huuuuuuuuh

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well this whole story is a rough draft with zero prewriting so suck my nuts